建筑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct verb forms. Add one specific detail and a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live on the outskirts of the city. Instead, the area has mostly low-rise houses and a small two-storey school, which makes the neighborhood quiet and residential.

建议: Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and a specific example, using linking words for coherence. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often photograph high-rise buildings because their shapes and angles create interesting compositions. For example, I recently took photos of a glass-clad skyscraper downtown because its reflections changed throughout the day.

建议: Avoid fillers and fix grammar. Start with a direct statement, then give a reason and a specific detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit the Empire State Building because it is an iconic skyscraper with historic architecture. I have admired its observation deck and would like to see the New York skyline from there one day.

建议: Make sentences grammatically correct and clearer. State your preference directly, give one or two specific reasons linked with connectors, and avoid vague phrases. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: I prefer living in a low-rise building because it feels safer and more convenient for daily life. For example, in an earthquake it would be easier to evacuate, and services like supermarkets and parks are usually closer in low-rise neighborhoods.

× As my home is quite far from the heart of the city, so there is no tall building near my home.

✓ As my home is quite far from the heart of the city, there are no tall buildings near my home.

Use of 'there is' with a plural noun is incorrect; plural subject requires 'there are'. Also remove redundant 'so' after 'As'. Suggestion: use 'there are no tall buildings' to match plurality and flow.

× There usually be a usual building like home and school which is a small school that is not tall.

✓ There are usually ordinary buildings such as houses and a small school, which is not tall.

'There usually be' is incorrect verb form; use 'there are usually'. 'A usual building like home and school' is unclear and uncountable; use 'ordinary buildings such as houses and a small school'. Ensure noun plurality and article use.

× I usually take a photo of the high rise building because it will give me a different viewpoint and shape.

✓ I usually take photos of high-rise buildings because they give me different viewpoints and shapes.

Singular 'a photo of the high rise building' conflicts with general habit; plural is preferred. 'High rise' should be hyphenated 'high-rise' as a compound adjective. Use present simple 'give' for habitual actions and plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'buildings'.

× Many skyscraper in town very beautiful and have a unique shape so I usually take photo for them of them.

✓ Many skyscrapers in town are very beautiful and have unique shapes, so I usually take photos of them.

Subject 'skyscraper' must be plural 'skyscrapers'; add auxiliary verb 'are' for description. 'Have a unique shape' should match plural 'have unique shapes'. Word order and preposition errors: use 'take photos of them'. Remove duplicated words.

× Since, uh, since I was a kid. Empire State Building in New York is very famous, as is the most iconic building and with their skyscraper and the modern style.

✓ Since I was a kid, the Empire State Building in New York has been very famous and is one of the most iconic buildings with its skyscraper design and modern style.

Original has sentence fragments and repetition 'since'. Combine into one complete sentence. Use 'the Empire State Building' with article. Use present perfect 'has been' to express continued fame since childhood. 'Their skyscraper' is incorrect pronoun; use 'its skyscraper design'.

× So I would like to visit them one day.

✓ So I would like to visit it one day.

Refers to a singular building 'Empire State Building', so use singular pronoun 'it' instead of 'them'.

× I prefer to live in the low rise building more than the high rise one because I think it's more safe and convenient for my life lifestyle.

✓ I prefer to live in a low-rise building rather than a high-rise one because I think it is safer and more convenient for my lifestyle.

Use indefinite article 'a' for general preference and hyphenate 'low-rise' and 'high-rise'. Use 'rather than' for comparison. 'More safe' is non-idiomatic; use comparative 'safer'. 'Life lifestyle' is redundant; use 'lifestyle'.

× For example, in the earthquake situation, the tall building always have more dangerous to escape and the road ride is more accessible.

✓ For example, in an earthquake, tall buildings are always more dangerous to escape from, and roads are less accessible.

'The tall building always have' has subject-verb disagreement; use 'tall buildings are'. 'More dangerous to escape' needs rephrasing to 'more dangerous to escape from'. 'The road ride is more accessible' is unclear and incorrect; likely meant that roads are less accessible, so correct accordingly. Use 'in an earthquake' rather than 'in the earthquake situation'.