爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and sentence structure: begin with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and add one specific example of when you do each hobby. Use linking words like "so" or "for example" to connect ideas.

示例: I have two main hobbies: drawing and playing tennis. I usually draw when I want to relax, for example after a long day at work I sketch landscapes to calm down. I also play tennis at the weekend because it helps me stay fit and relieves stress.

建议: Correct tense consistency and clarity: use past simple for habits in childhood. Avoid unclear phrases like "on a bad one." Add one specific memory and use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to explain why it made you happy.

示例: Yes, drawing was my favorite hobby as a child. I often sketched landmarks and family photos because I enjoyed capturing details, and doing so made me feel happy and relaxed.

建议: Make a concise, grammatically correct statement about continuity: use present perfect to show an activity continuing from childhood to now. Remove filler words and correct collocations ("sketch" not "too sketch"). Provide a brief example of a subject you still like to sketch.

示例: Yes, drawing is a hobby I have had since childhood. I have always liked sketching landmarks and I still enjoy drawing city scenes because they remind me of places I’ve visited.

建议: Focus on clear contrast and correct word choice: use past or present appropriately ("share" vs "shared"), avoid unclear phrases such as "sharing, because of her the audience." Explain one specific technique learned and end with a concise current statement. Use linking words like "although" or "while" for contrast.

示例: Yes, my mother and I share a love of drawing. While I usually sketch on paper, she used to paint on fabric and walls and taught me techniques like line work and shading, so I improved quickly and now I enjoy drawing in my free time.

× My hobbies here, drawing and playing tennis.

✓ My hobbies are drawing and playing tennis.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and has incorrect word order. Use 'are' to link the subject 'My hobbies' with the complement listing the hobbies. Suggestion: use 'My hobbies are...' to form a complete sentence.

× Whenever I feel low, exhausted or drained off from work, I usually do this two things to make myself calm down and to search peace.

✓ Whenever I feel low, exhausted, or drained from work, I usually do these two things to calm down and find peace.

Errors: 'drained off' is incorrect preposition; 'this two things' uses wrong demonstrative and number agreement; 'to make myself calm down and to search peace' uses awkward verb choices. Use 'drained from', 'these two things', and verbs 'calm down' and 'find peace' for natural expression.

× Drawing was my favorite hobby when I was a child.

✓ Drawing was my favorite hobby when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the past tense context, so no change is needed.

× Whenever I see a beautiful landmark or an interesting picture, I would sketch it on a bad one and then actually makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Whenever I saw a beautiful landmark or an interesting picture, I would sketch it on a piece of paper, and it would make me feel happy and relaxed.

Mixed tenses and article issues: The context refers to past habit so use past ('saw'). 'a bad one' is vague and incorrect; replace with 'a piece of paper'. 'makes' should agree with conditional 'would' so use 'would make'. Also join clauses with appropriate conjunctions.

× When is the one of my hobby that I am doing since I'm childhood, It is really whenever I see beautiful landmark or any exciting pictures too sketch it on paper.

✓ One of the hobbies I have had since childhood is sketching; whenever I see a beautiful landmark or an interesting picture, I sketch it on paper.

Original has several structural problems: incorrect question word 'When', wrong verb forms ('am doing since I'm childhood'), and awkward phrasing. Use present perfect 'have had since childhood' to express a continuing hobby, and noun form 'sketching' or 'I sketch' for habitual action.

× It really makes me happy that habit never changed.

✓ It really makes me happy that the habit has never changed.

Tense and article: use present perfect 'has never changed' to indicate a change that has not occurred up to now. Add the definite article 'the' before 'habit' to specify the previously mentioned habit.

× My mother and I shared the hobby of drawing.

✓ My mother and I share the hobby of drawing.

Tense: the question asks about current hobbies, so use present simple 'share' instead of past 'shared'.

× I usually sketch on paper, but while she used to draw on clothes and walls and she taught me some techniques like line work and sharing, because of her the audience, I improved it quickly and now it's uh, I enjoy my drawing in my free time.

✓ I usually sketch on paper, while she used to draw on clothes and walls. She taught me techniques like line work and shading, and because of her guidance I improved quickly. Now I enjoy drawing in my free time.

Multiple errors: run-on sentence and incorrect connectors. 'While' contrasts actions; split into sentences. 'sharing' is likely 'shading' and 'because of her the audience' is unclear; replace with 'because of her guidance'. 'I enjoy my drawing' is awkward; use 'I enjoy drawing'. Also remove filler 'uh'.