Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and sentence fragments. Use linking words (e.g., 'so', 'also') and correct articles and plurals.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, I often shared clothes and toys with my younger siblings, and I also shared food with friends, which made social gatherings more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific contrasts using linking words (e.g., 'with', 'however'). Use correct prepositions and concise phrasing; avoid repeating verbs. Mention concrete examples and reasons briefly.

Exemplo: It depends on who I am with. With my best friend I share clothes, a room during trips, and food because we trust each other; however, I avoid sharing personal items like phones or makeup with colleagues for hygiene and privacy reasons.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid fillers ('uh'). Use correct vocabulary ('hygiene', 'valuable items') and provide brief reasons. Structure as topic sentence plus 1–2 concrete reasons with examples.

Exemplo: I think medicines and personal hygiene items should not be shared because they can spread germs and cause allergic reactions. Also, valuable items like watches or phones are risky to lend because they might get lost or damaged.

Sugestão: Keep answers natural and grammatically correct. Use past tense consistently for past events and avoid awkward phrasing. Focus on one main example with a brief reason, and avoid mentioning gossip as a primary sharing example (could be informal).

Exemplo: Yes. At a recent Diwali party I lent a traditional outfit to a friend who didn't have one, so she could join in the celebrations. I also sometimes chat informally with colleagues during breaks, but I don't usually share personal belongings.

Sugestão: Good emotional content — tighten grammar and sentence flow. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one clear reason using linking words. Correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement.

Exemplo: My mother is the first person I would share good news with. When she hears something positive she becomes genuinely happy, and seeing her smile and pride always makes my day.

Sugestão: Organize into a clear contrast between close and casual friends. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'people don't like to hear about bad moments') and concise linking words ('however', 'while'). Provide a brief example for clarity.

Exemplo: It depends on the friendship. With close friends I share both my successes and struggles because we trust each other; while with casual friends I usually only share good news or fun moments since they prefer lighter conversation.

× A lot of time sharing is caring.

✓ A lot of the time, sharing is caring.

The original sentence is missing the article 'the' before 'time' to form the common idiom 'a lot of the time.' Also a comma improves readability. Use the idiomatic phrase 'a lot of the time' when indicating frequency.

× we used to share our clothes and our toys with our little younger brothers and sisters and besides sibling, we used to share our food with our friends

✓ we used to share our clothes and toys with our younger brothers and sisters, and besides siblings, we used to share our food with our friends

"Little younger brothers and sisters" is redundant; use either 'little' or 'younger.' 'Sibling' should be plural 'siblings' to match context. Also remove repeated 'our' before 'toys' for conciseness.

× and it was fun to share our things with them when they were using the same thing.

✓ and it was fun to share our things with them when they were using them too.

The phrase 'using the same thing' is awkward and repetitive. Replace with 'using them too' to match plural 'things' and improve clarity and flow.

× It's kind of a memorable. Event.

✓ It's kind of a memorable event.

The sentence was incorrectly split with a period between 'memorable' and 'Event.' Combine into one sentence and use lowercase for 'event.' This fixes punctuation and sentence fragmentation.

× It totally depends with whom I am.

✓ It totally depends on whom I am with.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'depends.' Also, in informal speech, placing 'with' at the end ('whom I am with') is natural. The original preposition 'with' after 'depends' is incorrect.

× With my best friend I can share room, I can share my dresses and often we share our food because we trust each other and it's really convenient with her to share things.

✓ With my best friend I can share a room, I can share my dresses, and often we share our food because we trust each other and it's really convenient to share things with her.

Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'room.' Also reorder 'convenient to share things with her' to place the preposition after the verb; this improves natural word order. Add commas for clarity.

× However, I'm more cautious with my colleagues and usually don't share personal items.

✓ However, I'm more cautious with my colleagues and usually don't share my personal items.

Add the possessive 'my' before 'personal items' for clarity; while not strictly a tense issue, it's a pronoun/possessive clarification matching the speaker's intent.

× things like medicines or your personal hygiene items are uh, not a good option to share with others because of hygienic region reasons, as well as uh uh, sharing valuable item is not a good idea if somebody loses.

✓ things like medicines or personal hygiene items are not a good option to share with others because of hygiene reasons, and likewise, sharing valuable items is not a good idea in case someone loses them.

Replace 'hygienic region reasons' with 'hygiene reasons.' Remove filler 'uh.' Use plural 'items' for 'valuable items.' Use 'in case someone loses them' for clarity and correct grammar.

× Lately on Diwali party, I have shared my clothes with my friends.

✓ Recently, at a Diwali party, I shared my clothes with my friends.

Use 'recently' instead of 'lately on Diwali party.' Use the simple past 'shared' because the action occurred at a specific past event. Use 'at a Diwali party' for correct preposition and article.

× She didn't have she didn't have the traditional outfit so she borrowed 1.

✓ She didn't have the traditional outfit, so she borrowed one.

Remove the duplicated phrase 'she didn't have.' Spell out the number 'one' and add a comma before 'so.' This corrects repetition and formatting.

× And generally I shared gossip with my colleagues.

✓ And generally, I shared gossip with my colleagues.

Add a comma after 'generally' for natural rhythm. The sentence otherwise is correct in past tense to match 'shared.'

× It's a very usual thing to do when we are free.

✓ It's a very common thing to do when we are free.

'Usual' is grammatical but 'common' is a more natural collocation with 'thing to do.' This improves naturalness and clarity.

× The only first person I can think of to share my good news is my mother because whenever she feels that she becomes really happy, the happiness on her face make my day and I love her smiling and feeling proud.

✓ The first person I would think of to share my good news with is my mother because whenever she hears it she becomes really happy; the happiness on her face makes my day and I love seeing her smile and feel proud.

Remove redundant 'only' before 'first' and rephrase for natural word order. Use 'would think of' and 'share my good news with.' Replace 'feels that she becomes' with 'hears it she becomes.' Correct subject-verb agreement 'makes my day.' Change 'love her smiling and feeling proud' to 'love seeing her smile and feel proud' for natural expression.

× It totally depends on person to person.

✓ It totally depends from person to person.

Use the idiom 'from person to person' rather than 'on person to person.' The original preposition 'on' is incorrect in this fixed expression.

× My close friends I share everything my ups and downs.

✓ With my close friends, I share everything, my ups and downs.

Add 'With' at the start for grammatical sentence structure and commas to separate clauses. This clarifies the relationship between subject and object.

× However with my casual friends I just share good news or happy moment because people they don't like to hear hear bad moments.

✓ However, with my casual friends I just share good news or happy moments because people don't like to hear about bad moments.

Add comma after 'However.' Use plural 'happy moments.' Remove redundant pronoun 'they.' Insert 'about' after 'hear' to complete the verb phrase 'hear about.' Remove duplicate 'hear.'