学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar (articles, verb forms), and provide a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and keep under five sentences.

示例: I'm a third-year student at the University of Economics and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City. I major in Banking and Finance, which I enjoy because it teaches me practical skills in financial analysis and risk management.

建议: Good direct answer and reason. Fix small grammar/word order issues and use linking words for coherence. Be specific about how travel affects you.

示例: I study at the University of Economics and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City. Because I live about 30 kilometres away, I usually leave very early, so I can avoid traffic and arrive on time for my morning lectures.

建议: Clarify your main idea, correct many grammar and word choice errors, and give one or two specific reasons why the place is good. Keep sentences clear and coherent with linking words.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the faculty are supportive and the campus has well-equipped libraries. For example, I can access online journals and study spaces that help me prepare for exams.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word order and grammar, and give a specific suggestion for change. Use linking words to connect your opinion and reason.

示例: I enjoy studying there overall, but I wish the university would enforce a stricter no-smoking policy. Many students smoke in public areas, which is unpleasant and affects air quality in study spaces.

建议: Provide a clearer, coherent plan with correct grammar and specific details (what you hope to achieve, timeline, and next steps). Keep it within a few concise sentences.

示例: I'm not completely sure yet, but I hope to graduate in 2027 with a degree in Banking and Finance. After that, I plan to apply for graduate internships in commercial banks to gain practical experience and hopefully secure a full-time role.

× I am majoring in banking and finance which I enjoy because it give me the knowledge finance.

✓ I am majoring in banking and finance, which I enjoy because it gives me knowledge about finance.

This sentence has sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issues. 'which' introduces a nonrestrictive clause and needs a comma. The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it' (referring to the major). Also 'the knowledge finance' is ungrammatical; use 'knowledge about finance' or 'knowledge of finance'. Suggestion: add the comma, change 'give' to 'gives', and rephrase the noun phrase to 'knowledge about finance'.

× I am studying at University of Economic and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

✓ I am studying at the University of Economics and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

Article and noun form errors combined with present continuous are present. Use the definite article 'the' with a specific institution. The institution's name should be 'Economics' (plural) not 'Economic'. Suggestion: add 'the' and correct the institution name to 'Economics and Finance'.

× I usually go to school very early because my university is far from my house, about 30 kilometers.

✓ I usually go to school very early because my university is far from my house, about 30 kilometres.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable for present habitual action, but 'kilometers' vs 'kilometres' is a spelling variant; ensure consistent regional spelling. No major grammar change needed. Suggestion: keep present simple 'usually go' for habitual actions and optionally use 'from my home' for more natural phrasing.

× To be honest I study in driving school but I frown up to study here because it provide good knowledge, support and opportunity to miss new people.

✓ To be honest, I study at a driving school, but I grew up studying here because it provides good knowledge, support, and opportunities to meet new people.

Multiple issues: preposition and article use ('in driving school' should be 'at a driving school'), verb choice ('frown up' is incorrect; likely 'grew up' or 'came here to study' — 'grew up studying here' fits), subject-verb agreement ('it provide' -> 'it provides'), and wrong verb 'miss' should be 'meet'. Also plural 'opportunity' -> 'opportunities'. Suggestion: add commas, correct prepositions, fix verb forms and agreement, and use 'meet' for encountering people.

× Would help me build you full friendship and improve my.

✓ It would help me build strong friendships and improve myself.

Pronoun and sentence structure errors: missing subject 'It' and incorrect object 'you' — should be 'strong friendships' (plural) and 'improve myself' (reflexive pronoun). The original lacks a complete verb phrase. Suggestion: include subject 'It', use 'strong friendships', and 'improve myself' to express self-improvement.

× I really enjoy the place where I study, but one thing it changes is behavior people many people smoking in public environment so I really hate it.

✓ I really enjoy the place where I study, but one thing I would change is people's behavior: many people smoke in public, and I really hate that.

Conjunction and sentence structure problems: 'one thing it changes' is incorrect; use 'one thing I would change'. 'behavior people many people smoking' is ungrammatical — use 'people's behavior' and 'many people smoke'. Add punctuation or conjunctions to connect clauses. Suggestion: rephrase to 'one thing I would change is people's behavior: many people smoke in public, and I really hate that.'

× I don't know but I hope I will get you this in 2027 and then I have a good job in multiple company and.

✓ I don't know, but I hope I will finish this in 2027 and then I will have a good job in several companies.

Future tense and pronoun errors: 'get you this' is unclear and incorrect — likely 'finish this' (graduate) fits. Use 'I will have' for future possession/state. 'Multiple company' should be 'several companies' or 'a job at multiple companies' (though working at multiple companies is odd; 'work for a company' or 'work for several companies' if freelancing). Remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: replace 'get you this' with 'finish this', use 'will have', and pluralize 'companies'.

× I'm a third year student at University of Economic and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

✓ I'm a third-year student at the University of Economics and Finance in Ho Chi Minh City, Vietnam.

Missing hyphen in 'third-year' when used as a compound adjective and missing definite article 'the' before the university name. The institution name should be 'Economics' (plural). Suggestion: hyphenate 'third-year', add 'the', and correct the institution name to 'Economics and Finance'.

× I study in driving school

✓ I study at a driving school

Preposition error: use 'at' for institutions like schools or 'in' for being inside a building; idiomatically 'study at a driving school' is correct. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'driving school'. Suggestion: use 'at a driving school'.