学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法と表現の自然さを改善してください。まず「second university student」は不自然で、学年を表すなら“second-year university student”が適切です。また“major in economic”は語順と単複に誤りがあり“major in economics”が正しいです。簡潔に答えるためにトピック文＋補足の構成（例：学年と専攻、簡単な理由）を使ってください。

示例: I'm a second-year university student, and I major in economics. I chose this major because I'm interested in how markets work.

建议: 冗長さと繰り返しを避け、具体性を加えてください。「I study in university」は情報が不十分で、大学名やキャンパスの場所などを一言加えると良いです。また“it is useful for me to study economics”は理由を明確にする必要があります。接続詞で文をつなげて論理的に述べてください。

示例: I study at National University, on the city campus. Studying economics there is valuable because the faculty offers practical courses and internship opportunities.

建议: 理由をもっと具体的にし、文を滑らかに繋げてください。「big library」よりも“a large library with…(資源や設備)”のように具体的に説明すると良いです。接続詞（for example, because, which）を使い、論理的に補足してください。

示例: Yes, it is. The campus has a large library with many study rooms and online resources, which helps me concentrate and access materials for my courses.

建议: 文法と表現を改善し、原因や提案を明確に述べてください。「change or repair air conditioners」より自然な言い方は“have the air conditioners in the university library repaired”です。さらに、なぜ必要か（暑さ、集中力低下など）や具体的な改善案を付け加えてください。

示例: Yes. I would like the university to repair the air conditioners in the library because they often break down, making it uncomfortably hot and hard to concentrate. Installing reliable units would improve the study environment.

建议: 文法（to studying → to study）を直し、計画をより具体的に述べてください。どのように英語を勉強するのか（クラス、留学、練習習慣など）や目標のレベル・期限を加えると説得力が増します。接続語で意図と方法をつなげましょう。

示例: I'm planning to study English more intensively by taking weekly conversation classes and practicing with native speakers online. My goal is to reach an intermediate level within a year so I can study abroad.

× I am a second university student.

✓ I am a second-year university student.

The phrase needs an article and a compound adjective. Use 'a' and 'second-year' to describe study level. Suggestion: use 'a second-year university student' or 'a sophomore' if appropriate.

× I am a major in economic.

✓ I am majoring in economics.

Use the verb 'major' with -ing or the noun phrase 'I am a major in economics'. Also 'economic' is adjective; use the noun 'economics'. Suggestion: 'I am majoring in economics' or 'My major is economics.'

× I study in university.

✓ I study at university.

In English, we usually say 'study at university' without an article when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'at university' or 'at the university' if referring to a specific institution.

× It is useful for me to study economics.

✓ Studying economics is useful for me.

This rephrase is more natural; the original was grammatically acceptable but awkward. Use gerund subject 'Studying economics' or keep original word order with 'It is useful for me to study economics.' Suggestion: 'Studying economics is useful for me.'

× I'm majoring in economics.

✓ I'm majoring in economics.

This sentence is correct. No change needed.

× Yes it is.

✓ Yes, it is.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural written punctuation. Otherwise correct.

× My university has big library so it is useful for me because I'm concentrating on studying.

✓ My university has a big library, so it is useful for me because I'm concentrating on my studies.

Include the article 'a' before 'big library'. Use a comma before 'so'. Replace 'studying' with the noun 'my studies' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: 'My university has a big library, so it helps me as I'm concentrating on my studies.'

× I want to change or repair air conditioners in universities library because it was broken by many accident.

✓ I want to have the air conditioners in the university library repaired because they were broken in many accidents.

Use 'the university library' (specific) and the passive 'have ... repaired' or 'repaired'. 'Air conditioners' is plural so refer with 'they'. 'Broken by many accident' is incorrect: use 'broken in many accidents' or 'damaged several times'. Suggestion: 'I want the air conditioners in the university library repaired because they have been damaged several times.'

× I'm planning to studying English and I want to speak English well.

✓ I'm planning to study English, and I want to speak English well.

Use the infinitive 'to study' after 'planning'; do not use 'to' plus -ing. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I'm planning to study English and improve my speaking.'

× It is hard for me but I'm fighting.

✓ It is hard for me, but I'm working hard.

'Fighting' is informal and ambiguous here. Use 'working hard' to express effort in studying. Add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: 'It is hard for me, but I'm working hard.'