Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "look at the trees and the sky" and "sense of how big the world is" overlap). Use one linking phrase to connect the reason (e.g. "because") and a short personal anecdote if helpful. Keep it to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking at trees and the sky because it helps me relax and gives me a sense of space. For example, when I travel I often notice different kinds of trees and weather, which makes the journey more interesting. I also started doing this as a child when I suffered from motion sickness, and it became a comforting habit.

Gợi ý: Reduce filler words and improve coherence: give a direct short answer, then one clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "only when" or "for example" to connect ideas. Avoid repeating negatives at the end.

Ví dụ: Not usually. I only take photos when I see something striking, for example a row of flowering trees or a dramatic sunset. Otherwise I prefer to enjoy the view rather than photographing it.

Gợi ý: Make the preference statement stronger and give specific reasons with one linking phrase. Correct minor grammar ("tend to be" and leave out contradictory phrases). Add a brief example of an activity you enjoy there.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because they are usually cooler and less crowded. I also enjoy trekking there; for instance, I like hiking to viewpoints early in the morning to see the sunrise and fresh air.

× I look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car because I love looking at the trees and the sky and it really gives me a sense of how big the world is at the same time.

✓ I look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car because I love looking at the trees and the sky, and it really gives me a sense of how big the world is.

Run-on sentence and slight redundancy. The sentence mixes two independent clauses without proper punctuation; add a comma before 'and' to join them correctly and remove 'at the same time' which is redundant because 'gives me a sense' already conveys the idea. Use present simple consistently for habitual action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Originally I had this habit of looking out of the window because as a child I had motion sickness.

✓ Originally I developed the habit of looking out of the window because, as a child, I suffered from motion sickness.

Use of 'had this habit' is awkward; 'developed the habit' is more natural. 'Had motion sickness' is understandable but 'suffered from motion sickness' is the standard collocation for past experience. Also add commas around the introductory phrase 'as a child.' Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Not all the time, only when I say uh, beautiful trees or flower blossoms on the way, then I will probably take a picture.

✓ Not all the time. Only when I see, for example, beautiful trees or flower blossoms along the way will I probably take a picture.

Several issues: 'say uh' is incorrect; the verb should be 'see' for noticing scenery. The original is a run-on and uses a less natural word order. Use a period to separate fragments and reorder to 'Only when I see... will I probably take a picture' or 'I will probably take a picture only when I see...'. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Otherwise I don't really take pictures of the sky or of the window every now and then.

✓ Otherwise I don't really take pictures of the sky or the window.

Contradictory adverb usage: 'don't really' and 'every now and then' conflict. Remove 'every now and then' or change to 'very often' depending on intended meaning. Also 'of the sky or of the window' is wordy; 'of the sky or the window' is more natural. Use present simple for habitual action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I prefer the mountains because the weather in the mountainous areas tend to be generally cooler, even not for all the places.

✓ I prefer the mountains because the weather in mountainous areas tends to be generally cooler, though not everywhere.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the weather' is singular, so the verb must be 'tends' not 'tend'. 'The mountainous areas' can be 'mountainous areas' for natural phrasing. 'Even not for all the places' is unidiomatic; use 'though not everywhere' or 'although that is not true for all places.' Grammar problem type ID:27

× I also love trekking.

✓ I also enjoy trekking.

This sentence is grammatically correct but can be made more natural by using 'enjoy' rather than 'love' if aiming for variation; no tense change needed. If leaving 'love' is preferred, the sentence is acceptable. Here, the suggestion improves register and flow. Grammar problem type ID:26