写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear words. Use one or two supporting details with correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, state that you rarely write by hand, explain why, and give a brief consequence. Also correct word choices (e.g., "illegible" not "inscrutable") and avoid invented phrases like "relight."

示例: I don’t write much by hand; I usually type on my laptop because my handwriting is poor and often illegible. As a result, friends frequently ask me to rewrite notes so they can read them.

建议: Give a clearer, more natural topic sentence and use specific reasons. Avoid repetitions and unclear phrasing. Explain what you write (e.g., vocabulary, phrases) and why (to remember them better), using linking words ('because', 'so') correctly and one concrete example.

示例: I enjoy writing down new phrases and vocabulary that I learn because writing helps me remember them better. For example, after reading an article I copy five new phrases into a notebook and review them later.

建议: Start with a direct answer (yes/no) then explain briefly with specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. Mention how your topics might shift (e.g., from study notes to personal reflections) with age.

示例: Yes, I think what I write will change over time because my priorities and interests will shift. For instance, I currently write study notes, but in the future I might write more about my family and daily life.

建议: Answer directly and keep supporting details concise and natural. Use correct adjectives (e.g., 'illegible') and avoid awkward endings. Provide one or two clear reasons comparing typing and handwriting.

示例: I prefer typing because my handwriting is often illegible and friends have trouble reading it. Typing is faster and produces clearer text that I can easily edit.

建议: Give a direct, concise answer and avoid self-deprecating filler language. Use correct vocabulary ('diaries') and explain frequency with specifics (never, rarely, sometimes) and a brief reason. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

示例: I rarely keep a diary because I’m not consistent with daily habits. I tried writing entries a few times, but I usually stop after a week because I get busy.

建议: Answer directly and use one or two specific, well-phrased examples. Avoid double negatives and repetition. Mention which platforms you use and why (e.g., convenience, sharing with friends).

示例: I usually record my life on social media like Instagram and Facebook because it’s quick and lets me share moments with friends. For example, I post photos and short captions about events so I can look back on them later.

× I do not write a lot, but I instead I type on my laptop as my writing is not of good quality.

✓ I do not write a lot; instead, I type on my laptop because my writing is not of good quality.

Incorrect article use not the main issue but sentence had word order and connectors; added comma/semicolon and replaced 'as' with 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'instead' without extra 'I' and connect clauses properly.

× Sometimes my handwriting is negligible and inscrutable, so people sometimes ask me to relight again so.

✓ Sometimes my handwriting is messy and inscrutable, so people sometimes ask me to write it again.

'Negligible' and 'relight' are incorrect word choices. Use adjective 'messy' and verb phrase 'write it again'. Remove redundant 'sometimes' or keep one. Suggestion: choose vocabulary appropriate to meaning.

× I like to write the phrases that I memorized today.

✓ I like to write the phrases that I memorized today.

Sentence is acceptable; no change required. 'Memorized' correctly in past tense referring to today's memorization.

× By doing doing in it, I can make my memorizing stronger.

✓ By doing this, I can make my memorization stronger.

Repeated 'doing' is an error and 'in it' is unnecessary. Use noun 'memorization' instead of gerund phrase 'my memorizing'. Suggestion: simplify to 'By doing this' or 'By practicing'.

× So I can call recall that place writer.

✓ So I can better recall what I wrote.

Original is ungrammatical word order and incorrect word choice. Use 'recall' with an object and 'what I wrote' to refer to previous writing.

× Things that things are right will potentially change due to the stages changes in the stage of my life.

✓ Things that are right may change due to changes in the stages of my life.

Redundant words and awkward tense/modal combination. Replace 'will potentially' with 'may' and remove duplicate 'things' and 'stage(s)' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'may change' for possibility.

× If I get older I will more inclined to write my life and surroundings around me, so that would potentially change.

✓ If I get older, I will be more inclined to write about my life and my surroundings, so that would potentially change.

Missing auxiliary 'be' after 'will' causes tense/structure error. Add comma after conditional clause and use 'write about' for correct verb pattern. Suggestion: 'will be more inclined to' is correct structure.

× I would rather type than handwrite because my handwriting is not of good quality.

✓ I would rather type than handwrite because my handwriting is not of good quality.

Sentence is correct; 'would rather' is appropriate for preference. No change needed.

× When I handwrite letters, my friends complain about the my negligible and inscrutable words, but I feel I can write correctly on my laptop.

✓ When I handwrite letters, my friends complain about my messy and inscrutable handwriting, but I feel I can write correctly on my laptop.

Remove extra article 'the' and replace 'negligible and inscrutable words' with 'messy and inscrutable handwriting' for correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'handwriting' rather than 'words' here.

× It's understand.

✓ It's understandable.

Incorrect form 'understand' used as adjective; use 'understandable'. Suggestion: when describing something as easy to understand, use 'understandable'.

× I do not keep dialys to be honest as I am a lazy person it is hard for me to keep uh di keep making efforts or keeping the dialys so I sometimes have will potentially skip.

✓ I do not keep diaries, to be honest, because I am a lazy person; it is hard for me to keep making the effort to keep a diary, so I sometimes skip days.

Many issues: 'dialys' misspells 'diaries'; article use 'a diary'; wordiness and wrong modal 'have will potentially'. Rephrase to concise, grammatically correct form. Suggestion: use 'keep a diary' or 'write in a diary' and 'skip days'.

× So I don't do not record my life.

✓ So I do not record my life.

Double negation 'don't do not' is incorrect. Use a single negation 'do not'. Suggestion: avoid double negatives unless intended.

× There are a lot of ways to record my lives.

✓ There are a lot of ways to record my life.

Use singular 'life' to refer to one's life in general. 'Lives' implies multiple people. Suggestion: use 'life' or 'moments of my life'.

× For example, I can post what happened today on my Instagram or Facebook and share it with my friends.

✓ For example, I can post what happened today on Instagram or Facebook and share it with my friends.

Remove 'my' before social media names; both forms are acceptable but 'on Instagram/Facebook' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'on Instagram' or 'on Facebook'.

× That is one of the most popular way to share my life and record my life.

✓ That is one of the most popular ways to share and record my life.

Use plural 'ways' after 'one of the' and avoid repeating 'my life'. Suggestion: combine verbs to be concise.