Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid hesitations and filler words, and correct subject-verb agreement and word forms (e.g., 'memories', 'make').

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Pictures preserve memories, so when I look at them I feel nostalgic and can recall moments from the past. For example, photos from family trips help me remember small details like the weather and the people I was with.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct prepositions and idioms, and reduce redundancy. Use linking words (for example, because / whereas) and one specific example or sensory detail. Correct phrases like 'feeling the grass under your feet' and 'birds chirping.'

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and natural. For example, walking in the countryside I can feel the grass under my feet and hear wind in the trees and birds chirping, whereas urban areas are usually noisy and full of traffic.

Gợi ý: Organize your answer: state your preference clearly, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'broaden my perspective', 'different cultures', 'visit a country').

Ví dụ: I prefer views in other countries because I want to broaden my perspective and experience different cultures. For instance, visiting Japan would let me see unique temples and local customs, which I haven't experienced in my own country.

× Yes, because most pictures represent memory from the past because the time will never stay in the present.

✓ Yes, because most pictures represent memories from the past since time never stays in the present.

Plural/word choice: 'memory' should be plural 'memories' because 'most pictures' refers to multiple items producing multiple memories. 'Because' repeated is redundant; replace second 'because' with 'since' for variety and clarity. 'Will never stay' is awkward for a general truth; use simple present 'never stays.' Use concise phrasing. Suggestions: change 'memory' to 'memories', avoid repeating 'because', and use simple present for general truths.

× Like memor. Uh, pictures hold memories and makes you feel so nostalgic when you see it.

✓ Like memory. Uh, pictures hold memories and make you feel so nostalgic when you see them.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun agreement: The plural subject 'pictures' requires the plural verb 'make' (not 'makes'). The pronoun referring to 'pictures' should be plural 'them' (not 'it'). Also 'memor' appears to be a fragment; change to 'memory.' Suggestions: use 'make' with plural subjects and match pronouns in number.

× I prefer rural areas because seeing some tall trees and feeling the grass in your feet makes you feel so relaxed and all the noise you can hear is from the wind, the leaves from the trees and the birds that are chip tripping.

✓ I prefer rural areas because seeing tall trees and feeling the grass under your feet makes you feel relaxed, and the only sounds you hear are the wind, the leaves, and the birds chirping.

Word choice and placement: 'some' is unnecessary before 'tall trees.' 'In your feet' is incorrect; use 'under your feet.' 'Makes you feel so relaxed' is acceptable but 'makes you feel relaxed' is more natural. 'All the noise you can hear is from...' is wordy; 'the only sounds you hear are...' is clearer. 'Chip tripping' is a mispronunciation; correct verb is 'chirping.' Suggestions: remove unnecessary words, correct prepositional phrase to 'under your feet', and use 'chirping' for bird sounds.

× Other than the urban areas where you always see the buildings and noisy people.

✓ In contrast, urban areas are full of buildings and noisy people.

Fragment: The original is a sentence fragment beginning with 'Other than' and lacking a main clause. Rewriting as a complete sentence gives clear comparison with the previous sentence. Suggestions: avoid fragments; ensure each sentence has a subject and a verb.

× I prefer other countries because I want to expand my I don't know, state of view because I haven't really seen the other culture cultures of other countries and I want to feel the feeling that I have successfully appeared on that country.

✓ I prefer other countries because I want to expand my point of view; I haven't really experienced the cultures of other countries, and I want to feel as if I have successfully visited them.

Multiple issues: 'expand my I don't know, state of view' is unclear; 'expand my point of view' is the correct phrase. 'The other culture cultures of other countries' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'the cultures of other countries.' 'I want to feel the feeling that I have successfully appeared on that country' is nonstandard; use 'feel as if I have successfully visited them.' Use plural pronoun 'them' for 'countries.' Suggestions: use set phrase 'point of view', avoid redundancy, use 'visited' for being in a country, and match pronouns in number.