Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid fillers like “uh” and repetition.

Ví dụ: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. However, when I visit the city, I often see many tall, attractive buildings, and I enjoy their modern designs.

Gợi ý: Use natural phrasing and correct verb forms. Give a direct answer, then a specific example using a linking word (e.g., “but” or “however”). Remove fillers and vague phrases like “craze” and “because of you.”

Ví dụ: Not usually. I don’t often photograph buildings, but I will take pictures when a view is impressive—for example, I photographed a historic cathedral last year because its architecture was remarkable.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use correct nouns and adjectives. Start with a clear statement, then give concise reasons and one specific detail. Avoid past perfect where simple past or present is enough, and eliminate fillers.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit the Taj Mahal because a friend recommended it to me. It is famous for its white marble and beautiful gardens, and I want to see its architecture in person.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting reasons. Use correct tense and sentence structure, and replace vague phrases like “great and attached with that” with specific feelings. Use linking words like “because” or “so” appropriately.

Ví dụ: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I grew up in the countryside and I value having a lot of outdoor space. For example, I prefer a house with a garden where I can relax and entertain friends.

× No, because I lived in a countryside, so there are less buildings.

✓ No, because I lived in the countryside, so there are fewer buildings.

Use of article: 'a countryside' is incorrect; 'countryside' as a general area requires 'the countryside'. Countability and quantifier: 'less' is used for uncountable nouns; buildings are countable so use 'fewer'. Also keep past simple 'lived' consistent with context.

× Uh, but whenever I go to city, uh, there I had seen many buildings, uh, they are very beautiful.

✓ But whenever I go to the city, I have seen many buildings there; they are very beautiful.

Preposition and article: 'go to city' needs the article 'the city'. Tense: original used 'had seen' incorrectly for general experiences; present perfect 'have seen' is appropriate for experiences that include the present. Word order: move 'there' after 'buildings' for natural English.

× Uh, no, because I had less craze of clicking photos of buildings.

✓ No, because I had little enthusiasm for taking photos of buildings.

Article/word choice: 'less craze' is unidiomatic. Use 'little enthusiasm' for uncountable feelings. Also 'clicking photos' is informal; 'taking photos' is more natural. Maintain past tense 'had' for past preference.

× Uh, but whenever there was a great view, I I like to click picture because of you, but not on daily basis of life.

✓ But whenever there is a great view, I like to take a picture, but not on a daily basis.

Tense consistency: use present simple 'is' and 'like' for habitual actions. Article: 'a picture' needed. Word choice: 'take a picture' is correct; 'click picture' is informal. Remove 'because of you' which is irrelevant. 'On a daily basis of life' corrected to 'on a daily basis'.

× Yes, I like to visit Taj Mahal, uh, because, uh, my friend had visited that and she had convinced, convinced me to go there to see the beautiness of that.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Taj Mahal because my friend visited it and convinced me to go there to see its beauty.

Article: 'the Taj Mahal' requires 'the'. Modal/tense: 'I like to visit' should be 'I would like to visit' to express desire. Past perfect 'had visited' and 'had convinced' are unnecessary; simple past 'visited' and 'convinced' are correct. Word choice: 'beautiness' is nonstandard; use 'beauty'. Use 'it' and 'its' for pronouns.

× Uh, it contains white marble, so I like to visit that.

✓ It is made of white marble, so I would like to visit it.

Verb correctness: 'contains white marble' is awkward for a building; 'is made of' is better. Article/pronoun: use 'it' rather than 'that'. Modal consistency: 'would like' matches expression of desire.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building as I had spent my 15 years in countryside so I am great and attached with that rather than living in a tall building because tall buildings contain less space, I lived in a large space of area in my home.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I spent 15 years in the countryside and I am very attached to it. Also, tall buildings have less space; I lived in a large house with more space.

Tense and article: 'had spent my 15 years in countryside' should be simple past 'I spent 15 years in the countryside' and include 'the'. Word choice: 'great and attached with that' is incorrect; use 'very attached to it'. Quantifier and countability: 'contain less space' should be 'have less space'. Sentence structure: split into two sentences for clarity and correct 'large space of area' to 'large house with more space'.