Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail. Avoid filler words (“uh”, “I think”) and unnecessary repetition. Try: give the time frame, a clear description, and a brief comment about a memory or why you liked it.

Ví dụ: Yes. I had a yellow bike when I was a child. I loved it because it was light and easy to ride, and I used to cycle to the park every weekend with my friends.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g., “awful” seems wrong) and remove fillers. Use vocabulary accurately (e.g., “brands”, “models”, “commute”, “electric bikes”, “shared bikes”).

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use electric bikes and shared-bike services to commute short distances, and manufacturers have introduced new models with better batteries and safety features, which makes cycling more convenient.

× I was a child, I had a bike and uh, it was yellow I think.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike, and it was yellow, I think.

The original sentence is understandable but has a minor sentence structure issue and punctuation that affects clarity. 'I was a child' should be ordered as 'When I was a child' to show the time frame clearly. Also add commas to separate clauses. Use consistent tense (past) which is appropriate for talking about childhood events. Suggestion: Start with 'When I was a child' and separate clauses with commas to improve clarity.

× Yes, of course it's very popular now they also, you know, awful and some brand small bike.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are very popular now; there are also some small, low-quality brands of bikes, you know.

The student used 'it's' (it is) which does not agree with the plural subject 'bikes'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. The phrase 'awful and some brand small bike' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to 'some small, low-quality brands of bikes' to convey intended meaning. Also split into two clauses with proper punctuation. Suggestion: Use plural verb forms for plural subjects (bikes are) and order adjectives correctly ('small, low-quality brands').

× There are electric bikes and upgraded uh using new technology for skin to write A to B, you know uh it's.

✓ There are electric bikes and upgraded ones using new technology to travel from A to B, you know.

The phrase 'upgraded uh using new technology for skin to write A to B' misuses words and adjective forms. 'Skin' and 'write' are incorrect word choices. 'Upgraded ones' is a clearer noun phrase referring back to 'bikes'. Use the infinitive 'to travel' to express purpose/destination. The corrected sentence fixes adjective usage and word choice. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases ('upgraded ones') and correct verbs to express purpose ('to travel from A to B').