Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be natural and use correct words and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases (e.g. "saving is caring", "snakes") and unnecessary repetition. Give one or two specific supporting details and use a linking word. Speak confidently without filler words.

Exemplo: Yes — my parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, at family gatherings they encouraged me to share toys and board games with my cousins, which helped us become close. As a result, I learned to be generous and cooperative.

Sugestão: Use precise vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples and link them. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid odd collocations like "delicious tricks" or "inner circle" if unsure.

Exemplo: I like to share helpful information, especially work-related tips with my colleagues. I also often send interesting articles or easy recipes I find online to close friends, so they can try them too.

Sugestão: Clarify your main point and avoid unintelligible phrases. Give one clear topic sentence, then specific examples (passwords, bank details, medical records) with a linking word. Pronunciation and coherence matter: avoid filler words and garbled fragments.

Exemplo: Personal and sensitive information should not be shared. For example, you should never share passwords, bank card details, or private medical records because doing so could lead to fraud or breaches of privacy.

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct nouns (recipe, not receipt; cider? likely 'sister' or 'friend'), and give one reason using a linking word. Avoid hesitations and filler sounds.

Exemplo: Yes, I recently shared a healthy smoothie recipe with my sister because she has been trying to eat more healthily. I thought the recipe would be useful since it is quick to make and packed with nutrients.

Sugestão: Make a clear, natural response and avoid repetition and contradictory words like "conflict." Give one reason with a linking word and a short example. Keep sentences smooth and fluent.

Exemplo: I usually share good news with my mother first because she is my biggest supporter. For instance, when I got a promotion last year, she was the first person I called and she celebrated with me.

Sugestão: Be specific and use correct vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list 2–3 typical types of news with linking words and short examples. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "cultural objectives" or "planes."

Exemplo: I usually share personal updates such as travel plans, new hobbies, or interesting cultural events. We also often discuss work problems so we can give each other advice and emotional support.

× I remember being encouraged to share my toys and snakes with my cousins during family gatherings to build a strong bond with them.

✓ I remember being encouraged to share my toys and snacks with my cousins during family gatherings to build a strong bond with them.

This sentence mainly has a word choice error ('snakes' should be 'snacks') not a tense error; however the past tense 'remember being encouraged' is correct. Replace 'snakes' with 'snacks' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: read for typos and choose context-appropriate vocabulary.

× I'm quite happy to share my knowledge or useful tips, especially with my colleagues. Besides that, I love sharing this delicious tricks or interesting articles I find online with my inner circle of friends.

✓ I'm quite happy to share my knowledge or useful tips, especially with my colleagues. Besides that, I love sharing delicious tricks or interesting articles I find online with my close circle of friends.

The phrase 'this delicious tricks' mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural 'tricks' and uses 'delicious' inappropriately for tricks. Correct by removing 'this', using plural agreement, and replacing 'inner circle' with the more natural 'close circle'. Suggestion: ensure demonstratives agree in number and choose adjectives appropriate to the noun.

× I believe personal information like passwords or paying details should be keyed private. Also sensitive 6 risks. Does others have a interesting UMM do? You are definitely not suitable for sharing with anyone else.

✓ I believe personal information like passwords or payment details should be kept private. Also, sensitive information and financial risks should not be shared. Other people do not need to know these things; you should definitely not share them with anyone else.

Multiple errors: 'paying details' should be 'payment details'; 'keyed private' is incorrect — use 'kept private'; sentence fragments and unclear phrasing ('sensitive 6 risks', 'Does others have a interesting UMM do?') need rewriting into clear sentences. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('kept private'), avoid numeric typos, and form complete sentences.

× Ultimately, I recently share a read receipt for a healthy smoothie with my ciders. Umm, she's been trying to improve her diet, so I talked that specific receipt would be very, uh, beneficial for her.

✓ Recently, I shared a recipe for a healthy smoothie with my sisters. She has been trying to improve her diet, so I thought that specific recipe would be very beneficial for her.

Errors include wrong tense ('share' should be past 'shared' because 'recently' places it in the past), wrong words ('read receipt' should be 'recipe'; 'ciders' likely 'sisters'); 'talked' should be 'thought'. Also adjust tense consistency: 'she has been trying' is present perfect for a continuing action. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and maintain consistent verb tenses.

× My mother is always the first person to turn to. Uh, she is. She is my biggest supporter, so telling her about my achievements makes the choice feel much more conflict and meaningful to be to me.

✓ My mother is always the first person I turn to. She is my biggest supporter, so telling her about my achievements feels much less conflicting and more meaningful to me.

Problems: unnecessary 'to' after 'turn to' and awkward pronoun/residual words. 'Makes the choice feel much more conflict' is incorrect; use 'feels much less conflicting' and place 'meaningful to me' correctly. Suggestion: simplify sentences, ensure pronoun objects are correct, and use appropriate collocations ('turn to', 'conflicting').

× I usually share cultural objectives or like my travel, planes or new hobbies. We always frequently talked about our struggles at work to seek advice and emotional support from one another.

✓ I usually share cultural experiences like my travels, plans, or new hobbies. We often talk about our struggles at work to seek advice and emotional support from one another.

Errors: 'cultural objectives' is odd — 'cultural experiences' fits better; 'like my travel, planes' should be 'like my travels, plans'; 'always frequently talked' mixes adverbs and wrong tense; use 'often talk' for habitual present. Suggestion: choose collocations ('travel' -> 'travels', 'plans'), avoid redundant adverbs, and maintain present tense for habitual actions.