视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (word order and articles), avoid redundancy, and support with one specific reason or example. Use linking words if adding detail.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me notice how places vary and often brings me a sense of calm. For example, I like taking photos of quiet parks in the morning because the light and empty paths make the scene peaceful.

建议: Provide a clear, grammatical topic sentence and one or two specific supporting reasons. Reduce hesitations and use linking words (because, so, for example) to make your answer coherent.

示例: I prefer views in open or rural areas because they make me feel more energetic after living in the city. For example, walking along a countryside trail refreshes me and I often take photos of wide fields and skies to capture that feeling.

建议: Use natural phrasing and avoid filler words. Give a concise topic sentence and one clear specific reason or example. Correct collocations (e.g., "prefer views in my own country") and verb forms.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I live in a coastal city with a long beach, which helps me relax after work. For instance, I often photograph sunsets on the beach to unwind and remember the place's atmosphere.

× Yes, of course, I'd like to take pictures of different perspectives to see how is different and to feel the sense of peace or sense of order feeling.

✓ Yes, of course, I'd like to take pictures of different perspectives to see how they are different and to feel a sense of peace or a sense of order.

The original sentence uses incorrect word order for a clause with a subject and verb: 'how is different' should be 'how they are different' (subject 'they' + verb 'are'). Also 'sense of peace or sense of order feeling' is awkward and redundant; use 'a sense of peace or a sense of order'. This fixes subject-verb order and improves noun phrase usage. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I definitely, uh, prefer the views in the open areas because it's actually make me feel more, uh, active when I leave, uh, especially when I live in the city.

✓ I definitely prefer the views in open areas because they actually make me feel more active when I leave, especially when I live in the city.

The clause 'it's actually make me' mixes a singular subject contraction 'it's' (it is) with the plural verb 'make'. The correct subject is 'they' referring to 'the views', so use 'they actually make me'. Also remove filler pauses and unnecessary articles: 'views in open areas' is more natural. This fixes subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× So I think that is suitable for me to view in open areas.

✓ So I think it is more suitable for me to view scenes in open areas.

The original sentence has an awkward structure 'that is suitable for me to view in open areas.' Replace 'that' with 'it' as a dummy subject and specify 'view scenes' for clarity. Adding 'more' improves comparative meaning. This addresses sentence structure and clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I extremely, uh, prefer views in my own country because, uh, it is a coastal city with a Long Beach, so I can, uh, be more relaxed with uh, uh, with this after my, uh, finish my job.

✓ I strongly prefer views in my own country because it is a coastal city with a long beach, so I can be more relaxed there after I finish my job.

Use 'strongly' or 'really' instead of 'extremely' before 'prefer' for natural collocation; 'extremely prefer' is uncommon. Remove filler words. 'Long Beach' is a common noun here so use lowercase 'long beach' unless it's a proper name; use 'there' to refer to the city and 'after I finish my job' for correct clause order. This corrects adverb choice, article/capitalization, pronoun reference, and verb clause order. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× ...it is a coastal city with a Long Beach...

✓ ...it is a coastal city with a long beach...

'Long beach' is not necessarily a proper noun; unless referring to the specific place named 'Long Beach', use lowercase and no extra article. Use 'a long beach' to indicate one of the city's features. This fixes article and capitalization usage. Grammar problem type ID: 22