视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cách nói chưa tự nhiên, nhiều tiếng “uh” và lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý bị che mờ. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề, dùng 2–3 câu bổ sung rõ ràng với liên từ (for example, because) và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng. Sửa ngữ pháp (I prefer taking photographs of different views; when I’m on vacation in a lovely place I usually take photos of historical sites).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, when I’m on vacation in a picturesque place, I usually take photos of historical sites because they have interesting architecture and tell a story about the area.

建议: Câu thiếu trôi chảy và nhiều lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp (enjoy/love both used, 'pupil' sai từ). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer rural views), rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể dùng liên từ (because, for example). Chú ý chọn từ chính xác: 'people' thay cho 'pupil', 'untouched' thay cho 'not influenced'. Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are often quieter and more peaceful. For example, the countryside usually has untouched scenery and fewer people, so I can relax and enjoy nature.

建议: Ý chính rõ nhưng diễn đạt lặp và ngữ pháp kém. Trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer views in my country) rồi nêu lý do cụ thể (familiarity, cultural heritage, favorite spots), tránh lặp từ như 'many people, many foreigner people'. Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (foreigners, enjoy visiting) và câu ngắn gọn.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I’m familiar with the best spots and the cultural landscapes. For instance, many foreigners visit our historic towns and national parks to enjoy the scenery and local traditions.

× I prefer, uh, type photo, uh, in different views, uh, for example, uh, when I have uh, vacation in the lovely, uh, place I usually take photo in, uh, historical.

✓ I prefer taking photos of different views. For example, when I have a vacation in a lovely place I usually take photos of historical sites.

Student used 'type photo' instead of the correct -ing form 'taking photos' (verb + -ing form). Also 'take photo in, historical' is ungrammatical; use 'take photos of historical sites'. Suggestions: use the gerund after 'prefer' (prefer + verb-ing), make 'photo' plural when referring to more than one, and use clear noun phrases like 'historical sites'.

× I love enjoy the view in rural areas because in there it they have a lot of beautiful place which is not influenced by pupil and stay calm with the natural beauty.

✓ I enjoy the views in rural areas because there are many beautiful places that are not affected by people and remain calm with natural beauty.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'in there' is incorrect; use 'there' or 'in rural areas'. 'Have a lot of beautiful place' should be 'there are many beautiful places' (existence expression + plural). 'Influenced by pupil' is wrong word choice and singular; use 'affected by people'. Suggestions: use 'there are' to indicate existence, pluralize nouns when needed, and choose appropriate prepositions (e.g., 'in rural areas') and vocabulary ('people' not 'pupil').

× I love the side in my country because my country is the beautiful nation in the whole world and many people, many foreigner people come to my country to enjoy joy.

✓ I prefer the sights in my country because my country is one of the most beautiful nations in the world and many foreign visitors come to enjoy themselves.

Pronoun and article problems: 'I love the side' is unclear; use 'the sights'. 'The beautiful nation' needs an article and comparative phrasing; 'one of the most beautiful nations' is natural. 'Many foreigner people' is incorrect; use 'many foreign visitors' or 'many foreigners'. Also 'enjoy joy' is redundant; use 'enjoy themselves' or 'enjoy the scenery'. Suggestions: use correct noun phrases ('sights', 'foreign visitors'), proper comparative/superlative structures, and reflexive or appropriate verbs for 'enjoy'.