Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Absolutely, I really like to take picture in different views, especially when I travel and it really helps me to uh, to remember what I have captured in my umm trips and even I can share it with my friends in social media.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
If I want to be honest with you, I prefer both, but it really depends on my aim and already my moods. Uh, when I prefer to take a photo of uh, like industrial area, I would like to go to the urban, uh, area. And whenever I'm just going to the nature, I prefer rural area.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
I if I want to be honest with you, I really love both because each of them has their natural beauty and each of them can just reveal their nature and heritage.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and repetition, use correct article/noun forms, and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace fillers like “uh” and “umm” with brief pauses, correct “take picture” to “take pictures,” and say where or why you share them.
Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For instance, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to help me remember the trip and to share highlights with friends on social media.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Be more direct and structured: state preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Remove conversational fillers and correct grammar (e.g., “my moods” → “my mood,” “going to the nature” → “going into nature”). Keep to under five sentences.
Ví dụ: I don't have a strong preference; it depends on my purpose and mood. If I want dramatic architecture or industrial scenes, I choose urban areas, but if I want peaceful landscapes and wildlife I go to rural areas.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: Remove redundant phrasing and hesitations, give a clear topic sentence followed by a specific comparison or example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “natural beauty” and “cultural heritage”), and avoid vague phrases like “can just reveal their nature.”
Ví dụ: I enjoy views in both my country and other countries because each offers unique natural beauty and cultural heritage. For example, local landscapes feel familiar and comforting, while foreign scenery often surprises me with different architecture and traditions.
× I really like to take picture in different views, especially when I travel and it really helps me to uh, to remember what I have captured in my umm trips and even I can share it with my friends in social media.
✓ I really like taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel; it really helps me remember what I captured on my trips and I can even share them with my friends on social media.
Multiple issues: use 'like taking' (verb + -ing) instead of 'like to take' is acceptable but consistent 'taking pictures' is more natural; 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural); use preposition 'of different views' and 'on my trips' not 'in my trips' (preposition errors); omit extra filler 'to' after 'helps me' and use simple past 'captured' to match narrative (tense); replace 'in social media' with 'on social media' (preposition); use pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'pictures' (pronoun). Suggestions: use 'taking pictures', pluralize countable nouns, use correct prepositions 'of' and 'on', and use clear pronouns for antecedents.
× If I want to be honest with you, I prefer both, but it really depends on my aim and already my moods.
✓ If I am honest with you, I prefer both, but it really depends on my purpose and my mood.
Problems: 'If I want to be honest with you' is awkward; use 'If I am honest' (present tense idiom). 'aim' is better as 'purpose' or 'intention' in this context (word choice), and 'already my moods' is incorrect—should be 'my mood' (singular) to refer to current state (singular/plural and word order). Suggestion: use natural fixed expressions and correct noun number and order.
× Uh, when I prefer to take a photo of uh, like industrial area, I would like to go to the urban, uh, area.
✓ When I want to take a photo of an industrial area, I prefer to go to an urban area.
Errors: 'prefer to take' is acceptable but 'when I prefer to take' is odd—use 'when I want to take'. Missing articles before 'industrial area' and 'urban area' (article errors) corrected with 'an'. Also simplified word order: 'go to an urban area' instead of 'go to the urban, uh, area'. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable nouns and use clearer verbs ('want' or 'intend').
× And whenever I'm just going to the nature, I prefer rural area.
✓ And whenever I am out in nature, I prefer rural areas.
Errors: 'going to the nature' is incorrect preposition and article; use 'out in nature' or 'in nature'. 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference, or 'a rural area' if singular—context suggests plural. Suggestion: use correct prepositional phrase 'out in nature' and match singular/plural nouns to intended meaning.
× I if I want to be honest with you, I really love both because each of them has their natural beauty and each of them can just reveal their nature and heritage.
✓ If I am honest with you, I really love both because each has its own natural beauty and can reveal its heritage.
Problems: extraneous 'I' at start ('I if I'); replace with 'If I am honest' (idiomatic present). 'each of them has their natural beauty' mixes singular 'each' with plural pronoun 'their'—use singular 'its' and add 'own' for clarity. 'each of them can just reveal their nature and heritage' is wordy and uses plural pronoun; change to 'each can reveal its heritage'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, maintain subject-pronoun agreement for 'each', and use concise phrasing.