自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and structure: say “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child” and explain why with a reason such as ‘I couldn’t balance’ or ‘my parents didn’t buy one’. Avoid filler words and unfinished fragments.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I couldn’t balance properly. As a result, my parents decided not to buy one for me, and I learned to ride only later when I practiced with friends.

建议: Provide a clear opinion first, then explain with specific, coherent reasons and use linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘however’, ‘for example’). Use correct grammar and avoid contradictory statements. If you mean bikes are uncommon, say so and give cultural or practical reasons (infrastructure, safety, tradition).

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because there is limited cycling infrastructure and many people prefer motorbikes or cars. For example, cultural traditions and safety concerns mean that fewer adults, especially men, choose to cycle regularly.

× I didn't have because I wasn't, uh, use it on the. I can't balance.

✓ I didn't have one because I couldn't use it. I couldn't balance.

The student attempted to explain lack of a bike in the past. 'I didn't have' needs an object ('one' or 'a bike'). 'I wasn't, uh, use it on the.' is ungrammatical: the intended meaning is inability in the past, so use the past modal/capability structure 'couldn't' rather than 'wasn't ... use'. Also 'I can't balance' mixes present with past; since the context is childhood, use past tense 'couldn't balance'. Combine into two clear past-tense sentences: 'I didn't have one because I couldn't use it. I couldn't balance.' This fixes verb tense and provides the missing object. Suggestion: Always include the object after 'have' when referring to something (e.g., 'have a bike' or 'have one') and use 'couldn't' to express inability in the past. Use consistent past tense when describing past situations.

× No, not too much popular in my country because here only women and children they can use bikes and women they cannot because their their traditional.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular in my country because here only women and children can use them, and some women cannot because of their traditions.

Multiple issues: the original lacks a clear subject and proper word order ('No, not too much popular' is ungrammatical). Use 'bikes are not very popular' to form a correct clause (subject + be + adjective). The phrase 'only women and children they can use bikes' uses a redundant pronoun 'they' — remove it and use proper object pronoun 'them' for 'bikes'. 'Women they cannot because their their traditional' is ungrammatical and repeats words; express the reason with 'some women cannot because of their traditions.' This corrects pronoun misuse, word order, and missing preposition 'because of'. Suggestion: Use explicit subjects and avoid redundant pronouns (do not say 'women they'). Use 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. Use 'because of' + noun to explain reasons (e.g., 'because of their traditions').