视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking word if you add a second sentence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel I usually take many photos of landscapes and cityscapes to remember the trip and to share my experiences with friends.

建议: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid repetition, correct grammar and word order, and use linking words to compare. Provide a specific reason and an example in one or two supporting sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and find them more peaceful. For instance, rural areas have open fields and quiet lanes, whereas urban areas are usually crowded and noisy, so I feel more relaxed in the countryside.

建议: Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give a specific reason and a brief example or plan for the future. Correct grammar (tenses and articles) and avoid vague phrases like "basically."

示例: I prefer views in my own country for now because I haven't traveled abroad yet, but I am eager to see scenery in other countries. For example, I often browse photos of coastal towns online and hope to visit places like that next year to compare them with the landscapes at home.

× When I travel, I usually click lot of pictures to save as a part of memory.

✓ When I travel, I usually click a lot of pictures to save as part of my memories.

The sentence is missing the quantifier 'a' before 'lot' (should be 'a lot of'), and the phrase 'as a part of memory' is unnatural. Use 'as part of my memories' to indicate saving photos for personal memories. Also add the possessive 'my' to clarify whose memories they are.

× I belong to rural areas so I spend my most of the time in rural areas as compared to urban areas.

✓ I come from a rural area, so I spend most of my time in rural areas compared to urban areas.

Use 'come from' rather than 'belong to' for origin. 'Rural areas' (plural) is acceptable, but 'a rural area' is more natural for background. 'My most of the time' is incorrect; correct is 'most of my time' or 'most of the time'. Also 'as compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'compared with' is preferred.

× But when I visit urban areas I I found that it is very overcrowded whereas in urban areas whereas in rural areas there is a peaceful out atmosphere.

✓ But when I visit urban areas, I find that they are very overcrowded, whereas rural areas have a peaceful atmosphere.

The verb tense should match the general present habit, so use 'find' not 'found'. Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'urban areas' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'peaceful out atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'peaceful atmosphere'. Also avoid repeating 'whereas in urban areas'—combine ideas concisely.

× Basically I have not visited any other country yet but when I saw it on Internet and I love to explore in future.

✓ Basically, I have not visited any other country yet, but when I see them on the Internet I would love to explore them in the future.

There is a tense and reference inconsistency. 'When I saw it on Internet' mixes past ('saw') with present context; use 'see' for general statements. 'It' is vague; use 'them' to refer to other countries or 'them' for 'other countries' images. 'I love to explore in future' should be 'I would love to explore them in the future' to express desire about a future action. Also add articles: 'on the Internet' and 'in the future'.