视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and logical. Start with a clear topic sentence addressing the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense errors and unclear phrases (e.g., “took me a brief”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, last Sunday I climbed to the Peak and saw many beautiful scenes, so I took several photos and selfies with my friends. I like to keep those photos because they remind me of relaxing moments.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix repetition and preposition use (‘in there’ → ‘there’). Keep answers within 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘peaceful’, ‘less crowded’).

示例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded. For instance, when I visit the countryside I can relax, breathe fresh air, and enjoy open scenery, which helps me unwind from the city’s noise.

建议: Answer directly and avoid vague or colloquial phrases. Use clear comparisons with linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘while’). Provide one concrete example of what you prefer abroad (landscapes, parks) and correct grammar (e.g., ‘other countries’ not ‘the other countries one’).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have more natural landscapes. For example, while Hong Kong is very built-up with many buildings and offices, places I visited abroad had wide forests and mountains, which I find more beautiful and relaxing.

× Yes, Sunday I go to the peak and I saw that a lot of beautiful scenery that took me a brief and I took our selfies with my friends.

✓ Yes. On Sunday I went to the peak and saw a lot of beautiful scenery that took my breath away, and I took selfies with my friends.

The student mixed present and past tense ('go' with 'saw'). Use past tense for completed past events: 'went' and 'saw'. 'Took me a brief' is incorrect phrase; correct idiom is 'took my breath away'. 'Our selfies' should be 'selfies' or 'took selfies with my friends'. Use 'On Sunday' for correct preposition and capitalization. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent when describing past experiences and use common idioms accurately.

× I prefer rural areas because I think that urban areas are too busy and and I just can't relax in there.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I think that urban areas are too busy and I just can't relax there.

The preposition 'in' before 'there' is unnecessary; 'relax there' is the correct form. Also remove the duplicated 'and and'. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and use 'there' without 'in' after 'relax'.

× So what I like rural areas is it can make me relax and take a breath too.

✓ What I like about rural areas is that they help me relax and breathe.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing linking words. Use 'What I like about X is that...' and use a plural subject 'they' to refer to 'rural areas'. 'Take a breath' is better expressed as 'breathe' in this context. Suggestion: use 'about' after 'like' when specifying reasons and include 'that' before a clause.

× I prefer the other countries one because in my country, Hong Kong, it is just like many companies stay in the ground, but other countries they are more nature feels, scenery and uh, this is more beautiful.

✓ I prefer other countries because in my country, Hong Kong, many companies are located on the ground, but other countries feel more natural and have more beautiful scenery.

Do not use 'the' before 'other countries' in this general comparison. 'It is just like many companies stay in the ground' is ungrammatical; use 'many companies are located on the ground' or better specify 'there are many buildings/companies'. 'They are more nature feels' is incorrect adjective/adverb usage; use 'feel more natural' and 'have more beautiful scenery'. Also avoid filler 'uh'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use passive or 'are located' for placement, and use appropriate adjective forms.

× So I like them.

✓ So I like those places.

The pronoun 'them' is vague; replace with 'those places' to clearly refer to 'other countries' or their scenery. Suggestion: use explicit nouns when the reference could be unclear to improve clarity.