自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Старайтесь давать более структурированный и краткий ответ: сначала утвердительный тезис, затем одно–два конкретных уточнения. Избегайте заполнителей (umm, uh) и повторов («kind of», «like»). Также улучшите грамматику: вместо «it wasn't kind of professional or like special for biking competition» лучше «it wasn't a professional racing bike». Максимальная длина — до 5 предложений; дайте конкретные детали (когда, где вы катались, что любили делать).

示例: Yes. I had a simple bike when I was a child. It wasn't a professional racing bike, but I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood. I especially enjoyed racing my friends and exploring nearby parks.

建议: Уберите паузы и разговорные вставки, сформулируйте ясный главный тезис и добавьте конкретные причины и примеры. Используйте связующие слова (for example, because, therefore) и корректную лексику: вместо «race of new generation» скажите «younger generation»; «more comfortable» — правильный порядок. Завершайте мысль — не оставляйте предложение незаконченным. Ограничьтесь до 3–4 предложений с конкретикой (статистика, наблюдения, примеры).

示例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country, especially among the younger generation. For example, many people now prefer cycling for short commutes because it is cheaper and healthier than driving. Cities have also added more bike lanes, which encourages more people to ride.

× it wasn't kind of professional or like special for biking competition, but at least I really enjoyed it.

✓ it wasn't really professional or specially made for bike competitions, but I really enjoyed it.

Incorrect use of -ing form and word choice: 'biking competition' should be 'bike competitions' (plural) and 'kind of' is informal and awkward here. 'Special for' is better phrased as 'specially made for'. Use 'really' for emphasis and remove unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: replace informal fillers, use 'specially made for bike competitions' and pluralize 'competitions'.

× Because, uh, recently I've noticed that there is a race of, uh, new generation, uh, who are really interested in biking rather than driving the cars

✓ Because recently I've noticed that there is a new generation who are really interested in biking rather than driving cars.

Tense and word choice: 'there is a race of new generation' is incorrect collocation; use 'a new generation' or 'a recent generation'. Also 'the cars' should be 'cars' without 'the'. Maintain present perfect 'I've noticed' and use plural 'cars'. Suggestion: use 'a new generation' and omit unnecessary articles and fillers.

× they found it more comfort, comfortable for them and.

✓ they find it more comfortable for them.

Incorrect adjective/noun use and tense: 'found' conflicts with present observation 'I've noticed'; use 'find'. 'More comfort, comfortable' mixes noun and adjective; use 'more comfortable'. The trailing 'and' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: say 'they find it more comfortable for them.'