Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobbies, then give one or two brief reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrases (e.g. "in every motion I try"). Aim for natural collocations like "free time" or "feeling down."

Ví dụ: I have several hobbies, such as skating, hiking and cooking, but my favourite is trying new dishes. For example, when I have free time or feel a bit down, I like to explore recipes from different countries because cooking cheers me up and helps me relax.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific, well-linked details. Correct tense and grammar (use past tense for childhood). Avoid short, fragmented sentences; combine related ideas with linking words like "so" or "because." Provide one clear example instead of vague statements.

Ví dụ: Yes, as a child I enjoyed doing maths and solving calculations. Because my teacher praised me and I often helped classmates with their homework, I became more confident and interested in maths; for instance, I remember once getting a perfect score on a test, which made me proud.

Gợi ý: State clearly that your interest in food started in childhood and explain how it developed into a hobby. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing; use linking words (e.g. "so", "therefore", "since then") and specific examples of cuisines or dishes you tried.

Ví dụ: Yes, I've loved food since childhood, so my interest naturally developed into cooking. For example, I started experimenting with Italian and Indian recipes, trying new spices and techniques to recreate dishes I enjoyed at restaurants.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear direct answer, then contrast your hobbies with your family’s using linking words like "however" or "although." Use natural phrases (avoid "gossiping and kitties"); explain the similarity (eating habits) with a brief example.

Ví dụ: Not all of them. Although my sister enjoys shopping and my mother likes chatting with friends, I'm different and prefer outdoor activities and cooking. However, we all share a love of food and often eat meals together, especially on weekends.

× I do have a lot of hobbies I enjoy doing, skating, hiking, cooking, talking with new people, but my favorite one is trying new dishes.

✓ I have many hobbies I enjoy, such as skating, hiking, cooking, and talking with new people, but my favorite is trying new dishes.

Run-on and list punctuation: original uses 'I do have' (unnatural emphasis) and commas without 'such as' to introduce examples; 'favorite one' is wordy. Use 'have many hobbies' for natural present, introduce examples with 'such as', separate list items with commas and include 'and' before final item, and use 'my favorite is' for clarity.

× So whenever I feel I have leisure time or I'm feeling bored or sad in every motion I try.

✓ So whenever I have free time or feel bored or sad, I try new dishes.

Awkward phrasing and tense redundancy: 'feel I have leisure time' and 'I'm feeling' are verbose and inconsistent. Use simple present 'I have' and 'feel'. 'In every motion' is incorrect; replace with 'I try new dishes' to complete the meaning.

× Being a child I love to do calculations and doing math.

✓ As a child, I loved doing calculations and working on math.

Tense and phrasing: 'Being a child' is awkward; use 'As a child'. The student refers to past habits, so use past tense 'loved'. Use parallel gerunds 'doing calculations and working on math'.

× Solving others homework became my hobby because my teacher appreciated me a lot for my math work.

✓ Solving others' homework became my hobby because my teacher appreciated my math work a lot.

Possessive punctuation missing: 'others' needs an apostrophe to show possession ('others' homework' -> 'others\' homework' but better 'others\' homework' or 'other students' homework'). Also restructure to place adverb 'a lot' after verb phrase and simplify 'appreciated me a lot for my math work' to 'appreciated my math work a lot'.

× How quick I am in math.

✓ I was quick at math.

Fragment and tense: Original is an exclamatory fragment with present tense; needs complete sentence. Use past tense 'was' to match childhood context and preposition 'at' with 'quick'.

× I started liking it a lot and once I got 100%.

✓ I started liking it a lot, and once I got 100%.

Punctuation and clarity: add a comma before 'and'. The tense 'got 100%' is acceptable, but clarify as 'got 100% on a test' if needed. The sentence is otherwise past tense and consistent.

× As a kid I was a big foodie.

✓ As a kid, I was a big foodie.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after the introductory phrase. Tense is correct (past) for childhood.

× I love to try different cuisines, which became which turned out into a hobby as trying cooking new cuisine of different culture and trying and experimenting with with dishes.

✓ I loved trying different cuisines, which became a hobby: I enjoyed cooking dishes from different cultures and experimenting with recipes.

Awkward and repetitive phrasing: tense should be past 'loved' for childhood; 'which became which turned out into' is redundant. 'Trying cooking new cuisine of different culture' is ungrammatical; use 'cooking dishes from different cultures'. Remove duplicate 'with' and use parallel structure 'enjoyed cooking... and experimenting...'.

× I couldn't say all of them as my sister likes to do shopping and I hate to do that and my mom she loves doing gossiping and kitties and I'm totally opposite of her.

✓ I couldn't say we share all hobbies: my sister likes shopping and I dislike it, and my mom enjoys gossiping and kitty-related activities, which I am totally opposite to.

Run-on sentence and awkward wording: split ideas, use colon to introduce contrast, replace 'to do shopping' with 'shopping', 'hate to do that' with 'dislike it'. 'My mom she' is redundant; remove extra pronoun. 'Doing gossiping and kitties' is ungrammatical; clarify 'gossiping and kitty-related activities'. Use 'opposite to' or better 'very different from'.

× But yes in eating habits we all are same.

✓ But yes, we all have the same eating habits.

Word order and missing auxiliary: 'in eating habits we all are same' is unnatural. Use 'we all have the same eating habits' for proper subject-verb order and article 'the'. Added comma after 'But yes' for clarity.