视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence stating that you enjoy photography, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “clicking a picture” → “taking pictures”; “Add a memory in our mobile phone” → “keeps the memory on my phone”). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories on my phone. For example, when I revisit photos of a sunset or a city skyline, I can remember the place and how I felt. Also, taking photos encourages me to notice small details I might otherwise miss.

建议: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar and sentence structure (e.g., “prefer views in rural areas” not “on rural areas”; avoid repetition like “in which where”). Complete your second sentence and provide a concrete example of traditional culture or wildlife.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer quieter landscapes and more wildlife, such as local birds you rarely see in cities. For instance, last year I visited a village where I watched traditional festivals and saw several native bird species during early morning walks, which made the visit memorable.

建议: Answer directly, fix pronoun and grammar errors, and give a specific supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases like “particularly particular region.” If you mean a specific species (e.g., Asiatic lion), name it correctly and explain why that makes local views special. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I can see unique wildlife that isn’t found elsewhere, such as the Asiatic lion in my region. Seeing such animals in their natural habitat makes local trips more exciting and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I do like to take pictures of different views as I do think clicking a picture. Add a memory in our mobile phone as whenever we see it again we can remember we have.

✓ Yes, I do like to take pictures of different views because I think clicking a picture adds a memory to our mobile phone that we can remember when we see it again.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect use of separate short sentences instead of verbs in continuous clauses. 'clicking a picture. Add a memory' is fragmented; it should be a single clause where 'clicking' functions as a gerund and 'adds' is the present simple verb. Use 'because' to connect reason, 'adds a memory to our mobile phone' is the correct verb phrase, and 'that we can remember when we see it again' makes the time reference clear. Suggestion: combine fragments into one complete sentence and use proper verb forms and connectors. Please note: this correction addresses incorrect sentence structure and the need for the present participle/gerund form used within a single clause.

× I do prefer views on rural areas as they are the areas in which where we can see mostly birds which are not seen in the cities or in big towns.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because these are the places where we can mainly see birds that are not seen in cities or large towns.

'prefer views on rural areas' is incorrect preposition use; the correct preposition is 'in rural areas'. 'in which where' is redundant: use 'where'. 'mostly birds' should be 'mainly see birds' (adverb placement). 'big towns' is better as 'large towns'. Suggestion: use 'in' with areas, remove redundant words, and place adverbs before main verbs or adjectives as appropriate.

× Rural areas are the one where we can also watch the traditional culture and.

✓ Rural areas are the places where we can also observe traditional culture.

'Rural areas are the one' mixes plural subject with singular predicate; use plural 'places'. 'watch the traditional culture' is awkward; 'observe traditional culture' or 'experience traditional culture' is more natural. The trailing 'and.' indicates an incomplete sentence; complete the thought. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural nouns and choose appropriate verbs collocating with 'culture'.

× I do prefer you in my nation as here I can see the wildlife which are not seen in the other nations such as specially Indian lion are found in the particularly particular region where I live.

✓ I prefer my own country because here I can see wildlife that is not found in other countries; for example, the Indian lion is found in the particular region where I live.

'I do prefer you in my nation' incorrectly uses 'you' instead of 'my country' or 'my own country'. 'wildlife which are' should be 'wildlife that is' because 'wildlife' is an uncountable collective noun treated as singular. 'the other nations' is better as 'other countries'. Redundant adverbs 'particularly particular' should be simplified. Also 'Indian lion are found' has subject-verb agreement error: 'lion' singular takes 'is' or use plural 'lions are'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns/noun phrases, treat collective nouns properly, fix redundancy, and ensure subject-verb agreement.