视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap net ama dilbilgisi ve akıcılık sorunları var. Cümle yapısını düzeltin, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve bağlaçlarla destekleyici detay ekleyin. Örneğin: 1) Konuyla doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun (‘Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.’). 2) Neden sevdiğinizi kısa bir nedenle açıklayın (‘because I like to capture beautiful moments’). 3) Bir örnek veya sonuç ekleyin (‘so I can look back at them later’). Ayrıca ‘wanna’ yerine daha uygun konuşma İngilizcesi kullanın (‘want to’).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to capture beautiful scenes. For example, when I see an interesting skyline or a colourful sunset, I take a picture so I can remember it and share it with others.

建议: Cevap soruya doğrudan yanıt vermiyor; tercihi belirtmelisiniz (kentsel ya da kırsal). Ayrıca tekrarlardan kaçının ve destekleyici detayları mantıksal bağlaçlarla bağlayın. Öneri: 1) Önce tercih belirtilsin (‘I prefer urban/rural views.’). 2) Nedenini bağlaçla açıklayın (‘because…’). 3) Bir örnek veya kısa sonuç ekleyin. Konuşma dilinde ‘wanna’ yerine ‘want to’ kullanın ve gereksiz dolgu kelimeleri (umm) azaltın.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a variety of interesting sights, such as unique architecture and bustling streets. For instance, I often photograph colourful shop fronts and modern buildings because they give my gallery a lively feel.

建议: Cevap net bir tercih ifade ediyor fakat düşünce eksik ve dilbilgisi hataları var. ‘However’ yanlış bağlamda kullanılmış ve son cümle tamamlanmamış. Öneri: 1) Net konu cümlesi kurun (‘I prefer views in my own country.’). 2) Sebepler verin ve daha spesifik olun (‘because of familiar culture, landscapes and people’). 3) Karşı görüşü kısa ve düzgün biçimde ifade edin (‘But I also enjoy views abroad sometimes because…’).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel connected to the landscapes and the people, and I understand their cultural context. However, I also enjoy sightseeing abroad occasionally because it lets me discover new styles of architecture and different natural scenery.

× Yes, I love them because when I see them beautiful things, I wanna picture them, I wanna put them in my gallery and.

✓ Yes, I love them because when I see beautiful things, I want to photograph them and put them in my gallery.

The student used 'see them beautiful things' which has incorrect word order and an unnecessary pronoun 'them'. Also 'wanna picture them' is colloquial and uses 'picture' as a verb awkwardly. Use 'see beautiful things' and the verb 'photograph' (or 'take pictures of') with 'want to' (formal) instead of 'wanna'. Suggestion: use correct word order (see + adjective + noun) and standard verbs: 'when I see beautiful things, I want to photograph them and put them in my gallery.' Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Yes, I love umm taking pictures because when I see beautiful stuff or signs I want to capture them and keep them in my gallery.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures because when I see beautiful things or interesting signs I want to capture them and keep them in my gallery.

'Stuff' is informal and vague; 'things' or 'interesting signs' is clearer. The structure is mostly correct but improve word choice. Keep 'taking' as present participle used as a gerund correctly. Suggestion: prefer precise nouns and avoid filler words. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Umm For example, when I see my friends together I wanna picture them because.

✓ For example, when I see my friends together I want to photograph them.

The fragment ends with 'because' without completing the reason; remove the unfinished conjunction and use 'photograph' instead of colloquial 'wanna picture'. 'Photograph' is a clearer verb. Suggestion: avoid trailing conjunctions and use full forms: 'I want to photograph them.' Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Umm, I prefer areas in my country because I love my country and I love my people.

✓ I prefer places in my own country because I love my country and my people.

Use 'places' instead of 'areas' for natural collocation with preferring where to visit. 'In my own country' is more natural than 'in my country' after 'prefer'. Also remove filler 'Umm'. Suggestion: streamline sentence: 'I prefer places in my own country because I love my country and my people.' Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Umm, However, uh, maybe we have in other countries and be a good.

✓ However, maybe there are good places in other countries as well.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'we have in other countries and be a good' is not a valid clause. Use 'there are' to introduce existence (There be issue) and a clear noun phrase 'good places'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: 'However, there may also be good places in other countries.' Grammar problem type ID: 3}]}{