视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid incorrect word forms and redundant phrases, and add one specific supporting detail. Also use linking words to connect ideas. Focus on correct vocabulary (e.g., "surroundings" not "roundings", "photographing" not "to photography").

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visited Shimla last year, I photographed the mountain ranges and misty valleys because I like capturing natural light and textures. Also, I often take pictures of cityscapes to compare how atmosphere changes between locations.

建议: Answer directly with correct grammar and avoid filler words. Use one linking word to add a specific reason and a short example instead of repeating the same idea. Correct plural/singular forms and adverbs (e.g., "often" not "oftenly").

示例: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer abundant greenery and varied plant life. For instance, last summer I spent a day in a nearby village taking close-ups of wildflowers and wide shots of rolling hills, which showed different colours and textures.

建议: Make the response clearer and more specific: state your preference, give a reason with linking words, and provide a concrete example. Fix grammar ("different countries", "it would help me"), and avoid repeating phrases like "as well" twice.

示例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because new places expose me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, visiting Japan last year allowed me to capture unique temple gardens and coastal scenes that taught me new composition techniques.

× I am fond of taking pictures of different views such as roundings.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of different views such as surroundings.

The student used 'roundings', which is not a standard noun. The correct word is 'surroundings' (plural). Use the plural noun 'surroundings' to refer to the area around a place. Suggestion: learn common nouns and their plural forms and use a dictionary to check uncommon words. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Whenever I go to travel, I openly prefer to photography of the atmosphere.

✓ Whenever I travel, I openly prefer to photograph the atmosphere.

'Go to travel' is incorrect; use 'travel' or 'go travelling'. 'Photography' is a noun; the verb 'photograph' is required after 'prefer to'. Also 'of the atmosphere' is acceptable but 'the atmosphere' fits. Suggestion: after 'prefer to' use base verb form; use 'travel' instead of 'go to travel'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Apart from this, last year I went to Shimla City and I took a lot of pictures of mountains.

✓ Apart from this, last year I went to Shimla and took a lot of pictures of the mountains.

This sentence is mostly correct but can be improved: omit redundant 'City' for Shimla and use 'took' without repeating 'I' (stylistic). Use definite article 'the' with 'mountains' if referring to notable mountains. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use articles appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:5

× To be very honest, I oftenly prefer to take pictures in rural area because it is the best to uh take the pictures of greenery, different kind of trees and plants.

✓ To be very honest, I often prefer to take pictures in rural areas because it is best for capturing greenery and different kinds of trees and plants.

'oftenly' is not a word; the correct adverb is 'often' (Grammar problem ID 20 for adverb placement but primary is formation). 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general meaning. Use 'different kinds of' (plural) and 'best for capturing' is clearer than 'the best to take the pictures of'. Suggestion: learn irregular adverb forms and pluralization of count nouns. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Moreover, the landscape of rural areas UH is too beautiful and I took a lot of pictures in rural areas.

✓ Moreover, the landscape of rural areas is very beautiful, and I took a lot of pictures there.

'Too beautiful' can imply excessive; 'very beautiful' is more natural. Repeating 'in rural areas' is redundant; use 'there'. Also fillers like 'UH' should be omitted. Suggestion: avoid repetition by using pronouns like 'there' and use appropriate intensity adverbs. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Well, I'm quite familiar with my own country's views, so I would like to take pictures of different country because it would be beneficial for me to get a new environment as well as to enhance my knowledge as well.

✓ Well, I'm quite familiar with my own country's views, so I would like to take pictures in different countries because it would be beneficial for me to experience a new environment and enhance my knowledge.

'Different country' is singular and missing an article; the intended meaning is plural 'different countries'. Use 'take pictures in' rather than 'of'. 'Get a new environment' is unnatural; use 'experience a new environment'. Avoid repeating 'as well'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and choose natural collocations (experience a new environment, take pictures in a country). Grammar problem type ID:1