自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, make your sentences more concise, avoid small redundancies (e.g., "did have" → "had"; "all the time" and "especially in the summer time" overlap), and add one specific detail (a memory, place, or feeling) to make the response more vivid. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I loved riding it and often cycled with friends to the nearby park during summer, which felt freeing and exciting.

建议: Your answer addresses the question and offers a clear comparison between past and present. To improve, tighten sentence structure, use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") for coherence, and add a brief reason or example showing why motorcycles replaced bikes (safety, status, convenience). Avoid repetition like "not as popular, not anymore"—choose one phrase.

示例: They're less popular now than before. When I was a child bikes were common; however, many teenagers now prefer motorcycles because they’re faster and seen as more convenient once they can get a license at 15.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary in a positive past-tense statement. Use the simple past 'had' for affirmative sentences. Suggestion: Use 'I had' not 'I did have' unless emphasizing contrast or surprise, which is not needed here.

× I loved riding it and we used to go cycling with my friends all the time, especially in the summer time.

✓ I loved riding it and we used to cycle with my friends all the time, especially in the summertime.

Combine consistent verb choice: 'go cycling' and 'cycle' are both acceptable; 'used to cycle' is more concise. Also 'summertime' is one word commonly used. Suggestion: Use 'used to cycle' or 'went cycling', and use 'summertime' as a single word.

× They are not as popular, not anymore at least.

✓ They are not as popular anymore, at least.

The phrase 'not anymore at least' is awkwardly ordered. Place 'anymore' after the adjective and add 'at least' as a parenthetical. Suggestion: Use 'They are not as popular anymore, at least.'

× When I was a child bikes were really popular, but now children are more keen on riding motor motorcycles when they can get a license for that, which is typically at 15 years old.

✓ When I was a child, bikes were really popular, but now children are keener on riding motorcycles once they can get a license, which is typically at 15 years old.

Add a comma after the introductory clause. 'Bikes' is fine but 'motor motorcycles' is redundant; use 'motorcycles' or 'motorbikes'. 'More keen on' should be 'keener on' for comparative adjective. 'When they can get a license' is better expressed as 'once they can get a license'. Suggestion: Use 'keener on riding motorcycles once they can get a license' and remove redundancy.