Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 직접적인 답변은 했지만 문법 오류와 반복이 있고 문장이 길며 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 구체적인 이유와 예시를 한두 개로 정리하고 문장 구조를 간결하게 다듬으세요. 예: 주어-동사-목적어 형태의 명확한 주제문을 말한 뒤, because, so, for example 같은 연결어로 이유와 구체적 상황을 덧붙이세요. 발음상 'I I' 같은 중복을 피하고 'refresh my mind'와 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural scenes when I go hiking because the mountains and forests are very peaceful. For example, last month I took photos of a misty valley that helped me relax and remember the trip.

Gợi ý: 답은 명확하지만 중복과 불필요한 표현이 많고 말 흐름이 어색합니다. 한 번만 이유를 제시하고 'because' 등으로 연결해 간결하게 말하세요. 예시나 구체적 감각(소리, 냄새, 풍경)을 하나 덧붙이면 더 설득력있습니다. 또한 'actually', 'umm' 같은 불필요한 말은 줄이세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because I grew up visiting my grandmother’s house in the countryside, and I feel more relaxed there. For example, the quiet mornings and open fields make me feel calm and free from city noise.

Gợi ý: 답변 의도는 보이지만 표현이 부정확하고 어색한 단어 선택('reviews' 대신 'views')과 반복, 비문이 있습니다. 이유를 더 구체적으로 말하고 linking word(so, because, for example)를 사용해 논리를 정리하세요. 'give you emotions' 대신 'evoke strong feelings'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 쓰고, 구체적 경험을 하나 추가하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel novel and exciting. For example, seeing distinctive architecture or unfamiliar street scenes in a foreign city can evoke strong feelings of curiosity and wonder.

× Yes, of course I really like to take a picture of different views like a review view or Mountain View.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like taking pictures of different views, such as a river view or a mountain view.

The student used the infinitive 'to take' where the gerund 'taking' is more natural after 'like' when referring to hobbies. Also plural 'pictures' fits general activity. 'Review view' seems to be a typo for 'river view' and 'Mountain View' should be lowercase as common nouns. Suggestion: use 'like taking pictures of different views' and pluralize when speaking about the activity in general.

× I think I like a nature so when I go to mountain or hiking I I usually take a picture of that and that make my mind refresh and mental.

✓ I think I like nature, so when I go to the mountains or go hiking I usually take pictures, and that refreshes my mind and improves my mental state.

Multiple issues corrected but only those matched to the provided list are reported: 'a nature' is incorrect; 'nature' is an uncountable noun so no article is needed. 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' or 'the mountain' depending on meaning; 'hiking' needs a verb 'go hiking' or 'go to the mountains'. 'I I' is a repetition. 'take a picture' changed to plural 'take pictures' for general habit. 'that make' is subject-verb disagreement; 'that refreshes' matches singular subject 'that' or better 'they refresh' if plural. Also clarified 'mental' to 'mental state'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and appropriate verbs for habitual present tense.

× I prefer rural areas because actually my grandma house is located in the countryside so umm I've my I feel comfortable when I go to those areas so I prefer the rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas because my grandma's house is located in the countryside, and I feel comfortable when I go to those areas, so I prefer the rural areas.

The original has pronoun and possessive errors: 'my grandma house' should be 'my grandma's house' using the possessive form. Unnecessary words 'actually', 'I've my I' were removed. Suggestion: use the possessive 'grandma's' and keep sentence concise; connect clauses with commas or conjunctions.

× I think I prefer reviews in other countries because they give you emotions from that.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because they give me strong feelings.

'Reviews' is incorrect word choice; should be 'views'. The phrase 'give you emotions from that' is awkward; use 'give me strong feelings' or 'evoke emotions'. Also 'you' changed to 'me' to match speaker perspective. Suggestion: choose correct noun 'views' and use 'evoke' or 'give me' plus a noun phrase.

× When I see the umm, uh, when I see the new buildings or new cars or new people like different looking people, I feel the special.

✓ When I see new buildings, new cars, or people who look different, I feel special.

'Different looking people' should be 'people who look different' or 'people with different appearances'. 'I feel the special' is ungrammatical; use 'I feel special' without the article. Also removed filler sounds 'umm, uh'. Suggestion: omit fillers in formal responses, use correct relative clause 'people who look different' and drop unnecessary article.