Dreams— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one brief supporting detail (why you want to go). Use linking words to make it coherent. Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I can remember one dream. It was about visiting Mustang because I’ve seen its stunning mountain scenery in photos and videos. I really want to go there someday to experience the landscape in person.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and make the response structured: state directly whether you share dreams, then add a reason and a short supporting detail using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetitions.

Exemplo: No, I don’t usually share my dreams. However, if someone wants to tell me theirs, I listen carefully because I’m curious about their interests and choices.

Sugestão: Give a clearer opinion with one or two specific reasons and avoid vague phrases and fillers. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct subject-verb agreement.

Exemplo: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings for individuals because they often reflect personal feelings or concerns. For example, a dream about travel might show a desire for freedom, while a stressful dream could reveal anxiety.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give one clear supporting detail about steps or reasons. Fix grammar and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I do want to make my dream come true. For instance, I plan to save money and research travel routes because I have seen amazing photos of Mustang and I want to experience the scenery in person.

× I had a a dream once which was about going to going to Mustang trip which I am willing to go for a long period of time since I have seen the view of it and and from the bottom of my heart I want to.

✓ I once had a dream about going on a trip to Mustang, which I have wanted to take for a long time because I have seen its scenery and I truly want to go.

Problems: duplicate words ('a a', 'going to going to', 'and and') and incorrect noun phrase 'Mustang trip' (needs article and preposition). Also 'willing to go for a long period of time' is awkward and plural/singular misuse of expressions. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use 'a dream' once, use 'a trip to Mustang' or 'a trip to Mustang' with preposition 'on a trip to' and 'have wanted to take for a long time' to express duration. Grammar problem type reference: singular/plural and noun phrase formation.

× No, I really doesn't share a dream uh with others, but if they are themselves interested sharing to me.

✓ No, I really don't share my dreams with others, but if they are interested, they share them with me.

Errors: subject-verb agreement contraction 'doesn't' with 'I' is wrong; pronoun usage 'a dream' should be 'my dreams' to match meaning; 'sharing to me' is incorrect — use 'share with me'; 'they are themselves interested' is awkward. Suggestion: use 'I don't' for 'I', use plural 'dreams' if speaking generally, and 'share them with me' for correct pronoun reference.

× I am a good at listener and I am quite quite bit curious how they are, how their interest and choices are.

✓ I am a good listener and I am quite curious about them, about their interests and choices.

Errors: incorrect article usage 'a good at listener' should be 'a good listener'; 'quite quite bit' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'curious how they are' should be 'curious about them' and 'how their interest and choices are' should be 'about their interests and choices.' Suggestion: remove extra words, use correct noun phrase 'good listener' and 'curious about' plus plural 'interests.'

× Yes, I think the dream have special meaning and hence to a individual people, but uh, because it arises automatically when it has to.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meaning for individuals because they arise automatically.

Errors: 'the dream have' uses singular article with plural verb — should be 'dreams have' or 'the dream has'; 'a individual people' mixes singular and plural; 'hence to a individual people' is incorrect prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use plural 'dreams' and 'individuals' or rephrase as 'for individual people' and simplify clause to 'because they arise automatically.'

× And I felt umm, very happy and uh, sometimes uh, frustrated by seeing a dream or by thinking.

✓ And I feel very happy and sometimes frustrated when I see or think about a dream.

Errors: tense inconsistency: 'felt' (past) with general statement should be present 'feel'; 'by seeing a dream or by thinking' is awkward — use 'when I see or think about a dream.' Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual feelings and use 'think about' for correct collocation.

× Yes, I want to make my dream come true. As I already say once I had a dream of going to Mustang trip because of it because I have already seen the pictures and scenery in different media.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dream come true. As I said, I once had a dream of going on a trip to Mustang because I have seen pictures and scenery of it in various media.

Errors: 'As I already say once I had' mixes tenses and word order; 'going to Mustang trip' wrong preposition and article — use 'going on a trip to Mustang'; 'in different media' more natural as 'in various media.' Suggestion: use 'As I said' and correct preposition 'on a trip to' and 'various media.'

× So I like to make it through one day with my own.

✓ So I would like to make it happen one day on my own.

Errors: 'like to make it through' is incorrect collocation; 'with my own' should be 'on my own' or 'by myself'; missing modal for politeness 'would like.' Suggestion: use 'would like to make it happen one day on my own.'