视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with examples. Avoid filler words (e.g., "you know", "like") and tense errors. Aim for 2–4 well-structured sentences and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., "compile", "album", "souvenir").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually photograph landscapes to compile digital scrapbooks and keep visual records of trips. For example, after visiting a seaside town last year I took many photos to include in a travel album that helps me remember places and share them with friends.

建议: Clarify your contrast and use linking words to structure the answer (e.g., "However", "on the other hand"). Avoid repetition ("city city") and grammar errors ("quiet" -> "quite"). Provide a clear preference or explain why you like both with specific examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: It depends, but I slightly prefer urban views because I find city lights and architecture fascinating as someone from the countryside. However, I also enjoy rural scenery for its peaceful landscapes and natural colours; for instance, I often photograph the sunrise over nearby rice fields.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar: state your current situation, then give a clear expectation or reason. Avoid redundant phrases and finish your sentence. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" to explain differences in scenery and climate. Keep sentences concise and specific.

示例: I haven't travelled abroad yet, so I can only speak from experience in Indonesia. I hope to visit other countries in the future because their landscapes and climates vary — for example, I would like to see countries with four seasons to photograph autumn colours and snowy scenes.

× Of course, taking picture was part of like my report after going to, uh, beautiful places that I find interesting.

✓ Of course, taking pictures was part of my report after going to beautiful places that I found interesting.

The noun should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue ID 1) and the clause refers to a past experience so 'find' should be past 'found' (past tense issue ID 5). Also remove filler 'like' and extra commas for clarity.

× I think it depends because I like urban area because I live in rural areas.

✓ I think it depends because I like urban areas even though I live in a rural area.

Use 'urban areas' (plural) or 'the urban area' to match general meaning (singular/plural issue ID 1). Also use 'a rural area' to refer to one area (article/number). Rephrase for clarity and logical contrast.

× So basically city city lights are quiet astonishing for me who lives in rural area.

✓ So basically city lights are quite astonishing to me, who live in a rural area.

'city city' is a repetition error and should be 'city lights'. 'quiet' is wrong word; use adverb 'quite' (incorrect adjectives/adverbs ID 13). Use 'to me' and correct subject-verb agreement 'who live' because 'who' refers to 'me' (subject-verb agreement ID 27). Add article 'a' before 'rural area' (article errors ID 22).

× But I love to take beautiful sceneries in rural area because I live there.

✓ But I love to take beautiful scenery in the rural area because I live there.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; use singular 'scenery' rather than 'sceneries' (singular/plural issue ID 1). Add 'the' before 'rural area' for specificity (definite article ID 17).

× I actually haven't been able to drop to travel outside our outside the country because I've been living in Indonesia for whole life.

✓ I actually haven't been able to travel outside the country because I've been living in Indonesia my whole life.

Remove extraneous words 'drop to' and duplicate 'outside'. Use 'the country' (article). Add 'my' before 'whole life' and keep present perfect 'have been living' which is correct for a continuing situation; remove incorrect phrasing (past tense/word choice ID 5).

× Maybe next time I will visit like other countries because of course the sceneries are quite different because here there are only two seasons and in like other countries some of countries have.

✓ Maybe next time I will visit other countries because the scenery is quite different; here we have only two seasons, while some other countries have more seasons.

Remove filler 'like'. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of 'sceneries' (singular/plural issue ID 1). Complete the comparative clause and correct word order: 'here we have only two seasons' and 'some other countries have more' to finish the idea (sentence structure error ID 26).