Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my favorite beer is nature. Nature is nature. Makes me really comfortable.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
I like view in other areas I like I like now such as building towers and stuff like that. I my favorite building is. Abhinav Harukas, do you know Abenakas?
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
I like viewing my own country it because Japan is my hometown. It feel it makes me comfortable and. Great feeling.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 回答が不自然で語彙の誤用("beer"→"thing/subject")や文法の省略が見られます。まずは主題文を明確にし、理由を一つ述べてから具体例を付け加える練習をしてください。また、冗長な繰り返しを避け、文を完全な主語と動詞で構成することを意識しましょう。発音や流暢さの向上のために短めの正しい文をゆっくり練習すると効果的です。
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love nature. For example, I often photograph mountains and forests since they make me feel relaxed and peaceful.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: 答えがつながらず、繰り返しや中断が多いです。まずは短い主旨文で好み(urban or rural)をはっきり述べ、その後に具体的な例や理由を一つだけ付け加えてください。固有名詞は正確に発音・表記する練習をし、知らない語を言うときは簡潔に説明できると良いです。接続語(for example, because)を使って文を滑らかに繋ぎましょう。
Ví dụ: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of city architecture. For example, I like skyscrapers such as Abeno Harukas in Osaka because their height and design are impressive.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 答えは概ね意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤り(時制・主語一致)や語順の乱れ、短すぎる文で情報が少ない点を改善してください。まず主旨文で好みを述べ、次に具体的な理由を2つほど示すと良いです。接続詞(because, so)を使って理由を明確に述べ、感情表現は一文にまとめる練習をしましょう。
Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because Japan feels like home. For instance, familiar landscapes such as local parks and temples make me feel comfortable and relaxed.
× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my favorite beer is nature.
✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because my favorite thing is nature.
The word 'beer' is incorrect in context; it should be a noun like 'thing' or 'subject'. This is a word choice error (treated here as an adjective/adverb misuse category because it affects meaning). Replace 'beer' with 'thing' or 'subject' to convey that nature is the speaker's favorite interest.
× Nature is nature.
✓ I love nature.
'Nature is nature' is a tautological and unnatural sentence in this context. It does not convey the intended meaning. Use a clear declarative sentence such as 'I love nature' to express preference.
× Makes me really comfortable.
✓ It makes me feel really comfortable.
This fragment lacks a subject and uses 'Makes' without 'It' as the subject. Also 'feel' is needed to express the state. Add 'It' and 'feel' to form a complete sentence: 'It makes me feel really comfortable.'
× I like view in other areas I like I like now such as building towers and stuff like that.
✓ I like views in other areas, such as buildings, towers and things like that.
'View' should be plural 'views' to match general preference. 'Building towers' is awkward; use plural nouns 'buildings' and 'towers'. 'Stuff like that' is informal; 'things like that' is clearer. Also add commas for readability.
× I my favorite building is. Abhinav Harukas, do you know Abenakas?
✓ My favorite building is Abeno Harukas. Do you know Abeno Harukas?
The original is fragmented and misspells the building name. Combine parts into a full sentence: 'My favorite building is Abeno Harukas.' Then ask the question clearly. Correct the proper noun to 'Abeno Harukas.'
× I like viewing my own country it because Japan is my hometown.
✓ I like viewing my own country because Japan is my hometown.
Remove the extra 'it' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. The present tense 'like' and 'is' are appropriate; just delete the unnecessary pronoun.
× It feel it makes me comfortable and. Great feeling.
✓ It makes me feel comfortable and gives me a great feeling.
The original has incorrect verb forms and fragmented clauses. Use 'It makes me feel' (correct subject-verb and verb form) and 'gives me a great feeling' to complete the thought. Combine into one coherent sentence.