聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. “achievement of my work”) and add one specific example or reason. Use linking words if you add detail.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me relax and exchange ideas. For example, after a long day of research my colleagues and I discuss new approaches, which often gives me fresh insight.

建议: Open with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), and be specific about topics. Use a linking word to connect ideas and give one concrete example.

示例: Mostly I talk about work because my friends are colleagues and we’re researchers. For example, we discuss experiments and data analysis. Besides work, we often share family news, which helps us unwind.

建议: Begin with a clear preference statement. Fix grammar (e.g. “catch up with them”), use linking words (because, so) and give a brief reason with a specific example to sound natural and concise.

示例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because I can focus on the conversation. For instance, when I discuss a problem with one friend we explore it in depth, but in larger groups topics change rapidly and I find that distracting.

建议: Make your answer fluent and correct awkward phrases (“share our emotion and out of us fear”). State a clear preference and explain briefly with a specific reason. Avoid fillers like “uh” and correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘express emotions’).

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it’s easier to express emotions and read body language. However, I sometimes use social media when meeting in person isn’t possible, for example to coordinate schedules or send quick updates.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and use consistent tenses (present simple). Avoid repetition (“I don't want to argue… I don't want to hurt”). Explain your approach with specific steps and linking words (first, then).

示例: I try to avoid arguing with friends because I don’t want to hurt them. First, I consider their feelings, and then I express my opinion calmly and step by step, focusing on solutions rather than blame.

× I really like chatting with friends, it's enjoyable and we can share our thoughts and feelings which may contribute to our achievement of my work.

✓ I really like chatting with friends; it's enjoyable and we can share our thoughts and feelings which may contribute to my work achievements.

The phrase 'our achievement of my work' mixes pronouns and uses noun form incorrectly. Use 'my work achievements' (plural) or 'my achievement at work'. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon to join two independent clauses correctly. Suggest using consistent pronouns and correct noun form: 'my work achievements'. Suggestion: Use 'my work achievements' or 'my achievements at work' and connect independent clauses with a semicolon or separate sentences.

× I always chat about my work with colleagues because we are researchers and so we are always concerning about that.

✓ I always chat about my work with colleagues because we are researchers and so we are always concerned about that.

The phrase 'concerning about' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'concerned about'. Use 'concerned' to describe feelings. Keep present simple tense: 'we are always concerned about that'. Suggestion: Use 'concerned about' instead of 'concerning about'.

× But besides us, sometimes we talked about our family.

✓ But besides that, sometimes we talk about our families.

The original mixes past tense 'talked' with present context 'I always chat' and uses awkward 'besides us'. Use present simple 'we talk' to match habitual action. Also 'our family' is better as plural 'our families' when referring to different people. Replace 'besides us' with 'besides that' or remove it. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and pluralize 'family' when referring to multiple people's families.

× Uh, talking about family is enjoyable, so it's important for us.

✓ Talking about family is enjoyable, so it's important for us.

Leading filler 'Uh' is unnecessary in writing. The sentence is otherwise fine; keep present simple 'is enjoyable' and 'is important'. Suggestion: Omit filler words in formal responses.

× I prefer joking with only one friend because I can focus on our topic easily and when talking with a lot of people the topic is always changed quickly so I need to catch up them and it's not comfortable.

✓ I prefer joking with just one friend because I can focus on our topic easily, and when I talk with a lot of people the topic always changes quickly so I need to catch up with them and it's not comfortable.

Errors: 'with only one friend' is okay but 'just one friend' sounds more natural. 'When talking' lacks a subject—use 'when I talk'. 'The topic is always changed' incorrectly uses passive and wrong tense; use active 'the topic always changes'. 'Catch up them' missing preposition—use 'catch up with them'. Suggestion: Use explicit subject 'I' with 'when I talk', use active verbs for natural speech, and include appropriate prepositions.

× I prefer joking with only one friend because I can focus on our topic easily and when talking with a lot of people the topic is always changed quickly so I need to catch up them and it's not comfortable.

✓ I prefer joking with just one friend because I can focus on our topic easily, and when I talk with a lot of people the topic always changes quickly so I need to catch up with them and it's not comfortable.

'Catch up them' is missing preposition 'with'. Also 'talking with a lot of people' benefits from explicit subject. Combine corrections for clarity. Suggestion: Always use 'catch up with someone' and include the subject in time clauses.

× Needless to say, I'd like to communicate face to face because we can share our emotion and out of us fear easily.

✓ Needless to say, I'd like to communicate face to face because we can share our emotions and overcome our fears easily.

Errors: 'share our emotion' needs plural 'emotions'. 'out of us fear' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'overcome our fears' or 'express our fears'. Use 'overcome' or 'express' plus plural 'fears'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for countable feelings and choose appropriate verbs like 'express' or 'overcome'.

× And sometimes I prefer, uh, social media communication, but basically I love face.

✓ And sometimes I prefer social media communication, but basically I prefer face-to-face communication.

'I love face' is incomplete and vague. Use 'face-to-face communication' to be clear. Remove filler 'uh'. Maintain consistent present simple tense. Suggestion: Use full phrase 'face-to-face communication' and avoid fillers.

× I don't want to argue with my friends because I don't want to hurt my friends.

✓ I don't want to argue with my friends because I don't want to hurt them.

Repetition of 'my friends' is redundant; replace second occurrence with pronoun 'them'. This is pronoun use and conciseness improvement rather than modal issue; however sentence uses modal 'don't' appropriately. Use pronoun to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use pronouns to avoid repetition: 'hurt them'.

× So before discussing about it, at first I tried to think about my friend's feelings.

✓ So before discussing it, I first try to think about my friends' feelings.

Tense mismatch: earlier sentences describe habitual behavior, so use present simple 'I first try' not past 'tried'. 'Discussing about' is incorrect—use 'discussing it' or 'discussing the issue'. 'Friend's' should be plural possessive 'friends'' because referring to multiple friends. Also 'at first' redundant when using 'before'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits, remove 'about' after 'discussing', and use plural possessive 'friends''.

× Then I will tell my thoughts step by step.

✓ Then I tell my thoughts step by step.

Using 'will tell' suggests future action but the context is habitual approach, so present simple 'I tell' is more appropriate. If the speaker intends to describe a future plan, 'I will tell' could be acceptable; choose tense to match context. Also 'step by step' is fine. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual routines: 'I tell my thoughts step by step.'