聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변은 자연스럽고 의미 전달이 잘 되지만 문장이 다소 길고 중복 표현(‘sending photos and sharing videos’)이 있음. 주제 문장을 더 명확히 한 뒤, 보충 설명은 한 두 개의 구체적 이유로 간결하게 제시하세요. 연결어(예: because, so)에 유의해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

示例: Yes, I do. I often use Instagram to message my friends and share photos or short videos. It’s convenient because we can quickly update each other, and it’s fun to see daily moments.

建议: 좋은 내용이지만 일부 표현에서 어색함(‘discuss about’)과 일반적 서술을 구체화할 필요가 있음. 이유를 보여줄 때 구체적인 예시(어떤 장소, 어떤 활동)를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다. 연결어로 ‘for example’ 등을 활용해 보세요.

示例: We usually chat about everyday things, like what we had for lunch or photos we took. For example, we often plan weekend trips and discuss which cafe or park to visit, which helps us coordinate better.

建议: 구조가 명확하고 목적도 분명합니다. 다만 ‘I like both, but...’ 대신 더 간결한 토픽 문장으로 시작하면 더 강력합니다. ‘such as’ 이후에 구체적 사례를 하나 더 추가하거나 간단한 이유(예: privacy, depth)를 덧붙이세요.

示例: I prefer talking one-on-one. It’s easier to discuss serious matters, such as university courses or future career plans, because conversations are more private and detailed.

建议: 의도는 분명하지만 ‘face to face concert communication’라는 표현은 어색하고 의미가 불분명합니다. ‘face-to-face communication’으로 수정하고 이유를 구체적 예시(예: facial expressions, gestures)를 들어 설명하세요. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read facial expressions and body language more clearly. For instance, when discussing something important in person, I can tell if someone is uncertain or enthusiastic.

建议: 아이디어는 좋으나 문법 오류(‘it's make me’)와 문장 흐름이 어색합니다. 이유를 연결어로 분리해 명확히 하고, 대안 행동(예: listen, take a break)도 포함하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 문장을 문법적으로 고쳐 간결하게 표현하세요.

示例: Not really. I avoid arguments because they can damage relationships and make me emotionally exhausted. Instead, I stay calm and try to listen or take a short break to cool down.

× I usually chat with my friends on Instagram messages and we also share our daily lives through sending photos and sharing videos.

✓ I usually chat with my friends on Instagram and we also share our daily lives by sending photos and sharing videos.

Use of 'through sending' is unnatural; 'by sending' is the correct preposition + -ing form to express means. Also 'Instagram messages' is redundant; say 'on Instagram'. Improve fluency by using 'by' for methods.

× Sometimes we discuss about places we will go together.

✓ Sometimes we discuss places we will go to together.

The verb 'discuss' does not take the preposition 'about'; use 'discuss places' or use 'talk about places'. Also include 'to' after 'go' to indicate movement: 'go to together'.

× Do you prefer to chat with a group of people or with only one friend?

✓ Do you prefer to chat with a group of people or with just one friend?

'Only one friend' is grammatical but 'just one friend' is more natural in spoken English. This is a word choice/quantifier nuance to improve naturalness.

× I like both, but I particularly prefer face to face concert communication because I can read people's emotions more accurately.

✓ I like both, but I particularly prefer face-to-face communication because I can read people's emotions more accurately.

'Face-to-face' should be hyphenated when used as an adjective. The word 'concert' is incorrect and unnecessary here; remove it. 'Communication' alone is sufficient.

× Not really, I try to avoid arguing with my friends because I can harm our relationships.

✓ Not really, I try to avoid arguing with my friends because it can harm our relationships.

Subject mismatch: 'I can harm our relationships' incorrectly suggests the speaker harms relationships personally. Use 'it can harm' to refer to arguing. Also maintain present tense general statement: 'try to avoid' + 'can harm'.

× Also it's make me so exhausted and so I talk calmly.

✓ Also it makes me very exhausted, so I try to stay calm when I speak.

Verb form error: 'it's make' should be 'it makes'. Adverb 'so exhausted' is acceptable but 'very exhausted' is more natural; restructure: 'so I try to stay calm when I speak' clarifies intention and corrects grammar.