打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons with brief examples. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and makes editing simple. For example, when I write an essay on my laptop I can quickly rearrange paragraphs. I also find typing helpful for brainstorming, since I can delete and reorganize ideas easily.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and concise supporting detail with a brief comparison. Reduce hesitations and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'it's been almost a decade since I started using a laptop'). Mention a specific reason why the desktop keyboard is convenient if you introduce it.

示例: I usually type on a laptop keyboard because I started using laptops about ten years ago. However, my husband recently bought a desktop keyboard, which I find convenient because it has larger keys and is more comfortable for long typing sessions.

建议: Provide a direct answer first, then one or two concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler. Fix tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I learned to type in fifth grade when my school introduced computer classes').

示例: I learned to type in fifth grade when my school introduced us to the computer lab. That was my first regular access to a computer, and later my father bought me a laptop which helped me practice more.

建议: This answer is clear and well structured. To improve further, add a specific routine or measurable detail (how often, how long, or a practice method) and use a linking phrase to show result or purpose.

示例: I improve my typing by practicing for 30 minutes three times a week, usually by transcribing my handwritten notes into my laptop. As a result, my speed and accuracy have improved because I repeat common words and focus on correct finger placement.

× I prefer typing because it's fast and convenient. It's very easy to edit, format, or reorganize on a computer while handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing because it's fast and convenient. It's very easy to edit, format, or reorganize on a computer, while handwriting is not.

The original sentence mixes clauses without a verb in the second clause describing handwriting. This is a problem with the present participle and sentence structure; adding 'is not' completes the clause and contrasts the two methods clearly. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a verb when making comparisons (use 'handwriting is not' or 'whereas handwriting requires').

× Umm. It requires patience and needs skills though.

✓ Handwriting requires patience and skill, though.

The original uses pronoun 'It' ambiguously and mixes 'needs skills' (awkward noun plural). This is a sentence structure issue and minor plural/adjective use; use 'handwriting' as clear subject and 'skill' (uncountable) after 'requires'. Suggestion: use the specific noun as subject and prefer 'skill' or 'skills' consistently.

× It helps in brainstorming and everything, uh and stuff.

✓ Handwriting helps with brainstorming and similar activities.

'Everything, uh and stuff' is vague and ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Use a clear phrase like 'similar activities'. Also use 'helps with' rather than 'helps in' for this context.

× But umm, you have to be really patient for.

✓ But you have to be really patient to use it.

The original ends with a preposition 'for' and is incomplete. This is a sentence structure error. Complete the thought by specifying 'to use it' or 'when writing by hand'. Suggestion: avoid hanging prepositions and finish the clause.

× I type on a laptop keyboard. Before I used to type on desktop keyboard, but it's been almost a decade that's I started using umm, laptop and hence the laptop keyboards.

✓ I type on a laptop keyboard. Before, I used to type on a desktop keyboard, but it's been almost a decade since I started using a laptop and its keyboard.

Errors: missing articles 'a' before 'desktop keyboard' and 'a' before 'laptop'; incorrect relative/temporal phrasing 'that's I started' should be 'since I started'. This matches article errors and sentence structure. Suggestion: use articles for singular countable nouns and use 'since' for time expressions.

× But very very recently my husband bought the desktop keyboard and I think that's pretty convenient.

✓ But very recently my husband bought a desktop keyboard, which I think is pretty convenient.

Use of 'the desktop keyboard' implies a specific keyboard previously mentioned; 'a desktop keyboard' is better. Also restructure sentence to avoid 'that's' referring ambiguously. This is sentence structure and article choice; use 'which I think is' for clarity.

× I like I learned to type on a keyboard when I was in middle school.

✓ I learned to type on a keyboard when I was in middle school.

Original has extraneous 'I like' (colloquial filler) causing ungrammatical sentence. Removing it yields correct past tense. This is a past participle/tense related correction: ensure only the past-tense verb 'learned' is used. Suggestion: avoid filler words that break sentence grammar.

× I think it was in my 5th grade.

✓ I think it was in my fifth grade.

Use of numeral with ordinal should be written 'fifth grade' in formal speech; also some dialects say 'in fifth grade' without 'my'. This is an article/phrasing choice. Suggestion: say 'when I was in fifth grade' or 'in my fifth year of school'.

× That's when we were introduced to the computer labs and that was my first computer, umm, to have a type then and then later my dad bought me a laptop and.

✓ That's when we were introduced to the computer lab, and that was the first time I got to type; later my dad bought me a laptop.

Original is run-on, contains fillers and awkward phrasing 'to have a type then'. This is sentence structure error. Break into clear clauses, remove fillers, and use 'the computer lab' (singular) or 'labs' consistently. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and avoid repeating conjunctions.

× I improve my typing mainly by practicing regularly.

✓ I improve my typing mainly by practicing regularly.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'practicing' is properly used as a gerund after 'by'. No change needed.

× I spend time each week transcribing my handwritten notes into the computer.

✓ I spend time each week transcribing my handwritten notes into the computer.

Sentence is acceptable, though 'onto the computer' or 'into the computer' both work; if needed, 'onto my computer' is clearer. This is not an error per the provided list.

× This not only makes my notes accessible on multiple devices, but also helps me build speed and accuracy over time.

✓ This not only makes my notes accessible on multiple devices, but it also helps me build speed and accuracy over time.

Add 'it' after the second comma for parallel structure and clarity. This is a sentence structure issue to maintain grammatical parallelism. Suggestion: include the subject 'it' for the second clause in correlative constructions.