记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구성과 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 질문에는 현재 능력(기억력을 잘하는지)에 직접 답한 뒤 구체적이고 관련된 예를 하나만 제시하세요. 문장은 간결하게 유지하고 불필요한 중복을 피하세요. 또한 시제와 전치사(예: in the Philippines, with my family)를 정확히 사용하고, 한 문장은 최대 3~4개의 간단한 절로 제한하세요.

示例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things. For example, when I was nine, I clearly remember a family trip to the Philippines, where I can still recall the names of the places we visited and the meals we enjoyed. That trip stands out because I often tell my friends stories from it.

建议: 질문에 직접적인 개인 경험을 제시하지 않고 일반화된 모호한 설명으로 답했습니다. 먼저 'Yes' 또는 'No'로 분명히 답한 뒤 구체적인 사례(무엇을 잊었고 어떤 영향을 주었는지)를 시간순으로 설명하세요. 연결어(For example, Because, As a result)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가고, 단어 선택을 단순하고 정확하게 하세요.

示例: Yes, I have. Once I forgot an important exam date in high school. Because I did not write it in my planner, I missed the test and received a low grade, which affected my final result that term. Since then, I always note exam dates in my phone calendar.

建议: 질문의 대상(일상에서 무엇을 기억해야 하는가)에 대해 구체적인 항목(예: 약 복용, 일정, 할 일 목록)을 제시하세요. 주제문으로 직접 답하고, 이유와 구체적 예시로 뒷받침하며 같은 표현의 반복을 피하세요. 연결어로 논리를 명확히 하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

示例: I need to remember daily tasks and appointments. For instance, I keep a to-do list and check my calendar every morning so I don't miss classes or deadlines. This helps me handle challenges step by step and stay organised.

建议: 질문은 기억하는 방법을 묻고 있으므로 방법(예: 메모, 반복, 알람)을 먼저 말하세요. 현재 답변은 성적과 자신감에 관해 말하고 있어 주제에서 벗어났습니다. 구조는 방법 제시→구체적 예→결과 순으로 하세요. 간단하고 정확한 어휘와 문장을 사용하세요.

示例: I remember important things by writing them down and setting reminders on my phone. For example, I write study goals and exam dates in a notebook and set alarms a week and a day before each test, which helps me stay confident and prepared.

× Yes, when I was nine years old, I traveled in Philippines, in Seville with my families.

✓ Yes, when I was nine years old, I traveled to the Philippines, to Seville with my family.

The nouns 'Philippines' and 'Seville' are place names: use the preposition 'to' for travel destinations (preposition error - ID 11). 'Families' is incorrect because the speaker likely means their single family unit: use the singular 'family' (singular/plural error - ID 1). Combined corrections: 'traveled to the Philippines, to Seville with my family.'

× So it was one of my demo things because I had many good times to share with my friends, to eat many good.

✓ So it was one of my memorable experiences because I had many good times to share with my friends, and to eat many good things.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear (sentence structure error - ID 26). 'Demo things' is incorrect word choice; 'memorable experiences' fits context. Parallel structure needs 'and' between clauses. 'To eat many good' needs a noun: 'many good things' or 'many good meals.'

× This is very important to our our lives because to keep our loose competition to think about it, it can not to go one steps in the future.

✓ This is very important to our lives because if we do not stay focused, we cannot take steps forward in the future.

Multiple issues: repeated word 'our our' (pronoun error - ID 12) and awkward phrasing 'keep our loose competition' is unclear (sentence structure error - ID 26). 'Can not to go one steps' mixes modal and infinitive incorrectly and has number errors; correct form is 'cannot take steps' (subject-verb and modal usage - IDs 27 and 4).

× For example, when I have not good schools in grades, it cannot go one of step in our future.

✓ For example, if I did not get good grades in school, it could prevent me from taking steps forward in my future.

Tense and verb form errors: 'have not good schools in grades' should be past hypothetical 'did not get good grades' (past tense / conditional - IDs 5 and 6). 'It cannot go one of step' is incorrect idiom and structure; use 'could prevent me from taking steps forward.' Also pronoun and article issues corrected.

× Binding of keep going is one of the most important to live in daily life.

✓ Perseverance, or keeping going, is one of the most important things in daily life.

Awkward noun phrase 'Binding of keep going' is incorrect; use 'Perseverance' or 'keeping going' (word choice/adjective-noun error - ID 13). Missing article and noun: 'one of the most important things' is needed. Preposition should be 'in daily life.' (preposition error - ID 11).

× For example, when I have challenge to many things, keep in mind of keep going in mind keep going it can make more step by step to my life.

✓ For example, when I face many challenges, keeping the idea of 'keep going' in mind helps me progress step by step in life.

Multiple structure and form errors: 'have challenge to many things' should be 'face many challenges' (verb+noun collocation - ID 8). 'Keep in mind of keep going in mind keep going' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'keeping ... in mind.' 'Make more step by step to my life' corrected to 'helps me progress step by step in life.' (sentence structure error - ID 26).

× One of my important things is good grade of school.

✓ One of the important things for me is getting good grades in school.

Article and noun number errors: 'good grade' should be plural 'good grades' when speaking generally (singular/plural - ID 1). Use gerund 'getting' to express the idea. Preposition 'of school' should be 'in school' (preposition error - ID 11).

× In my high school the subject is mathematic.

✓ In high school, my subject was mathematics.

Use of article and word form: 'the subject is mathematic' should be 'my subject was mathematics' (adjective vs noun form; subject-verb tense alignment - IDs 13 and 6). Also add comma after 'In high school.'

× Does I can get a good confidence tons of my talents of skill of mathematics.

✓ I was able to gain confidence in my mathematical talents and skills.

'Does I can' is ungrammatical auxiliary usage; correct subject-auxiliary inversion is not needed (modal/auxiliary error - ID 4). 'A good confidence' should be 'confidence' (article error - ID 22). 'Tons of my talents of skill of mathematics' is wordy and ungrammatical; 'confidence in my mathematical talents and skills' is concise and correct. Tense adjusted to past to match context.

× So you can choose a college.

✓ So I could choose a college.

Pronoun and tense: 'you can choose' incorrectly shifts perspective; the speaker means a past ability for themselves, so use 'I could choose a college' (pronoun error - ID 12 and tense error - ID 6).