视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Pronunciation, grammar and sentence structure need correction and answers should be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid verb form errors (e.g., “to taking” → “taking” or “to take”), and keep to no more than five sentences. Add one specific example to make the response more concrete and use linking words for flow (e.g., “because” or “for example”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me relax and remember places I visit. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach and narrow streets in old towns, which helps me recall the mood of those places.

建议: Improve grammar and coherence: correct subject-verb and possessive forms (e.g., “it's air” → “the air”), avoid unclear phrases (“made me feel on wind”) and use linking words like “because” and “so”. Provide one specific detail about what you like in rural views to make the answer more vivid.

示例: I prefer rural areas because the air is fresher and the scenery is calmer. For example, I love photographing mountain streams and wide fields, which make me feel peaceful and refreshed.

建议: Fix grammar and tense, and be more precise. Use a clear topic sentence, and give a specific reason with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Avoid vague phrasing like “their view is more clean”—say “the scenery is cleaner” or “the air quality is better.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery and air quality often seem cleaner. For example, when I visited Japan, the parks and streets were well maintained and less polluted, which made taking photos much more enjoyable.

× Yes, I love to taking picture of various things.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of various things.

The verb pattern after 'love' should be either 'love to [base verb]' or 'love [verb]-ing'. 'Love to taking' mixes both forms; use 'love taking' or 'love to take'. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'various things'. Suggestion: Use 'I love taking pictures' or 'I love to take pictures'.

× It made me feel relaxed and it can help me collect different places.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and can help me remember different places.

Tense and meaning: 'made me feel' is past tense but context is general preference, so present simple 'makes' is better. 'It can help me collect different places' is unnatural: you 'collect memories' or 'remember places'. Use 'remember' or 'document' instead. Also omit the second 'it' for concision. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual feelings and a clearer verb like 'remember' or 'document'.

× I prefer rural areas because it's air is fresher compared to urban areas and I'm a big fan of mountains and rivers.

✓ I prefer rural areas because their air is fresher than in urban areas, and I'm a big fan of mountains and rivers.

Incorrect pronoun/possessive: 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' and is wrong for possession; use 'their' to refer to 'rural areas' (plural). Comparative structure: use 'fresher than' instead of 'fresher compared to'. Also add 'in' to clarify 'than in urban areas'. Suggestion: Use correct possessive pronoun 'their' and the standard comparative 'fresher than in urban areas'.

× It made me feel on wind.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed by the wind.

This sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Made me feel on wind' mixes past tense and incorrect preposition. Use present tense 'makes' for habitual preference and a natural expression such as 'refreshed by the wind' or 'like the wind on my face'. Suggestion: Use clear collocations like 'feel refreshed' or 'feel the wind on my face'.

× I think in other countries like Korea or Japan their view is more clean.

✓ I think in other countries like Korea or Japan, the scenery is cleaner.

'Their view is more clean' is awkward: use 'scenery' or 'views' and place comparative adverb correctly: 'cleaner' (adjective) not 'more clean'. Also include a comma after the introductory clause. Use 'the scenery' or 'the views' rather than 'their view'. Suggestion: Say 'the scenery is cleaner' or 'the views are cleaner'.

× Maybe it's because their air pollution wasn't that serious.

✓ Maybe it's because air pollution there isn't that serious.

Tense and pronoun placement: context discusses present situation, so use present tense 'isn't' rather than past 'wasn't'. Also use 'there' to refer to those countries rather than 'their' before 'air pollution' for natural word order. Suggestion: Use present tense for general statements and natural placement: 'air pollution there isn't that serious'.