视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and fix mistakes (e.g., remove extra words like “pictures” after photos and replace “whenever I sorry” with ‘whenever I travel’). Add one specific detail and a linking phrase. Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often photograph city skylines or mountain panoramas to remember the trip. This helps me recall the places and emotions I felt during the journey.

建议: Give a clearer topic sentence and correct tense and word choice. Avoid filler phrases like “I remember” and repetition. Use a linking word to explain why you prefer rural views and provide a specific example to support your opinion.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more peaceful and uncommon to me. For instance, I enjoy photographing rice fields and quiet villages, which are very different from the busy city scenes I see every day.

建议: Use more natural phrasing and improve clarity. Replace “views from” with “views in,” use present/past consistently, and expand slightly with specific details about what you saw and learned. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” correctly.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they expose me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I visited Japan, I enjoyed photographing temple gardens and vibrant city streets, which taught me about local customs and everyday life.

× Yes, I love taking photos of pictures whenever I sorry.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos whenever I travel.

The original sentence contains 'sorry', which is incorrect in context and likely a mis-saying for 'travel'. Also 'taking photos of pictures' is redundant; 'taking photos' suffices. Use the verb 'travel' in base form with 'whenever' to indicate habitual action. Suggest replacing the incorrect word and removing redundancy to make the sentence natural.

× I love taking photos of places whenever I travel.

✓ I love taking photos of places whenever I travel.

This sentence is correct as written. 'Taking' is the present participle used correctly after 'love' to express a habitual action. No change needed.

× It makes me remember the experience I had during travelling.

✓ It helps me remember the experiences I had while travelling.

Use 'helps me remember' or simply 'reminds me of' rather than 'makes me remember' for natural phrasing. 'Experience' should be plural if referring to multiple occasions, and 'during travelling' is awkward — use 'while travelling'. Also in British English 'travelling' is fine; in American English use 'traveling'.

× Since I lived in urban areas for the longest time, I remember I prefer views in rural areas because it's more it's rare for me.

✓ Since I lived in urban areas for a long time, I prefer rural views because they are rarer to me.

Several issues: 'for the longest time' is awkward; use 'for a long time'. 'I remember I prefer' mixes tenses and is unnecessary — use present 'I prefer'. 'Views in rural areas' can be shortened to 'rural views'. 'it's more it's rare for me' is ungrammatical; express the idea as 'they are rarer to me' or 'they are less common for me'. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('they are').

× Admittedly, I prefer views from other countries.

✓ Admittedly, I prefer views in other countries.

'Views from other countries' is understandable but 'views in other countries' is more natural when discussing scenery encountered while visiting. No tense change required; this is a wording improvement rather than a grammatical tense error.

× For example, when I went to Japan, I really loved looking at the sceneries since I would learn about the culture and the people there.

✓ For example, when I went to Japan, I really loved looking at the scenery because I could learn about the culture and the people there.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) rather than 'sceneries'. 'Since I would learn' is incorrect here — use 'because I could learn' or 'because I would learn' depending on intended meaning; 'could learn' correctly expresses ability during the trip. Keep past tense consistent ('went', 'loved').