自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify tense and meaning, use a clear topic sentence, limit to 2–3 supporting sentences, and use linking words. For example, say whether you had one or more bikes, describe each briefly (purpose, who used it), and use connectors like “first” and “later” to organise information. Also correct grammar (past tense) and avoid unclear fragments.

示例: Yes, I had two bikes when I was a child. The first was a four-wheeled balance bike for beginners, which helped me learn to ride safely, and the second was a small two-wheeler I used once I got better. Later, I practiced riding with friends around the neighbourhood, which made me more confident.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your opinion, use correct noun forms and past/present tense, and add a specific reason with an example. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” and avoid vague phrases like “it's kind of fun.” Be concise and provide one supporting detail and one brief example.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and recreation. For example, when I was a child almost every family in my village owned at least one bike, and children often rode together after school.

× Yes, when I was young. I have two bikes for the first one is has it had four wheels because it's for. New beginner for lighting and when I improve my.

✓ Yes, when I was young. I had two bikes. The first one had four wheels because it was for a new beginner learning, and later I improved my skills.

ID 6: Present tense issue. The student mixes present tense verbs (have, is, has) with past context 'when I was young'. Use past tense consistently: 'had' instead of 'have', 'was' instead of 'is', and 'had' for 'it had four wheels'. Also several fragments and word choice problems: 'for a new beginner learning' clarifies purpose, and 'later I improved my skills' completes the sentence. Suggestion: determine the time reference (past) then use past tense verbs throughout and combine fragments into complete sentences.

× In my opinion, I think bike is very popular in my country because when I was young, in my village every children have their own bike and it's kind of fun.

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are very popular in my country because when I was young, in my village every child had their own bike and it was kind of fun.

ID 1: Singular and plural issue (and subject-verb agreement). 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement. 'Every children' is incorrect; 'every' requires a singular noun 'every child'. Also tense consistency: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was young', and 'it's' changed to 'it was'. Suggestion: use plural for general statements, use 'every' with singular noun, and keep tense consistent with the time frame.