Part 1
Giám khảo
Did your parents teach you to share when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, when I was a little child, my parents told me that I should share my good things to others before I went to the primary school. So I often took some snacks from my home to school and shared them with my classmates.
Giám khảo
What kind of things do you like to share with others?
Thí sinh
Well, actually I have shared a lot of things to others, for example the books, snacks or some makeups. But I don't want to share my private things to others, for instance my underwears.
Giám khảo
What kind of things are not suitable for sharing?
Thí sinh
Uh, in my opinion I think the most of the personal items are not suitable for sharing. For instance the mobile phone and underwears. It has some privacy concerns in this field.
Giám khảo
Do you have anything to share with others recently?
Thí sinh
Yes, I bought some scary games on the Steam website and I just shared them with my cousins last week because we are all interested in this kind of games.
Giám khảo
Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?
Thí sinh
Uh, absolutely my mom. Since my parents divorced at my early age, my mom has become the most importantly person in my life, so I always want to share my news to her as a first time.
Giám khảo
What kind of news do you share with your friends?
Thí sinh
Well, I always share different kinds of news to my friends, concludes the good news and the bad news. For instance, when I got a prize or I broken up with my ex-boyfriend, I always told them.
Did your parents teach you to share when you were a child?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答直接且含有例子,但语言有语法和表达不自然的问题,应注意时态与搭配,避免冗长重复。可把句子拆成主题句和一到两句具体细节,使用连接词使结构更清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was young. For example, before I started primary school I often took snacks to class and shared them with my classmates, which helped me make friends.
What kind of things do you like to share with others?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答包含类别与限制,但用词和搭配有误(e.g. 'shared a lot of things to others', 'makeups', 'underwears'),需用更准确的名词和复数形式;避免过于直白或不必要的词。
Ví dụ: I usually share everyday items like books, snacks and cosmetics with friends. However, I avoid sharing personal items such as underwear or intimate belongings because of hygiene and privacy concerns.
What kind of things are not suitable for sharing?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 观点明确但表达不够地道,存在语法小错误('the most of', 'underwears', 'It has some privacy concerns in this field');建议用更自然的连词说明原因并给具体例子。
Ví dụ: I think personal items are generally unsuitable for sharing. For instance, phones and underwear can raise privacy and hygiene issues, so I prefer not to share them.
Do you have anything to share with others recently?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答信息清楚且有时间细节,但有小的搭配问题('this kind of games'),可用更自然的表达并加入简短感受或结果以丰富内容。
Ví dụ: Yes. I recently bought some horror games on Steam and shared them with my cousins last week because we all enjoy that genre. We played together and had a lot of fun.
Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?
Điểm: 66.0Gợi ý: 情感表达真挚,但句子有语法和表达问题('most importantly person', 'share my news to her as a first time'),建议用更自然的短句说明原因并避免多余信息。
Ví dụ: Definitely my mother. My parents divorced when I was young, so she has been the most important person in my life and I always want to tell her good news first.
What kind of news do you share with your friends?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答涵盖正反两面,但语法错误较多('share news to', 'concludes', 'I broken up', 'I always told');建议使用正确时态与动词搭配,并补充一句说明朋友带来的支持或反应。
Ví dụ: I share all kinds of news with my friends, both good and bad. For example, I told them when I won an award and when I broke up with my ex, because they offered support and advice.
× Yes, when I was a little child, my parents told me that I should share my good things to others before I went to the primary school.
✓ Yes, when I was a little child, my parents told me that I should share my good things with others before I went to primary school.
错误类型:过去时/介词使用混合问题(以“to others”为主)。这里主要是介词用法不正确,应使用“share ... with someone”。此外,原句“the primary school”在一般陈述中可省略定冠词。建议:记住固定搭配“share something with someone”;在泛指学校时说“primary school”。
× So I often took some snacks from my home to school and shared them with my classmates.
✓ So I often took some snacks from home to school and shared them with my classmates.
错误类型:动词短语/介词使用问题。“from my home to school”中“my”可省略,更自然为“from home to school”。建议:日常表达中用“from home to school”更简洁自然。
× Well, actually I have shared a lot of things to others, for example the books, snacks or some makeups.
✓ Well, actually I have shared a lot of things with others, for example books, snacks or some makeup.
错误类型:介词和名词形式错误。应使用固定搭配“share ... with ...”而非“to others”;“the books”及“some makeups”不自然,books和makeup不需定冠词或复数形式。建议:用“with others”;“makeup”作为不可数名词。
× But I don't want to share my private things to others, for instance my underwears.
✓ But I don't want to share my private things with others, for instance my underwear.
错误类型:介词和可数/不可数名词使用错误。仍需用“share ... with ...”;“underwear”通常作不可数名词,不用复数。建议:用“with others”和“underwear”。
× Uh, in my opinion I think the most of the personal items are not suitable for sharing.
✓ Uh, in my opinion I think most personal items are not suitable for sharing.
错误类型:代词/限定词使用不当。短语“the most of the personal items”冗余且结构错误,应为“most personal items”或“the majority of personal items”。建议:使用“most + 名词”表达大多数。
× For instance the mobile phone and underwears.
✓ For instance, mobile phones and underwear.
错误类型:介词与名词形式问题。需要复数“mobile phones”或泛指时省略冠词;“underwear”不可数。建议:用“mobile phones”和“underwear”;句首加逗号。
× It has some privacy concerns in this field.
✓ They raise some privacy concerns.
错误类型:句子结构与主谓不一致。原句主语“it”不明确且“in this field”不自然,应改为“they raise some privacy concerns”更简洁自然。建议:把主语改为指代前文的“personal items”或“such items”,并用“raise concerns”。
× Yes, I bought some scary games on the Steam website and I just shared them with my cousins last week because we are all interested in this kind of games.
✓ Yes, I bought some scary games on the Steam website and I shared them with my cousins last week because we are all interested in this kind of game.
错误类型:时态与名词形式问题。既然明确说“last week”,应使用过去时“shared”,不是“have shared”;此外“this kind of games”应为“this kind of game”或“these kinds of games”。建议:若指单一类别用“this kind of game”;描述过去发生的事用过去时。
× Uh, absolutely my mom.
✓ Uh, absolutely my mom.
错误类型:无(句子可接受)。说明:该句语法正确,可保留原样。
× Since my parents divorced at my early age, my mom has become the most importantly person in my life, so I always want to share my news to her as a first time.
✓ Since my parents divorced when I was young, my mom has become the most important person in my life, so I always want to share my news with her first.
错误类型:形容词/副词使用、介词与表达习惯错误。原句“at my early age”不自然,应为“when I was young”;“most importantly person”应为形容词“most important”;“share ... to her”错误,正确为“share ... with her”;“as a first time”不符合习惯,应为“first”。建议:使用“when I was young”,“most important”,“share ... with ...”,“first”。
× Well, I always share different kinds of news to my friends, concludes the good news and the bad news.
✓ Well, I always share different kinds of news with my friends, including good news and bad news.
错误类型:介词和单词选择错误。“share ... to”应为“share ... with”;“concludes”用词不当,应为“including”。建议:用“with”及“including”。
× For instance, when I got a prize or I broken up with my ex-boyfriend, I always told them.
✓ For instance, when I got a prize or broke up with my ex-boyfriend, I always told them.
错误类型:过去时和动词形式错误。并列结构中两动词应都用过去式:“got”与“broke up”;此外“I broken up”错误,正确为“broke up”。建议:确保并列事件使用相同的时态和正确的过去式形式。