学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your status, correct factual errors and keep sentences short. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I am a first-year student"), correct institution name, and a clear graduation timeline. Avoid unnecessary words like "repairing" which is incorrect here.

示例: I am a first-year student at the University of Economics and Finance. I am studying Banking and Finance and I expect to graduate in 2027.

建议: Answer directly with one clear sentence about where and what you study. Keep details concise and grammatically correct. Check consistency (student said first year earlier). Use linking words to add a brief reason or example. Avoid redundancy like "really enjoy it a lot."

示例: I study at the University of Economics and Finance, where I major in Banking and Finance. I enjoy the course because it helps me understand financial markets and risk management.

建议: Give a direct opinion and support it with one or two specific reasons. Use correct grammar and phrases ("opportunity," "English skills"). Avoid mixed or unclear ideas—explain how being private affects your learning and career chances.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the university has modern facilities and strong career services. However, because it is a private institution, I also focus on improving my English skills to increase my future job opportunities.

建议: Respond directly and briefly. If you say no, give one clear reason using correct expressions ("I grew up" is incorrect here). Use linking words to make the reason coherent. Avoid awkward phrases like "frown up."

示例: No, I wouldn't want major changes because the university already provides modern facilities and many opportunities to deepen my knowledge.

建议: Start with a clear statement about your plans. Use correct tense and phrasing ("I hope to graduate in 2027"). Give a specific, realistic next step (e.g., postgraduate study, internship, or job) and a reason. Avoid vague or idiomatic phrases like "get ready to walk."

示例: I hope to graduate in 2027 and then find a job at a global company in the banking sector. Meanwhile, I plan to do internships and improve my English to prepare for that career.

× I am a first year student who's studying at University of Economic and Finance and repairing degree graduation in 2027.

✓ I am a first-year student who is studying at the University of Economics and Finance and will graduate in 2027.

Problems: incorrect relative pronoun contraction (who's) for formal writing, missing article before university, incorrect name of the institution, wrong verb 'repairing', and awkward phrase 'degree graduation'. Suggestions: use 'who is' or 'who's' in speech but write fully for clarity, include the definite article 'the' before the university name, use the correct name 'University of Economics and Finance', and use 'will graduate in 2027' to express a future planned event.

× I am studying at the University of Economics and Finance and I major is banking and Finance.

✓ I am studying at the University of Economics and Finance and my major is Banking and Finance.

Problems: incorrect sentence structure after 'and'—using 'I major is' is ungrammatical. Also missing possessive 'my' and capitalization inconsistency. Suggestions: use the possessive 'my major is' to link student and field of study, and capitalize degree names consistently.

× I am third year student and I really enjoy it a lot because I understand financial market and risk management.

✓ I am a third-year student and I really enjoy it because I understand financial markets and risk management.

Problems: missing article 'a' before 'third-year student', compound adjective needs hyphens, redundant 'a lot' with 'really', and 'financial market' should be plural 'financial markets' when speaking generally. Suggestions: include the article, hyphenate 'third-year', and use plural for general nouns.

× To be honest, I study in a private university, so I need to improve my English skill and create a opportunity in my future career.

✓ To be honest, I study at a private university, so I need to improve my English skills and create opportunities in my future career.

Problems: wrong preposition 'in' with 'study at a university', 'English skill' should be plural 'English skills', and 'a opportunity' should be 'opportunities' or 'an opportunity'. Suggestions: use 'study at', pluralize 'skills' for general ability, and choose the correct article 'an' if singular or plural 'opportunities' for general sense.

× Oh I think no because I really frown up to study here because it give me the modern facilities and opportunity to improve my knowledge.

✓ Oh, I don't think so because I really grew up studying here; it gives me modern facilities and opportunities to improve my knowledge.

Problems: 'I think no' is unnatural; use 'I don't think so'. 'frown up' is incorrect — likely 'grew up'. Repetition of 'because' is awkward. Verb agreement: 'it give' should be 'it gives'. 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' for general meaning. Suggestions: use 'I don't think so', correct verb 'grew up', ensure subject-verb agreement with 'gives', and prefer plural 'opportunities'.

× I don't know but I hope I graduation in 2027 and then I have a good job in global company. I am really excited and get ready to walk.

✓ I don't know, but I hope I will graduate in 2027 and then get a good job in a global company. I am really excited and ready to start my career.

Problems: missing future auxiliary 'will' for 'graduate' (future intention), wrong form 'I graduation', incorrect article 'a global company' needs 'a', and awkward phrase 'get ready to walk'. Suggestions: use 'will graduate' or 'hope to graduate', use 'get a good job in a global company', and replace 'get ready to walk' with clear expressions like 'ready to start my career' or 'ready to begin working'.