视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense errors, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about what you like to photograph. Use linking words if you add explanations.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I even took a one-month photography course because I love capturing landscapes and cityscapes. For example, I often photograph sunsets over fields or interesting building facades when I travel.

建议: Provide a clear direct answer and avoid filler phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. countryside, landscapes) and one specific reason with an example. Use a linking word to connect preference and reason.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside has more natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling fields and forests, which feel more peaceful compared with busy city streets.

建议: Answer directly and avoid uncertain language. Fix repetition and sentence fragments. Give one clear reason and a brief example or comparison. Use linking words like "because" or "however" correctly.

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because it has vast green fields and dense vegetation. For example, when I travel domestically I often visit national parks to photograph lush landscapes, whereas many other countries I’ve seen are more urbanized.

× In fact that I even had took a photography course for for one month because I was so fond of clicking pictures of different different views and scenery.

✓ In fact, I even took a photography course for one month because I was so fond of taking pictures of different views and scenery.

The phrase 'had took' is incorrect because 'took' is the simple past and the past participle is 'taken' when used with 'had'. However, the context does not require past perfect ('had taken'); simple past 'I even took' is correct. Also 'clicking pictures' is informal; 'taking pictures' is more natural. Remove the duplicated words 'for' and repeated 'different'. Suggestions: use simple past for completed actions (I took a course), use 'taken' only with perfect constructions (I have taken / I had taken).

× And I love taking pictures. It's kind of a hobby for me.

✓ And I love taking pictures; it's kind of a hobby for me.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable, but punctuation can improve clarity. 'Taking' is the correct present participle after 'love'. Suggestion: use a semicolon or separate sentences to join related clauses more smoothly.

× Well, in my preference, I like views more in the rural areas other than rather than urban areas.

✓ Well, I prefer rural views to urban ones.

The original uses awkward and redundant prepositions/phrases: 'in my preference' and 'other than rather than' are incorrect. The verb 'prefer' is followed by the structure 'prefer A to B'. Also 'rural areas' vs 'urban areas' can be shortened to 'rural views' and 'urban ones' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and avoid redundant prepositions.

× That is because urban areas are not really full of beautiful sceneries if we compare it with rural areas.

✓ That is because urban areas are not really full of beautiful scenery compared with rural areas.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. The phrase 'compare it with' is awkward; use 'compared with' or 'compared to'. Suggestion: use 'scenery' (uncountable) and the standard comparative phrase 'compared with'.

× Rural areas are full of, you know, plants, forest areas and fields.

✓ Rural areas are full of, you know, plants, forests and fields.

'Forest areas' is wordy; the plural noun 'forests' is more natural here. No preposition error per se but simplifying the noun phrase improves grammaticality and fluency. Suggestion: use parallel noun forms 'plants, forests and fields'.

× So it has better scenery.

✓ So they have better scenery.

The subject 'rural areas' is plural, so the verb should agree with a plural subject: 'they have' rather than 'it has'. Also 'scenery' remains uncountable. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement when referring back to a plural noun.

× I think I like the views in my own country, other than any other country.

✓ I think I like the views in my own country more than those in other countries.

'Other than any other country' is incorrect usage. To compare preferences use 'more than' and 'those in other countries' to indicate plural views elsewhere. Suggestion: use comparative structure 'more than' and refer back with 'those'.

× That is preferably because my country is full of vegetation, fields, open fields and a lot of greenery.

✓ That is because my country is full of vegetation, open fields and a lot of greenery.

'Preferably' is incorrect here; the adverb means 'as a preference' but the intended meaning is causal: 'That is because'. Also 'fields, open fields' is redundant; keep one form. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons and avoid repeated nouns.

× Because I believe that in my mind there is a picture that all the other countries are full of, you know, urban views.

✓ I believe that in my mind there is an image that other countries are full of urban views.

Beginning with 'Because' creates a fragment if not attached to a main clause. The phrase 'I believe that in my mind there is a picture that...' is wordy and awkward. Use 'image' and remove 'all the' and filler 'you know' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and reduce redundant fillers.

× But in my country it also has.

✓ But my country also has them.

The clause lacks a clear object and has incorrect subject-verb structure. 'It also has' is vague; 'my country also has them' (referring to urban views) matches plural 'them' and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject and object are explicit and verbs agree with subjects.