Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 시제 사용을 정리하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 구체적으로는 주제를 바로 밝히는 중심 문장(예: Yes, I owned a bike.)을 말한 후, 과거 이유를 설명할 때는 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요. 또한 ‘I didn't want to learn it’ 같은 표현 대신 이유를 더 명확히 (예: I was afraid of falling) 설명하면 점수를 올릴 수 있습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I never learned to ride it because I was too cautious and afraid of falling. As a result, I mostly used it as a decoration in the garden rather than for riding.

Gợi ý: 더 명확한 주제문을 말한 뒤, 구체적인 증거를 연결어로 조직하세요. 불필요한 채움말(MMM, well) 은 줄이고, 복수형과 시제 일치를 확인하세요 (‘in the park’ 와 ‘riding’ 사용). 또한 통계나 개인 경험 같은 구체적 예시를 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people commute to work by bicycle, especially in the city centers, and I often see families and students riding bikes in the park at weekends.

× So I'm I don't want, I didn't want to learn it.

✓ So I didn't want to learn it.

The sentence contains redundant and conflicting auxiliary verbs ('I'm' and 'I don't') causing a sentence structure error. Use a single past-tense negative 'didn't want' to match the earlier past context. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I'm' and 'I don't' and keep 'I didn't want to learn it.'

× MMM, well, I think so, because I can see many people who commute to work by riding a bike, and there are many people on the park who riding a bike.

✓ MMM, well, I think so, because I can see many people who commute to work by riding a bike, and there are many people in the park who are riding bikes.

Multiple present-tense and preposition errors: 'on the park' should be 'in the park' (incorrect use of prepositions). 'who riding a bike' lacks the auxiliary 'are' and should use progressive form 'are riding' (verb in present participle form). Also 'a bike' after 'many people' is better as plural 'bikes' (singular/plural issue). Suggestions: use correct preposition 'in', include auxiliary 'are' before present participle, and use plural 'bikes' when referring to many people.