走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and grammatically correct: use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word choice and verb forms, and keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). Add a short reason with a linking word. For example, replace informal fillers (“you know”) and correct adjectives (use “scorching” instead of “scratching”) and verb forms (“I don't like walking”).

示例: Not really. In Chengdu the summers are very hot and often humid, so I prefer to take the subway or a taxi when it’s very warm. However, in winter I enjoy walking more because the weather is cool and comfortable.

建议: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and coherent supporting details. Fix grammar (e.g., “they liked to walk”, “they would take me with them”) and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words like “for example” to show specific memories.

示例: Yes. I often walked with my grandparents after meals because they liked to exercise. For example, we would stroll through the neighborhood and sometimes stop at vendors where I begged them for snacks or small toys.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and two clear, specific reasons. Correct grammar and vocabulary (“good habit”, “the air is fresh”, “it helps your digestion”, “walking can help maintain weight”). Use linking words such as “because” and “for example”. Avoid vague or incorrect expressions like “air conditioning is pretty well.”

示例: People like to walk in parks because it is a healthy habit and the fresh air is pleasant. For example, walking after dinner can help digestion and, because it is a gentle form of exercise, it also helps people maintain a healthy weight.

建议: Start with a clear preference and give two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Correct forms: “I would prefer to go hiking,” “camp on the mountain,” “breathe fresh air.” Keep it concise and natural.

示例: I would prefer to go on a long hike in the mountains with my friends. For example, I could spend a whole day hiking and camp overnight, which would let me enjoy fresh air and quality time with friends.

建议: Answer directly and concisely with a clear past tense sentence. Avoid hesitation and unnecessary details; correct verb forms (“I walked to the parcel station to pick up a package, then walked to the parking lot and parked my car”). Use linking words to connect actions.

示例: Recently I walked to the parcel station near my home to collect a package. After that I walked to the parking lot and then drove home.

× I guess not, especially during summer.

✓ I guess not, especially during the summer.

Use of definite article 'the' before seasons is common in this context in English (Grammar problem type 6). Add 'the' to sound natural: 'during the summer'.

× the weather in Chengdu is pretty hot and scratching, especially in the summer, so I don't like walk a lot.

✓ The weather in Chengdu is pretty hot and scorching, especially in the summer, so I don't like to walk a lot.

The adjective 'scratching' is incorrect; the intended word is 'scorching' meaning very hot. Also, after 'like' when followed by a verb use the infinitive 'to walk' (types 13 and 6). Use capitalization for sentence start.

× Instead, I'd like to take a subway or grab a car if the weather is extremely hot.

✓ Instead, I'd like to take the subway or get a taxi if the weather is extremely hot.

Use definite article 'the' with 'subway' when speaking generally about a city's system (type 17). 'Grab a car' is nonstandard; use 'get a taxi' or 'grab a taxi'. This improves naturalness (types 8 and 17).

× But during winter, I'd like to walk a lot.

✓ But during the winter, I'd like to walk a lot.

Same as earlier: include the definite article 'the' with season names in this context (type 6/17).

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Use the noun phrase 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk' in natural English when asking about habitual past actions (type 5). 'Did you often' requires base verb 'go', and 'for a walk' is the correct collocation.

× Yes, when I was a child, I grew up with my grandparents, you know older people.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I grew up with my grandparents, you know, older people.

Add a comma before and after the parenthetical 'you know' for clarity; pronoun usage is acceptable but punctuation improves readability (type 12).

× They always like to walk after dinner or after lunch.

✓ They always liked to walk after dinner or after lunch.

The question asks about childhood habits (past). Use past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was a child' (types 5 and 2).

× So they would bring me together and work with them.

✓ So they would take me with them and walk with them.

Original is unclear: 'bring me together and work with them' is ungrammatical. Likely meaning: they took the child along and walked with them. Use 'take me with them' and 'walk with them' to convey intended meaning (type 26).

× Every time. Like we go went through a vendor, I would yell at them and beg them to buy some toys or delicious food for me.

✓ Every time we went past a vendor, I would yell at them and beg them to buy me some toys or delicious food.

Fix tense and sequence: use past tense 'went' not 'go went' and correct preposition 'past' a vendor. 'Buy me some' is the natural object phrase. Remove fragment 'Like' and combine into one sentence (types 5, 11, 26).

× Well I think it's a good life habits, you know after dinner, walking in the park, the air conditioning is pretty well and it help your digesting system especially when you eat too much.

✓ Well, I think it's a good life habit. You know, after dinner, walking in the park is good because the air is pretty clean and it helps your digestive system, especially when you eat too much.

Multiple errors: use singular 'habit' not plural with 'a' (type 1/22). 'Air conditioning is pretty well' is wrong; likely 'air is pretty clean' or 'the air is good' (type 13). 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it' or use 'walking... helps' (type 27). 'Digesting system' should be 'digestive system' (word choice/type 13). Split into clearer sentences (type 26).

× I think work a lot can help you not get fat.

✓ I think walking a lot can help you not get fat.

Use the gerund 'walking' to be the subject of 'can help' (type 8). 'Work a lot' is incorrect meaning. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct collocation.

× Well I'm not sure either prefer go hiking if I have a chance, like more than 10 hours and I can camping on the mountain with my best friends.

✓ Well I'm not sure. I would prefer to go hiking if I had the chance, like for more than 10 hours, and I could camp on the mountain with my best friends.

Rewrite for conditional and modality: use 'would prefer to' plus infinitive (type 4/26), use past subjunctive 'if I had' for hypothetical (type 7), and 'camp' not 'camping' after 'could' (type 10/9). Add 'for' before duration.

× I think that's a good way to inhale fresh air and spend time with your family or your friends.

✓ I think that's a good way to breathe fresh air and spend time with your family or friends.

Use 'breathe' rather than 'inhale' for natural spoken English (word choice/type 13). 'Your friends' is redundant with 'your family'; 'or friends' is cleaner.

× Lately, I'm not sure. Actually. I just got home for two hours.

✓ Lately, I'm not sure. Actually, I just got home two hours ago.

Use 'two hours ago' with past time reference; 'got home for two hours' incorrectly uses duration (type 5). Also combine fragments properly.

× Before I got home, I walked to, you know, the parcel station to take out my parcel and walk into the parking grounds and parked my car.

✓ Before I got home, I walked to the parcel station to pick up my parcel, then walked to the parking lot and parked my car.

Use 'pick up' rather than 'take out' for parcels (type 11). 'Parking grounds' is unnatural; use 'parking lot'. Maintain past tense sequence: 'walked... then walked... and parked' (type 5 and 11).

× So that's it.

✓ So that's it.

Short response is fine; no grammatical change needed. It is a complete sentence in context (type 26).