旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy ("of the window" and "to the scenery" together) and minor grammar errors.

示例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I often enjoy watching mountain ranges and waterfalls because their colours and movement are calming.

建议: Improve grammar and clarity: use a concise topic sentence, correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I like to take photos"), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "look after in the later."

示例: Yes, I like to take photos of the scenery outside the car because they help me remember special trips. For instance, I often photograph unusual light or interesting landscapes to look back on later.

建议: Make the answer shorter and fix grammar: use a direct topic sentence followed by one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition ("love" used repeatedly) and adjust article usage and phrasing ("the sound of waterfalls" and "a very relaxing, peaceful day").

示例: I prefer the mountains. I enjoy listening to the sound of waterfalls and hiking on trails, because these activities make me feel relaxed and help me create lasting memories.

× Yes, of course I do look out of the window to the scenery when travelling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, of course I look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car.

Use 'look out at' or 'look at' for directing attention toward a view. 'Look out of the window to the scenery' mixes two prepositional patterns; 'out of' indicates movement from inside to outside and is unnecessary here. Remove 'do' (optional emphasis) and use 'at' to correctly link 'look' and 'the scenery'. Grammar_problem_type_id:11

× I usually gaze at mountains and the waterfalls, which are very beautiful to me.

✓ I usually gaze at the mountains and waterfalls, which are very beautiful to me.

Use of definite article 'the' should be consistent: when speaking about mountains and waterfalls in general as particular features seen from the window, 'the mountains and waterfalls' is natural. Also, do not use 'the' before one noun and include it before the next when referring to the same general set. Alternatively, omit both articles if speaking generally ('mountains and waterfalls'). Grammar_problem_type_id:22

× Yes, I love to capture the scenery outside my car because it will create a memory which I will look after in the later.

✓ Yes, I love capturing the scenery outside my car because it creates memories that I will look after later.

Use 'love capturing' (verb + -ing) or 'love to capture' both possible; here present simple 'creates' fits general truth better than future 'will create'. 'A memory' -> plural 'memories' is more natural. 'Which I will look after in the later' is incorrect phrasing: use 'that I will look after later' or simply 'that I will keep'. Also remove 'in' before 'later'. Grammar_problem_type_id:10},{