Teachers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammar mistakes and use one or two specific details. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “for example” or “because.”

Ví dụ: Yes. My favorite teacher was my childhood maths teacher because she was elegant and inspiring. For example, I admired the way she dressed in a sari and carried herself with confidence, so I would imitate her at home. Her calm attitude made me respect learning.

Gợi ý: Organize thoughts logically and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, explain reasons briefly using linking words (e.g. “however,” “therefore”), and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because teaching has been my lifelong dream. However, due to my current professional commitments I cannot do it full-time now. Therefore, when I retire I plan to volunteer and teach people who lack access to education because of financial barriers.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details (examples of what she taught or how she influenced you). Use linking words like “for instance” or “because” to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, my English teacher left a lasting impression on me because of her thoughtful conversations and clear explanations. For instance, she encouraged critical thinking by asking open questions, which helped me gain confidence and improve my speaking skills. I still remember her lessons and style of teaching.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and unclear vocabulary, and be more precise. Begin with a direct answer, then give a brief, specific reason. Avoid odd or unclear words (e.g. “lemonade oriented”). Use linking words like “however” or “but.”

Ví dụ: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers. However, I keep in contact with one or two teachers from higher education because they live nearby, and we meet occasionally on Teacher’s Day or at other local events.

Gợi ý: Be concise and use clearer phrasing. Start with a direct statement of how she helped you, then give a specific example of when you used her advice. Use linking words such as “because” or “so.”

Ví dụ: She taught me to stay calm when I face difficulties, which has helped me perform better under pressure. For example, during exams I now take a deep breath and try to understand the question calmly instead of panicking, and this approach has improved my results.

× Yes, since my childhood I have a favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, since my childhood I have had a favorite teacher.

The speaker refers to a continuous state from childhood to now; use present perfect 'have had' to show possession that started in the past and continues to the present. Use 'have' + past participle for correct tense.

× She used to be my maths teacher and she was a very elegant lady who used to dress up in a sari.

✓ She was my math teacher and she was a very elegant lady who used to dress in a sari.

'Used to' is correct for past habitual actions, but 'be my maths teacher' is better as 'was my math teacher' for simple past. 'Dress up in' is often used for special occasions; 'dress in' is more natural here. Also use 'math' or 'maths' consistently depending on variety; changed to 'math' for fluency.

× And I always used to get admired by her, by her go back home and you know, just dress up in a saree from with from my mom's wardrobe and behave as if I am her.

✓ I always used to admire her; when I went back home I would dress in a saree from my mom's wardrobe and behave as if I were her.

Original mixes passive/active incorrectly ('get admired by her' vs intended 'admire her') and has awkward phrasing. Use 'admire' (active), use past habit 'used to' or 'would' for repeated past actions. Use 'when I went back home' for clear sequence. Use subjunctive 'were' after 'as if' to indicate unreal/imagined role.

× Yes, I think that has been my childhood dream.

✓ Yes, I think that has been my childhood dream.

Sentence is acceptable, but if speaker still holds the dream, 'has been' is correct. No change needed; kept for clarity.

× I always have wanted to be a teacher and but just because of my other commitments professionally, I'm not Somehow I could not be in this line.

✓ I have always wanted to be a teacher, but because of my other professional commitments I could not enter this line of work.

Use 'have always wanted' (present perfect with adverb placement before past participle). Remove redundant 'and but'. 'Professionally' should be 'professional commitments'. 'Could not be in this line' is awkward; use 'could not enter this line of work'.

× But I always aim to be a teacher whenever I get retired just for my passion.

✓ But I always aim to be a teacher when I retire, purely out of passion.

'Whenever I get retired' is unidiomatic; use 'when I retire'. 'Just for my passion' is awkward; use 'purely out of passion'. Keep simple future intention.

× Maybe I could teach some people who don't have access to education because of the financial issues, but when I retire, I'm definitely going.

✓ Maybe I could teach people who don't have access to education because of financial issues; when I retire, I'm definitely going to do that.

'Could' is okay for potential future action but clarify intent with 'might' or 'could'. 'Financial issues' doesn't need 'the'. 'I'm definitely going' is incomplete; use 'I'm definitely going to do that' or 'I definitely will'.

× One teacher who has made a mark in my personality while I was growing up is my English teacher.

✓ One teacher who made a mark on my character while I was growing up was my English teacher.

Use simple past 'made' for a past influence. 'Made a mark on my personality' is awkward; 'made a mark on my character' is more natural. 'Is my English teacher' changes to 'was' because referring to past role.

× I was really admired the way she talked, the way she talked.

✓ I really admired the way she spoke.

Original incorrectly uses passive 'was really admired' instead of active 'admired'. Remove repetition and use 'spoke' for past tense.

× She was such a simple lady but had so much of depth when she was discussing anything with us that it'll tell date.

✓ She was a very simple lady but had a great deal of depth when discussing anything with us; I still remember it today.

'So much of depth' is incorrect; use 'a great deal of depth'. 'It'll tell date' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'I still remember it today' conveys intended meaning. Use past continuous 'when discussing' for habitual past action.

× I cannot forget what she taught me, so I really definitely remember her.

✓ I cannot forget what she taught me, so I definitely remember her.

Remove redundant adverbs 'really definitely'; 'definitely' alone suffices. Tense usage 'cannot forget' and 'taught' is correct.

× No, I not in touch with my primary school teachers, but yes, I'm in touch with one or two of my higher education teachers because they stay near to my town and we often meet once a while on the teachers day or in any occasion which is a lemonade oriented.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers, but I am in contact with one or two of my college teachers because they live near my town and we often meet once in a while on Teachers' Day or on other occasions.

Add missing auxiliary 'I'm not'. Use 'in contact' rather than 'in touch' is okay but keep 'in touch' corrected to 'I'm not in touch'. 'Higher education teachers' becomes 'college teachers' for natural phrasing. 'Stay near to my town' -> 'live near my town'. 'Once a while' -> 'once in a while'. 'Teachers day' -> 'Teachers' Day'. Remove unclear phrase 'lemonade oriented'.

× My favorite teacher has helped me to learn that it is always good not to panic and just to breathe in and then grasp something which you are not getting on 1st go.

✓ My favorite teacher taught me that it's always best not to panic, to breathe, and then to grasp something you don't get on the first try.

Use simple past 'taught me' for a past action. 'Breathe in' is fine but 'breathe' is more natural here. 'On 1st go' is informal; use 'on the first try'. Use parallel infinitives 'to breathe, and to grasp'.

× She has been with me. Her thought has always been with me whenever I am doing anything.

✓ Her guidance has stayed with me; her advice has always been with me whenever I do anything.

'She has been with me' is vague; clarify as 'her guidance has stayed with me'. 'Her thought has always been with me' is awkward; 'her advice' or 'her teachings' is better. Use simple present 'whenever I do anything' for habitual actions.