规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct grammar for countable nouns and verb agreement.

示例: We don’t have many strict rules at my school. Instead, the college emphasizes self-discipline, so students are encouraged to manage their time and behaviour independently. As a result, most people follow rules without much supervision.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear reason. Remove repetitions and hesitations. Use linking words like because and therefore to connect points and give a specific example or consequence.

示例: I don't think more rules are always necessary because personal responsibility works better. For example, when students choose to study regularly on their own, they develop good habits that last longer than rules imposed by teachers.

建议: Give a concise topic sentence and one or two concrete details about why the teacher was dedicated. Correct pronouns and verbs, and explain a specific action the teacher took.

示例: Yes, I have. My high-school English teacher was very dedicated. For instance, she spent extra time after class helping me prepare university applications and gave detailed feedback on my essays.

建议: State your preference in a clear sentence, avoid double negatives and awkward phrasing. Give a reason using linking words and a brief specific example of how flexibility helps you.

示例: I prefer fewer rules because flexibility helps me learn better. For example, having flexible deadlines for creative projects allowed me to produce higher-quality work without unnecessary stress.

建议: Respond directly and describe one or two specific behaviours that made the teacher strict. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words.

示例: Yes, I have. My high-school Japanese teacher was very strict; she enforced punctuality, checked homework every lesson, and gave clear, firm consequences for late work.

建议: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear reason. Avoid stammering and use linking words such as because and so. Provide a concise example of the challenge you mention.

示例: No, I wouldn't. I think working in a rule-free school would be difficult because maintaining classroom order would be harder. For example, without clear expectations, some students might interrupt lessons, making it difficult to teach effectively.

× In my school, they are not, uh, loose, uh, strict rules for student.

✓ In my school, we do not have strict rules for students.

The original misuses adjectives and word order: 'they are not loose, strict rules' is ungrammatical. Use 'do not have' to indicate absence and pluralize 'students'. Use 'strict rules' as noun phrase. Suggestion: say 'we do not have strict rules for students.'

× And I think, uh, my college, uh, focus on our self-discipline and uh, we don't have to make strictly strict rules.

✓ And I think my school focuses on self-discipline, so we do not need to make strict rules.

Original has wrong verb forms and adverb/adjective usage: 'focus on' needs third-person singular 'focuses' for 'my school/college'; 'make strictly strict rules' is incorrect—use adjective 'strict' not adverb 'strictly'. Also 'we do not need' fits meaning. Suggestion: simplify to 'my school focuses on self-discipline, so we do not need to make strict rules.'

× I, I don't think, I, I don't think, uh, always necessary because, uh, I, I like on the best way to our discipline is our conscious and focus on by myself.

✓ I don't think it's always necessary because I believe the best way to maintain discipline is through personal awareness and self-control.

Errors include missing 'it' as subject ('it's always necessary'), wrong prepositions ('like on'), and awkward phrasing 'focus on by myself'. This is third-person/use of dummy 'it' and sentence structure fixes. Suggestion: use 'I don't think it's always necessary' and 'personal awareness and self-control' to express idea clearly.

× Yes I have yes I have my when my my teacher is I think most the best dedicated teacher in my life.

✓ Yes, I have. My teacher was the most dedicated teacher in my life.

Original repeats pronouns and words and misorders them. Use past tense 'was' if referring to a past teacher and correct article order 'the most dedicated'. Remove duplicated words. Suggestion: 'My teacher was the most dedicated teacher I've had.'

× They he is so kind and helps me to search the college.

✓ He is very kind and helped me with my college search.

Original mixes plural 'they' and singular 'he'. Choose the correct pronoun 'he'. Also 'helps me to search the college' is unnatural; use 'helped me with my college search' and match tense. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and use natural collocations like 'helped me with my college applications/search.'

× No, I don't. I don't prefer to have more fewer loose at my school because I'm so pleasant and I dislike strictly 'cause I want to be more behavior more behavior to adds flexible.

✓ No, I don't. I don't prefer more or fewer rules at my school because I like a relaxed environment and dislike strictness; I want my behavior to be more flexible.

Multiple issues: 'more fewer loose' is nonsensical—use 'more or fewer rules' or 'more or fewer restrictions'. 'I'm so pleasant' is wrong; likely 'I prefer a relaxed atmosphere'. 'I dislike strictly' should be 'I dislike strictness'. 'to adds flexible' is incorrect; express as 'I want my behavior to be more flexible.' Suggestion: use clear nouns (rules, strictness) and correct adjectives/adverbs.

× Hi absolutely yes I have and my when my high school teacher is so strict our for us the teachers teach it us Japanese and they they I give her that strict.

✓ Yes, absolutely. My high school teacher was very strict; she taught us Japanese and was strict with us.

Original has many structural errors and repetitions. Use clear clauses: identify teacher ('she'), correct verb tense 'was', and natural phrasing 'taught us Japanese' and 'was strict with us'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use simple past to describe past teacher.

× Uh, in the case I don't want to, I don't want to, uh, work as a teacher in a full school because, uh, it is so difficult to, uh, discipline for our students and I can't, umm, uh, I can't angry to test them.

✓ In that case, I don't want to work as a teacher in a completely rule-free school because it would be very difficult to discipline the students and I couldn't get angry with them to test their limits.

Problems: tense/conditional ('would be' fits hypothetical), incorrect phrase 'in a full school' should be 'rule-free school', 'discipline for our students' should be 'discipline the students', and 'I can't angry to test them' is ungrammatical—use 'I couldn't get angry with them'. Suggestion: use conditional/modal verbs (would/could) for hypothetical scenarios and natural verb phrases like 'discipline the students' and 'get angry with them.'