Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “a hobby,” “when I see a beautiful scene”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I have enjoyed photography since childhood, because my father bought me a camera and I learned to capture interesting scenes. For example, I often stop to photograph rivers and mountain ridges when I travel, so I have a small collection of landscape photos.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however') correctly, and provide specific examples or comparisons. Correct singular/plural and article misuse (e.g., 'urban areas', 'green spaces').

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they offer wide open skies and abundant greenery, which make sunrises and sunsets more vivid. In contrast, urban areas are often dominated by buildings, so views are more limited and less peaceful. For instance, I enjoy photographing misty fields at dawn rather than crowded city streets.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a direct answer, then add a specific reason or an example. Avoid excessive religious phrasing unless it's relevant; focus on clear vocabulary and sentence structure (e.g., 'every view' not 'every every').

Ví dụ: I enjoy views both at home and abroad because each place has unique landscapes and cultural features. For example, I loved the coastal cliffs I saw while traveling, and at home I appreciate the nearby hills—both make me feel grateful for nature's variety.

× Absolutely, taking pictures of different views is my favorite type of hobbies.

✓ Absolutely, taking pictures of different views is my favorite hobby.

The phrase 'favorite type of hobbies' uses incorrect quantification and redundancy. Use 'hobby' (singular) after 'favorite' to express a single preferred activity. Suggestion: say 'my favorite hobby' or 'one of my favorite hobbies' if you mean one among several.

× Since I was young I asked my father to buy me a camera to whenever I came across a scene I make sure to capture it.

✓ Since I was young I have asked my father to buy me a camera so that whenever I come across a scene I make sure to capture it.

Tense and sentence structure are inconsistent. 'Since I was young' requires present perfect ('have asked') for a continuing past-to-present action. 'To whenever' is incorrect; use 'so that' or 'so I could' and use simple present 'come across' for general habit. Also 'I make sure to capture it' is fine after correcting tenses.

× And up until I grew up I still do this hobby and practice it whenever I say beautiful scene and make sure I capture it.

✓ Even after I grew up I have continued this hobby and practice it whenever I see a beautiful scene and make sure I capture it.

Tense and verb choice are incorrect. 'Up until I grew up I still do' is awkward; use 'even after I grew up I have continued' to show continuity. 'Say beautiful scene' is wrong verb; use 'see a beautiful scene'. Ensure consistent present perfect for continuing actions and simple present for habitual 'see'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because they have a lot of green spaces, lots of landscape and the sky is very open and vast.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they have a lot of green space, wide landscapes, and the sky is very open and vast.

Use 'green space' (uncountable) rather than 'green spaces' can be acceptable but 'a lot of green space' sounds more natural. 'Lots of landscape' is incorrect: use 'wide landscapes' or 'beautiful scenery'. Also add commas and 'and' for parallel structure.

× However, in urban area which are most of the time spaces with a lot of buildings and less of greenery spaces and.

✓ However, urban areas are usually filled with many buildings and have less green space.

Article and plural errors: use plural 'urban areas' not 'urban area'. 'Which are most of the time spaces' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'are usually filled with'. 'Less of greenery spaces' is incorrect; use 'less green space'. Remove trailing conjunction.

× I appreciate a good view whenever it's in my country or abroad.

✓ I appreciate a good view whether it's in my country or abroad.

Use 'whether' not 'whenever' to express choice/condition between two alternatives. Tense 'it's' is fine; this is a present general statement.

× Every every view and every place is God's creation.

✓ Every view and every place is God's creation.

Redundant repetition 'Every every' is a structural error. Remove the duplicate word to make the sentence grammatical and concise.

× And I feel grateful and blessed to be around beautiful places anywhere in the world.

✓ I feel grateful and blessed to be able to visit beautiful places anywhere in the world.

'Be around beautiful places' is awkward; use 'be able to visit' or 'be near' depending on meaning. 'And' at start is unnecessary; remove for formal correctness. This fixes pronoun/phrase usage to convey intended meaning.

× So it's a important time whenever they become, you come across a beautiful scene to be grateful, to feel blessed, to thank God for his blessings.

✓ So it's an important moment when you come across a beautiful scene to be grateful, to feel blessed, and to thank God for his blessings.

Multiple structural problems: use article 'an' before 'important', not 'a'. 'Whenever they become, you come across' is confused — use 'when you come across'. Use parallel structure with commas and include 'and' before final item. This yields a clear, grammatical sentence.