Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장은 답변의 주제를 바로 제시했으나, 반복과 어색한 표현이 있어 자연스럽지 못합니다. 문장 길이를 3~4문장으로 유지하고 중복된 단어(예: "I I", "when I")를 제거하세요. 또한 ‘other people’에 대한 설명이 모호하므로 구체적으로 누구의 모습을 찍는지(예: 친구, 가족, 등산객)와 이유를 덧붙이면 내용이 풍부해집니다. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 이유와 예시를 명확히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because photography is one of my main hobbies. For example, when I go hiking I often capture mountain panoramas and the sunrise. I also take candid shots of fellow hikers to remember the atmosphere, because these images help me relive the experience.

Gợi ý: 주제를 명확히 제시했지만 문법적 연결과 표현이 어색합니다('I'm not because...'은 불완전). 이유를 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 정리하세요. 불필요한 중복('busy, busy')을 제거하고 도시의 특성과 대비되는 시골의 장점을 구체적으로 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ví dụ: I generally prefer rural areas because they are quiet and less crowded. For instance, I enjoy the fresh air and open landscapes in the countryside, which are much more relaxing than the noisy and complicated streets of a city.

Gợi ý: 솔직한 답변은 괜찮지만 불필요한 말('I'm a bit shy to say this')은 제거하고 문장을 간결히 하세요. 또한 일본의 구체적 특징(예: particular mountains, cherry blossoms, lakes)이나 이유(문화적 차이, 자연의 다양성)를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다. 마지막 문장('I'd love to')는 불완전하므로 완전한 문장으로 마무리하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer scenery in other countries, especially Japan, because it offers a mix of dramatic mountains and tranquil lakes. For example, visiting places like Mount Fuji or Lake Kawaguchi gives me memorable views and a sense of calm, so I often choose international trips to experience different landscapes.

× Whenever I'm when I go outdoors and go hiking, I I really love to take pictures of beautiful scenery and other people they're having their feel who are.

✓ Whenever I go outdoors and go hiking, I really love to take pictures of beautiful scenery and of other people who are enjoying themselves.

The original sentence contains redundant words and incorrect clause order making the verb forms and relative clause incorrect. Remove the extra 'I'm' and duplicate 'I', place the relative clause correctly as 'other people who are enjoying themselves' (present participle 'enjoying' correctly describes ongoing action). Also use 'of other people' for parallel structure with 'pictures of beautiful scenery'. Suggestions: eliminate redundant words, use correct relative clause order, and use present participle 'enjoying' to describe simultaneous action.

× I'll say I generally prefer rural areas compared to urban areas. I'm not because the busy, busy and complicated cities are not my thing.

✓ I'd say I generally prefer rural areas to urban areas because busy, complicated cities are not my thing.

The original has awkward phrasing and sentence fragments. Use conditional 'I'd say' or 'I'll say' consistently; 'prefer A to B' is the correct comparison structure, not 'compared to'. The fragment 'I'm not because...' is incomplete; combine into one sentence with 'because' to explain reason. Remove repeated 'busy'. Suggestions: use 'prefer A to B', avoid fragments, and remove repetition.

× I'm a bit shy to say this, but I prefer the scenery of other countries, especially when I go sightseeing in Japan.

✓ I'm a bit shy to say this, but I prefer the scenery of other countries, especially when I went sightseeing in Japan.

Tense should be consistent: the speaker refers to a past specific experience 'sightseeing in Japan', so past tense 'went' is more appropriate. If referring to habitual visits, present tense could be kept, but given context it reads as a past trip. Suggestion: match tense to whether the action is a past event ('went') or a habitual action ('go').

× I really love the stunning scenery of beautiful mountains and lakes, which is why I love travel.

✓ I really love the stunning scenery of mountains and lakes, which is why I love to travel.

Use 'to travel' instead of noun 'travel' after 'love' for natural collocation; 'stunning scenery of beautiful mountains' is redundant, so drop 'beautiful' or 'stunning'. Suggestions: avoid redundant adjectives and use the infinitive 'to travel' to express purpose or preference.

× I'd love to.

✓ I'd love to, too.

This short answer is acceptable but vague. Adding 'too' clarifies agreement with the previous idea. Also ensure context: if speaker means 'I'd love to travel', complete the idea: 'I'd love to travel there.' Suggestion: complete short responses when possible for clarity.