Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (um, uh) and unfinished sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, and).

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share from a young age because they believed it builds good character. For example, they taught me to share toys with my brother and to offer snacks to classmates, so I learned to consider others’ needs.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and be specific about the things you share. Use concrete examples and reduce repetition and fillers. Link idea to example with words like "for example" or "such as". Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I like to share my thoughts and useful ideas with others. For example, I recently read stories about a child psychologist whose advice helped me, so I discussed his suggestions with friends to help them understand practical parenting tips.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and state the category of private information first, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Avoid hesitations and finish your sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain.

Ví dụ: I think personal matters are not suitable for sharing because they can affect relationships. For instance, I don’t share details about past romantic relationships because it makes me and others uncomfortable.

Gợi ý: Be specific about what you learned and give one concrete example of a lesson. Use a smooth structure: topic sentence + brief detail + example. Avoid repetition and unfinished fragments.

Ví dụ: Yes. I recently read about Charlie Munger and learned the importance of lifelong learning and clear thinking. For example, I shared his idea of reading widely with a friend to encourage better decision-making.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the person, then give a specific example and describe the reaction briefly. Correct grammar (plural agreement) and remove filler words. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Ví dụ: I always share good news with my two children because they are most important to me. For example, when I recently won a small lottery prize, I told them first and we celebrated together.

Gợi ý: Give a clear contrast and a reason. Use linking words like "however" or "but" to show differences, and provide a brief example of each type of news. Avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: I usually share good news with friends, such as job promotions or travel plans, because it’s uplifting. However, I tend to keep bad news private—like family problems—because I don’t want to burden others.

× Yes, umm, in China sharing is a good per uh, personality change.

✓ Yes, umm, in China sharing is considered a good personality trait.

The student used 'good per uh, personality change' which is incorrect phrasing and word choice. 'Personality trait' is the correct noun phrase to describe a characteristic, and 'considered' or passive causative clarifies general opinion. Suggestion: use 'considered a good personality trait' or 'is seen as a positive trait'.

× We will talk to us, share with our friends and family.

✓ We talk to each other and share with our friends and family.

The original mixes future tense 'will' and incorrect reflexive object 'talk to us.' The intended meaning is habitual action in the past or present. Use 'talk to each other' for reciprocal action and present simple for general habits. Suggestion: 'We talk to each other and share with our friends and family.'

× I have a brother, so I.

✓ I have a brother, so I often share with him.

The sentence is incomplete ('so I.'). It needs a result clause. Adding 'often share with him' completes the thought and matches context. Suggestion: finish sentences with clear verbs and objects.

× For example, I recently, uh, read out stories about child smile.

✓ For example, I recently read stories about a child's smile.

'Read out' is unnecessary; 'read' is correct. 'Child smile' needs possessive 'a child's smile' or 'child smiles.' Also 'read' pronounced differently but spelled same. Suggestion: 'I recently read stories about a child's smile.'

× I learn a lot from his wisdoms.

✓ I learned a lot from his wisdom.

Use uncountable noun 'wisdom' (not 'wisdoms') and past tense 'learned' since 'recently read' indicates past. Suggestion: 'I learned a lot from his wisdom.'

× I'm, I'm I was eager to share with my friends about, uh, his life advice.

✓ I was eager to share with my friends his life advice.

Mixed tenses and filler words make sentence awkward. Use past tense 'was' consistently and remove redundant 'I'm.' Also place object after 'share.' Suggestion: 'I was eager to share his life advice with my friends.'

× Umm it depends on for private person umm like me, I don't feel comfortable to.

✓ Umm it depends; for a private person like me, I don't feel comfortable sharing.

Incorrect prepositions and incomplete verb phrase. Use 'for a private person' and 'don't feel comfortable sharing' (not 'to'). Also complete clause. Suggestion: 'For a private person like me, I don't feel comfortable sharing.'

× I don't feel comfortable sharing my past relationship. Uh, I value privacy highly. And.

✓ I don't feel comfortable sharing details of my past relationships. I value my privacy highly.

Original ends with 'And.' incomplete. 'Past relationship' should be plural or 'a past relationship' and 'privacy' needs 'my' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid trailing conjunctions and complete statements.

× Yes, I recently read stories about Charlie Munger.

✓ Yes, I recently read stories about Charlie Munger.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'read' is correctly used in past tense form (spelled same). No change needed. Explanation: 'Recently read' indicates past action; pronunciation differs but spelling is correct.

× I was. I am eager to share my thoughts with my friends.

✓ I was eager to share my thoughts with my friends. OR I am eager to share my thoughts with my friends.

The student mixed tenses ('I was. I am eager...'). Choose one tense depending on timing: use past 'I was eager' if referring to earlier, or present 'I am eager' for current desire. Suggestion: keep tense consistent.

× My two children they mean a lot to me and are the most important people in my life so I always tell them first when I have good news for example, I recently won a small prize for Lotto mess and I have with them and cheer with them and.

✓ My two children mean a lot to me and are the most important people in my life, so I always tell them first when I have good news. For example, I recently won a small prize in the lottery and I celebrated with them.

Redundant subject 'my two children they' should be 'my two children.' 'Lotto mess' is incorrect; use 'lottery.' Incomplete phrase 'I have with them and cheer with them' should be 'I celebrated with them.' Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct nouns, and complete the celebration verb.

× I often share with my friends about the good news.

✓ I often share good news with my friends.

Do not use 'share with someone about something'; the correct pattern is 'share something with someone.' Remove 'about.' Suggestion: 'I often share good news with my friends.'

× For those bad news, I usually keep keep it secret.

✓ For bad news, I usually keep it secret.

Use uncountable 'news' so 'those' is unnecessary; remove duplicate 'keep.' Use 'keep it secret' or 'keep it to myself.' Suggestion: 'For bad news, I usually keep it to myself.'

× It's easy to share your happiness.

✓ It's easy to share happiness.

Using 'your' is not wrong but less natural in general statement; 'share happiness' is more general. However 'It's easy to share your happiness' is acceptable. Suggestion: use concise general statements.