自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable and provides personal details, which is good. To improve, make the response more concise and logically structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid confusing phrasing (e.g. “a gift for my mother” seems contradictory) and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words (e.g. “and,” “so,” “for example”) to make the sequence of ideas clearer, and keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small blue bike that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, and I often rode it to visit a friend and the neighbour two houses down. I loved riding around the neighborhood because it felt freeing and helped me make friends.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but is unclear and contains grammar errors and hesitations. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence (yes/no + short reason), then add one specific supporting detail or example. Avoid filler words and correct subject-verb agreement (e.g. “people prefer”). Use linking words like “however” or “instead” to clarify contrasts.

示例: Not really; bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer taxis or private cars. However, some people — especially students and people in small towns — still use bicycles to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift for my mother, a small blue bike and I used to ride it to visit my friend and the neighbor who lived 2 houses down.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my mother, a small blue bike, and I used to ride it to visit my friend and the neighbor who lived two houses down.

The original sentence used 'a gift for my mother' which implies the bike was given to the mother rather than given by the mother; use 'from' to indicate the giver. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses and change numeral '2' to the word 'two' for formality and style. These are not tense errors, but the main verb tenses (had, was, used to ride, lived) are correct for past narration. Suggestion: use 'from' for the giver and punctuate clauses clearly.

× Not actually, in my country everyone prefer to take a taxi or just walking or just buy their own car.

✓ Not really; in my country everyone prefers to take a taxi, walk, or buy their own car.

'Everyone' is singular and requires the third-person singular verb 'prefers' (subject-verb agreement). The parallel verbs should be in the same form: 'take a taxi, walk, or buy' rather than mixing infinitive and -ing form. 'Not actually' is unnatural here; 'Not really' fits conversational denial. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and maintain parallel structure for lists.

× Uh, I think it's dependent. Depends on the people who.

✓ Uh, I think it depends on the people.

The original contains a fragment 'Depends on the people who.' and an incorrect use of 'it's dependent' plus a disconnected clause. 'It depends on the people' is a complete, natural sentence meaning popularity varies by people. Remove the dangling 'who' or complete the clause (e.g., 'who live in cities'). Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure each clause is complete and connected.