Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “look out,” not “Lookout,” and avoid repeating words).

Ví dụ: Yes — I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me. For example, I often photograph interesting moments with my camera so I can look back at them later and remember how the place felt.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer and use clearer, accurate language. Avoid unnecessary repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., “unuseful building” is awkward — say “ugly” or “unattractive”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect reason and result, and limit to at most five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like to capture sunsets and interesting buildings. This helps me remember trips — later I can look at the images and relive the atmosphere.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “for instance”). Improve coherence by removing filler phrases and ensuring correct collocations (e.g., “feel overwhelmed” vs “overwhelmed” — use “feel relaxed” or “feel peaceful”).

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because its sound and the gentle waves make me feel relaxed. For instance, I enjoy walking on warm sand with water touching my feet and watching small sea creatures, which makes the seaside more appealing to me than the mountains.

× Yes, I do Lookout 'cause that makes me really happy and joyful inside.

✓ Yes, I do look out because that makes me feel really happy and joyful inside.

The original sentence has capitalization and word choice issues and lacks a verb form consistency. 'Lookout' is a noun; the phrasal verb should be 'look out' in lowercase. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. Also 'makes me really happy and joyful inside' is awkward — 'makes me feel really happy and joyful inside' is clearer and grammatically complete. Suggestion: use correct verb phrases and full conjunctions, and include the verb 'feel' to express emotional state.

× And as I told earlier that I love to use use my camera to capture those little moments so that I can replay them in my head again and again.

✓ And as I told you earlier, I love to use my camera to capture those little moments so that I can replay them in my head again and again.

The sentence duplicates the word 'use' and omits the indirect object after 'told'. Include 'you' after 'told' for clarity. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and include the correct object after 'told' (e.g., 'told you earlier').

× Yes, as I told earlier that I had to take the pictures of the scenery that I can see is the most beautiful thing and later I can I can see the sunsets or the unuseful building with my camera so I can replay those moments and the memories later.

✓ Yes, as I told you earlier, I have to take pictures of the scenery I see because it is the most beautiful thing, and later I can review the sunsets or the useless buildings with my camera so I can replay those moments and memories.

Problems: missing 'you' after 'told'; incorrect past tense 'had to' (unnecessary) and awkward clause order. 'Can see is the most beautiful thing' is ungrammatical; use 'I see because it is...' 'Unuseful' is not standard; use 'useless' or 'unattractive'. Duplicate 'I can'. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual actions ('have to' or 'like to') and simplify clauses, remove duplicates, and use correct adjectives.

× I prefer the sea actually 'cause it's so calming, the waves, the sound that it makes, it makes me really overwhelmed and the water touching my feet, the sand and a little like sea creatures roaming around me and it's, I feel cozy and warm there.

✓ I prefer the sea, actually, because it's so calming: the waves and the sounds they make make me feel pleasantly overwhelmed; the water touching my feet, the sand, and the small sea creatures roaming around me make me feel cozy and warm there.

Issues: informal 'cause' should be 'because'; 'the sound that it makes' lacks agreement—'waves' plural so 'the sounds they make'. 'Makes me really overwhelmed' is awkward; 'pleasantly overwhelmed' or 'very moved' is clearer. 'A little like sea creatures' is unclear; use 'small sea creatures'. Also punctuation needs fixing to separate ideas. Suggestion: ensure adjective agreement with noun number, avoid informal contractions in formal responses, and use clearer descriptive phrases.

× So that's the only reason that I love seeing more than the mountains.

✓ So that's the main reason I prefer the sea to the mountains.

The original is awkward and non-idiomatic: 'love seeing more than the mountains' is unclear. Use comparative structure 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer the sea to the mountains.' Also 'only reason' can be kept but 'main reason' sounds more natural. Suggestion: use standard comparative phrasing: 'prefer A to B'.