Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Thí sinh
Then sad music. I like happy music. In the night I listen to happy music. I have a breakfast and look book. My more is very good over this day. I go to the bed listen to happy music is have a good day.
Giám khảo
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Thí sinh
Yes, happy music can make me more excited in the morning and listen to happy music, have a dinner on this day is very happy, I can make anyway anymore with my friend. Listen to happy music is very exciting.
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Điểm: 38.0Gợi ý: 总体上回答不够清晰且有许多语法和表达错误。建议: 1) 直接给出明确的立场(主题句),例如:I prefer happy music. 或 I prefer sad music. 2) 使用1–2个简短的支持句说明原因,注意时态和主谓一致,例如说明何时听音乐和它带来的感受。 3) 控制长度在1–3句内,避免无关细节或重复。 4) 使用连接词(for example, because, so)让句子更连贯。 具体改进点:纠正语法(例如:'In the night'改为'in the evening'或'at night';'I have a breakfast and look book'改为'I have breakfast and read a book';'My more is very good over this day'不通,应改为 'It makes my day better');将动作时态和主语统一。
Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, I often listen to upbeat songs in the evening while I have dinner or read, and they make my day feel more positive.
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Điểm: 42.0Gợi ý: 回答表意能被理解但句子结构混乱、重复且有多处错误。建议: 1) 开门见山回答(Yes/No)并紧接原因或例子,例如:Yes, because... 2) 使用清晰的连接词(for example, when, so)组织支持信息;避免重复同一意思。 3) 注意语法和词序(例如 'in the morning and listen to happy music' 应改为 'I listen to happy music in the morning';'have a dinner' 改为 'have dinner')。 4) 提供具体场景来丰富回答(什么时候、和谁、做什么)。
Ví dụ: Yes. Happy music often makes me feel more energetic because of its fast tempo. For example, I usually play upbeat songs in the morning while getting ready, and that helps me feel excited and ready to meet friends.
× Then sad music.
✓ I prefer sad music.
句子结构不完整,原句缺少主语和谓语。应使用完整表达 “我更喜欢悲伤的音乐”,因此改为“I prefer sad music.”。建议:写完整句子,包含主语和谓语,符合回答偏好问题的格式。
× I like happy music.
✓ I like happy music.
此句为一般现在时,表示习惯或喜好,语法正确。仅保留原句,无需修改。解释:表达喜好用一般现在时,无人称或数的特殊变化。
× In the night I listen to happy music.
✓ At night I listen to happy music.
介词使用不当,应使用固定搭配“at night”表示在夜间。建议:记住时间短语常用固定介词,如 at night, in the morning, on Monday 等。
× I have a breakfast and look book.
✓ I have breakfast and read a book.
“breakfast” 在此为不可数名词,前面不加不定冠词“a”;且动词“look book”不正确,应为“read a book”。建议:早餐用“have breakfast”,阅读一本书用“read a book”。
× My more is very good over this day.
✓ My mood is very good today.
原句词序和用词错误,“more” 用错,应该是 “mood”(情绪)。“over this day” 非英语自然表达,改为“today”。建议:注意词汇选择和时间状语的自然表达。
× I go to the bed listen to happy music is have a good day.
✓ When I go to bed and listen to happy music, I have a good day.
原句缺少连词和正确时态结构,且“go to the bed” 中 the 不需要。改为复合句,用从句或并列结构连接动作和结果。建议:使用连词(when, and, so)连接句子成分,并省略不必要的冠词。
× Yes, happy music can make me more excited in the morning and listen to happy music, have a dinner on this day is very happy, I can make anyway anymore with my friend.
✓ Yes. Happy music can make me more excited in the morning. When I listened to happy music and had dinner that day, I felt very happy and could do things with my friends.
原句存在时态混乱、连词缺失、词序和词汇错误。将句子分成几句,统一时态(过去时描述过去的活动),修正短语“have a dinner”应为“have dinner”,并用自然连接词。建议:一句表达一件事,注意时态一致,使用合适的连接词。
× Listen to happy music is very exciting.
✓ Listening to happy music is very exciting.
动名词用法错误。作主语时应使用动名词形式“Listening”。建议:当动词作为名词使用(作主语或宾语)时加 -ing。