工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (I am a recent graduate) and then give one or two specific supporting details about future plans. Avoid redundancy and long incorrect phrases (e.g., 'employing my bachelors degree').

示例: I am a recent graduate with a bachelor’s degree in economics. I plan to study abroad to pursue a master’s degree in economics in Canada next year, because I want to gain international experience and specialize in macroeconomic policy.

建议: Answer directly and briefly: state your current status, then give one specific reason why. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I am a graduate' not 'I am graduate') and avoid awkward phrasing like 'I never think about to work as a student.'

示例: I don't currently work; I am a recent graduate focusing on further studies. I chose not to work because balancing a job with studying for a master’s application would be very difficult.

建议: This question asks about a workplace; since you have no workplace, say so clearly and briefly, then offer a comparative comment about what would make a good workplace. Keep sentences short and use linking words like 'however' or 'so'.

示例: I don't have a workplace at the moment, so I can't judge any specific place. However, a good place to work for me would be flexible with hours and supportive of employees' professional development.

建议: Respond directly: say you don't have a workplace, then describe the kind of workplace you would like using specific details. Use correct nouns and articles ('an experience', 'the workplace'). Limit to two–three sentences.

示例: I don't have a workplace at the moment, so I can't answer from experience. Ideally, I would like a friendly environment with supportive colleagues and clear opportunities for learning and advancement.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence about your career goal, then add one or two specific reasons why and a concrete plan. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I want to work' not 'I am really work', 'my uncle became' -> 'my uncle is an economist').

示例: I want to become an economist and work in a reputable bank, which is my long-term goal. My uncle works as an economist at a well-known bank and has inspired me; I plan to complete a master’s degree in Canada and then apply for analyst positions in financial institutions.

× I am a graduate currently employing my bachelors degree in economics.

✓ I am a graduate currently holding my bachelor's degree in economics.

The verb 'employing' is incorrect here; the correct past participle to express possession of a degree is 'holding' or 'having'. Also use the possessive form 'bachelor's degree'. Use 'holding' to indicate possession of the degree. Suggestion: replace 'employing' with 'holding' and write 'bachelor's degree'.

× Now I would like to go abroad for my further studies and completed my master degree in honour economics in Canada.

✓ Now I would like to go abroad for further studies and complete my master's degree in honours economics in Canada.

The clause mixes conditional/future intention with past tense 'completed'. Use the infinitive 'complete' to match 'would like to'. Also use 'master's degree' with possessive apostrophe and the adjective 'honours' (or 'honor' in American English). Suggestion: use 'complete' after 'would like to' and correct degree punctuation and adjective form.

× To be honest, currently I am graduate and I never think about to work as a student because it's challenging phase for me to manage, study and work together.

✓ To be honest, I am currently a graduate and I have never thought about working as a student because it is a challenging phase for me to manage study and work together.

Missing article 'a' before 'graduate' and wrong verb tense 'never think' should be present perfect 'have never thought' for experience up to now. 'about to work' is incorrect; use the gerund 'working' after 'think about'. Also write 'it is' instead of contraction for clarity; remove extra comma and use parallel nouns 'manage study and work'. Suggestion: add 'a', use present perfect 'have never thought', use 'working' after 'about'.

× So currently I'm unemployed.

✓ So currently I am unemployed.

Contraction 'I'm' is acceptable in speech, but for written correction use full form 'I am' to match formality and clarity. No grammatical tense error beyond style. Suggestion: use 'I am' in formal responses.

× To be honest, currently I am graduate and I never think about to work as a student because it's challenging phase for me to manage, study and work together. So currently I'm unemployed.

✓ To be honest, I am currently a graduate and I have never thought about working as a student because it is a challenging phase for me to manage study and work together, so I am currently unemployed.

Combined sentence repeats issues: missing article, incorrect tense, incorrect verb form after 'about', and repetition. Corrections: add 'a', use present perfect 'have never thought', use gerund 'working', and streamline repetition. Suggestion: merge sentences and apply previous corrections.

× As I earlier mentioned, I'm a student current.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I am currently a student.

Incorrect word order 'student current' should be 'currently a student'. Place adverb 'earlier' after 'mentioned' for natural order. Use 'I am' rather than contraction in formal writing. Suggestion: reorder to 'I am currently a student' and place 'earlier' after 'mentioned'.

× I have no job or option to work in my part time because it's challenging for me to focus on my coursework and exams.

✓ I have no job or option to work part-time because it is challenging for me to focus on my coursework and exams.

Use the hyphenated adjective 'part-time' rather than 'in my part time' or 'my part time'. 'Work part-time' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'work part-time'.

× So I am unemployed for the time.

✓ So I am unemployed for the time being.

The phrase 'for the time' is incomplete; the idiomatic expression is 'for the time being' to indicate temporary status. Suggestion: use 'for the time being'.

× To be honest, I'm not familiar with this question because I have no work at the moment right now, so it's not a experience about the workplace and the environment with discussion of the colleagues.

✓ To be honest, I am not familiar with this question because I do not have work at the moment, so I have no experience of the workplace, the environment, or interacting with colleagues.

Several preposition and article errors: 'a experience' should be 'any experience' or 'experience' (uncountable). 'About the workplace' better as 'of the workplace'. 'Right now' and 'at the moment' are redundant; choose one. 'Discussion of the colleagues' is awkward; use 'interacting with colleagues' or 'working with colleagues'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'do not have work' or 'I am not working', use 'experience of' and 'interacting with colleagues'.

× Honestly speaking I am really work as an economist in future because it's my dream and ambition.

✓ Honestly, I really want to work as an economist in the future because it is my dream and ambition.

Incorrect verb form 'am really work' should be 'really want to work' or 'intend to work'. 'In future' needs 'in the future'. Use 'want to' to express desire. Suggestion: use 'want to work' or 'intend to work' and include 'the' before 'future'.

× Apart from that my uncle become as economist in reputed bank which gave me a real strength and sense of working as an economist.

✓ Apart from that, my uncle became an economist at a reputed bank, which gave me real encouragement and a sense of what it is like to work as an economist.

Verb tense 'become' should be past 'became' if referring to a past event. Use article 'an economist' and preposition 'at a reputed bank'. 'Gave me a real strength and sense' is awkward; better 'gave me encouragement' and 'a sense of what it is like to work'. Suggestion: use past tense 'became', use 'an economist', 'at a reputed bank', and clearer nouns 'encouragement' and 'a sense of'.

× So it's is my ambition.

✓ So it is my ambition.

Typographical duplication 'it's is' should be 'it is' or 'it's'. Remove the extra 'is'. Suggestion: use 'So it is my ambition' or 'So it's my ambition'.