视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ để câu rõ ràng hơn; dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi; cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ hợp lý. Ví dụ: tránh cụm từ không rõ nghĩa (“iron logic”), sửa thì và danh từ (camera → take photos), và giới hạn độ dài tối đa 5 câu. Nên nói: “Yes, I like taking photos of landscapes. For example, I often photograph mountains and sunsets because ...”

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains and sunsets because their colors change dramatically at sunrise and sunset. I usually use my phone or a small camera and try different angles to capture the light. This hobby helps me relax and notice more details in nature.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer... / It depends...), sau đó giải thích bằng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với liên từ như “however” hoặc “when”. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (depend → depends, a urban → an urban, quietly → quiet) và sắp xếp ý mạch lạc: nêu sở thích hoặc rằng nó phụ thuộc vào tâm trạng, rồi đưa ví dụ cụ thể về cảm nhận ở thành phố và vùng nông thôn.

示例: It depends on my mood, but I usually prefer rural views. When I feel stressed, I like visiting the countryside because it is quiet and peaceful. However, I also enjoy urban views for their energy and interesting architecture when I want to feel inspired.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer... / I like...), tránh những thông tin không liên quan như “I am an introvert” trừ khi giải thích lý do liên quan. Sửa ngữ pháp (had → has, others country → other countries) và cung cấp lý do cụ thể vì sao thích cảnh trong nước hoặc nước ngoài, kèm ví dụ cụ thể địa điểm hoặc tính năng địa lý. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I know many beautiful places here. For example, we have diverse landscapes from beaches to mountains, and I often visit a nearby national park with dramatic cliffs and waterfalls. I also enjoy learning about my country's culture through its scenery.

× Yes, I am not a professional photographer.

✓ Yes, I'm not a professional photographer, but I enjoy taking photos.

The original sentence is short and unclear in context; it needs additional information to connect to the question. Suggestion: add a contrasting clause to explain that despite not being a professional, the student likes photography.

× The iron logic in photo when I suddenly cameras a beautiful landscape.

✓ I feel a sudden urge to take a photo when I see a beautiful landscape.

Original has incorrect word choices and word order (iron logic, cameras) and lacks grammatical verbs. Suggestion: use 'feel a sudden urge' and 'take a photo' to express the idea clearly.

× For example, I really like college the natural view, so I have tend to take photo about the mountains and sunsets.

✓ For example, I really like natural scenery, so I tend to take photos of mountains and sunsets.

Errors: unnecessary word 'college', wrong preposition 'about', missing plural for 'photos', wrong verb form 'have tend'. Use 'tend to' and 'photos of' plus plural 'photos' and 'natural scenery'.

× It's depend on my emotions in the I am living in a urban area, so I think urban areas are bring us vibrant vice first connect come when I come in visits to rural area, I feel it's very peaceful and quietly.

✓ It depends on my emotions. I live in an urban area, so urban areas feel vibrant to me, but when I visit rural areas I feel they are peaceful and quiet.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'It's depend' should be 'It depends' (subject-verb agreement), 'I am living in a urban area' better as 'I live in an urban area' and use 'an' before vowel-sound, 'bring us vibrant vice first connect come' is nonsensical and should be replaced by 'feel vibrant to me', 'when I come in visits to rural area' → 'when I visit rural areas', 'quietly' (adverb) should be 'quiet' (adjective). Suggestions: simplify sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement, correct article use, and use adjectives to describe nouns.

× Well actually speaking I am.

✓ Well, actually, I am.

Original fragment 'Well actually speaking I am.' is incomplete and awkward. Suggestion: keep 'Well, actually, I am' and follow with more information, e.g., 'Well, actually, I am an introvert.'

× I am an introvert person so I rarely talk about to others country.

✓ I am an introverted person, so I rarely talk about other countries to others.

Errors: 'introvert person' should be 'introverted person' or 'an introvert', 'talk about to others country' incorrect word order and prepositions. Suggest using 'talk about other countries to others' or better 'talk to others about other countries'.

× So I think my country is very beautiful and had many beautiful landscape.

✓ So I think my country is very beautiful and has many beautiful landscapes.

Use present tense 'has' not past 'had' because the opinion is current. Also use plural 'landscapes'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and ensure noun pluralization.